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If I Fall: Chapter 4
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“Baby, I know it’s a tough choice, but we can just flip a coin if you…,” Alice trailed off as she turned around and saw a visibly shaken Dana staring out into the darkness of the night. Alice was about to step towards her and find out what was wrong until Dana quickly turned to face her, wearing the same sad, pitiful expression that she had worn this morning when confronting her about her latest stalking endeavor. This wasn’t lost on Alice as she slowly retreated from the tennis player and shut her eyes.
“Fuck”, she whispered. “What is it, Dana?”
“Al, sit down.”
”I’d rather stand, thanks.”
Dana surveyed the room and nodded slowly. “Okay…we need to talk about-“
“Save it, ” Alice interrupted.
“What?” Dana asked confused.
“I can’t believe you’re doing this.”
“But Alice, I haven’t done anything.”
“Right, Dana, but you’re about to. You think I don’t know what this is? You’re breaking up with me right now, aren’t you?”
Dana began to protest but then realized there was no use. Alice could always read her like a book. Yet another thing that terrified her so much about this woman. She knew exactly what Dana was thinking and feeling in almost any given circumstance. Yet when it came to reading Alice lately, it was just impossible to figure out even an iota of what was going on in that head of hers. Between the pills and Alice’s recent jealous, possessive girlfriend act, Dana struggled to remember a time when she really knew her at all.
She forced herself to meet Alice’s eyes in order to try to relay some sort of silent assent to her question. Dana just couldn’t bring herself to verbalizing the actual words ‘I don’t want to be with you anymore’, but she knew she’d have to for the sake of both of their sanities…well, whatever was left of them.
"I’m so sorry, Alice.”
Alice just stood there, without a word, staring down at her hands and biting back the unshed tears threatening to fall at any second.
"You know I love you, but it just…it just hasn’t been working,” Dana continued.
This was enough to force Alice’s tears to start streaming down her face. “Not working? Right. That’s not what this is about and you know it, Dana. You checked out on me the second Lara came back into the picture and you’re just tired of keeping up this charade.”
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Damn. I think you’ve outdone yourself with this one. I was in tears, and fanfic barely ever does that to me. And thanks for the compliment, although it’s undeserved…Danish needs justice because of the way they ended, and that’s that. This was incredibly moving and tragic, and I love the fact that you had dana leave for Alice’s own good instead of her own insecurities.
Wow! This was really sad. I cried when I first saw the break up and you made me feel all over again the same pain. Thanks for the emotions, they felt so real it hurts.
Man, from the euphoria of my J-E-T-S Jets, Jets, Jets – to the despair of my danish…You nailed it. As much as I wish I could be disappointed in Dana, I can understand why she needed to break away from Alice, but I also understand why Alice was crushed by Dana’s desertion. All I can do right now is sigh. It would be so much more fun to have Dana have to watch Alice eventually move on without her if she didn’t get cancer and die. I guess that’s why I read fanfic. Their love lives on – even when they’re not together. I wonder how long it will take for Lara the vulture to pounce.Great job! Keep it up!
OMG this is just so tragic and heartbreaking and bloody well written at the same time! Your writing amazes me. xx
Even knowing what’s going to happen, it’s still really tough to take. Poor Alice, poor Dana. Well written, swiss. Post soon.
I’m not sure how I missed this one, but I am all caught up and this is fantastic and heartbreaking. You’re doing a wonderful job my friend. You did the scene justice. So my question is, when do they get back together??? lol. Great job. Looking forward to the next chapter. PPS
This is such a remarkably well written chapter … I have enjoyed the previous 3 chapters … but this really gave so much weight to the existing material. Keep going … I can’t wait for the next update.