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If I Fall: Chapter 20
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For her own part, Alice was in a bit of a daze throughout the entirety of Jules’ set. It wasn’t like she hadn’t tried to pay attention to her girlfriend. She had internally scolded herself numerous times during the past forty-five minutes when she realized her mind was once again drifting off to thoughts of Dana. And with every new song that had ended with Alice staring blankly into space and the subsequent applause surrounding her shaking her from her reverie, she happened to grow more agitated. Once again, she couldn’t believe how selfish Dana could be sometimes. She’d concede that for the most part, Dana was generally a very loyal friend. But when it really came down to Dana getting what she wanted, at the exact moment she wanted it, the athlete could be tremendously self-absorbed. Getting hammered and coming onto Alice was bad enough as far as the writer was concerned, but she was willing to chalk it up to a thoughtless night of overwrought, drunken emotions. But confronting her like she did in The Planet’s bathroom… their bathroom…while her girlfriend was set to begin her performance was just downright unfair. Yet, as much as Alice wanted to target all of her ire at Dana, she knew for the most part, she was only really angry with herself. Angry for letting Dana put her in that position, angry for wanting to be in that position, angry for not being able to admit that it was Dana she wanted, but most of all, angry for not letting herself have what she wanted.
Once again, the band wrapped up another song and the crowd responded with thunderous applause, and even a few hollers. And this was again enough to interrupt Alice ‘s thoughts, realizing the set was over and trying her best to join in with the applause of the crowd.
"Thank you. Thank you so much. Goodnight." Jules blew a kiss to the crowd and walked off stage, followed by the rest of her band. Immediately the foursome were swarmed by people congratulating them. Alice couldn’t help but stand back and watch Jules accept the well-deserved accolades proudly. .
"She was really great, Al." Dana plainly stated from behind her.
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As promised, I have returned, so huzzah or some other such thing. To start with, I must have skipped over your disclaimer this morning…I read it and didn’t stop laughing for a good five minutes. Thinking about it now is making me giggle again. I’m glad I don’t have any roommates, or I’d be off to the loony bin for sure. As for the story…well, I hope you’re being serious about the angst letting up soon. Sure, I can be a drama whore in my story, but it’s usually only for a chapter or two. Alice needs to get over herself. I mean, yeah, protecting yourself is all well and good, but you only get so far in life by observing it going on around you. And Dana needs to prove herself with more than just words. (Sidenote…when they finally do reconcile, can it be on a tennis court? The tennis dresses make me drool). And I’ll be glad to take Jules off Al’s hands when she goes back to the love of her life. Oh, and I’m glad somebody agrees with me on the Mariah thing. The very idea makes me cringe, but I have a friend who swears up and down that she’s actually pretty good. Whatev. Okay, now that I’ve babbled your life away, I’ll leave this with a plea for you to post again soon. I still heart this story even though it makes me want to tear out my hair.
forget what muted said about the angst! we LOVE the angst… how can we have steamy, tension filled bathroom moments without angst? don’t hurry it- they’ve only just now started admitting the problem- that ought to be good for at least a few more chapters! : ) loved the scene with Bette too–“The unfamiliar feeling of optimism was a welcome change, and it was as if Bette’s words lifted up a bit of the burden she’d be carrying around lately.” very nice Swis. Post soon.
oh how i’ve waited for you, checking each day to see if you’ve posted and today my lord wat did i see your name…soo worth the wait wat a sad ending tho i love this story great work!!!!!
Nice Update, filled without alot of Danish angst, but we know what happens after Danish angst….Danish Lovin’
If I didn’t know how much you loved danish too, I’d be worried. :-) I must ask that you make us suffer at least a little while longer, but please throw us a bone once in a while. :-)
i love the angst. keep it coming. but i do see the light at the end of the tunnel.
Please update this story there are not enough dana and alice storys out there…… the story is great
am i first?? i’m never first for anything! anyway, i have to say this was a great chapter! i feel so bad for dana but she put herself in this position. can’t wait to see what happens next. post soon!
Okay, I need to rush to my dead end job so I just skimmed this over, but it looks more than good. I’ll read it when I get home tonight and leave a much better, or at least more well-thought-out, comment then. Yay, you posted right after me! We rule.
Yippee! Fresh Danish! Great chapter swismiss. I am looking forward to how the story continues to unfold…
So glad to see you updating this story. Feeling sorry for Dana but, yeah, she put herself in this position. Your writing is wonderfully easy to read and the whole story seems to flow so well – lovin’ it!
haha, way to call me out, cape! Nah, the angst is good. I do heart the tension, as long as it leads to good things. You’ve already promised it will, so carry on. :P
Oh I fvuking love this story :) it has been a long time since you posted but I’m sure we all remember the story as I do. Keep posting and post soon thx chick xx
wow. glad you’re back posting again :)
where u at swissmiss i miss you and this story so so much. u kno ur my favourite please come back soon :)