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Let it Ride- Chapter 11
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Helena stood and embraced Dana wholeheartedly. Dana returned the welcome, comforting gesture and whispered, "Where’s Al?"
The Brit took Dana’s hand and led her down the hall, saying, "The doctor came to us an hour ago. Her fever seems to be breaking and she’s stirring now and again."
Dana’s breath left in a noisy puff and Helena looked over, squeezing her hand lightly as she said, "I think the worst is over, Dana."
The tennis player nodded but couldn’t speak. It all seemed so surreal. These dramatic events never happened in real life. It was so absurd that she might have laughed if she hadn’t suspected it would lead her to tears.
Helena stopped outside of Alice’s room and gave Dana a gentle nudge, saying, "I’ll warn you if someone comes to check on her."
Dana nodded again, too grateful to say anything.
Pushing the door open, she slipped inside to find Alice looking painfully small in an oversized bed with Lenore asleep in a chair beside her.
Rushing forward, Dana felt tears prick her eyes as she picked up Alice’s hand and wrapped it in hers; intertwining the fingers as she ran her other hand over Alice’s hair.
Alice’s face was still flushed but the rosy color was beginning to recede. Her hair was damp with sweat and her other arm was lying on top of the scratchy wool fibered blanket; an IV secured to her wrist with medical tape.
Dana felt a wracking sob surge up inside of her so unexpectedly that she didn’t have time to stifle it. The gasping, choking sound of her voice woke Lenore, who immediately rose from her chair and came around to wrap Dana in her arms.
The tennis player let her girlfriend’s mother hush her soothingly as she delicately stroked Dana’s hair and the act was so intimate and maternal that Dana felt herself crying even harder.
"Shhh," Lenore was whispering placatingly, "She’s gonna be just fine, sweetheart. Alice is a strong girl."
Dana felt herself clutching Lenore tightly and as her body relaxed and her breathing evened out, she said quietly, "I love her."
Lenore pulled back, letting Dana see the happy surprise in her eyes and the older woman cupped Dana’s cheek as she stated, "I see that. And I’m glad."
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Alice popped an eye open and immediately felt as if someone had filled her head with nails. Her head was pounding mercilessly and her vision was so bleary she couldn’t even see where she was. It felt like the worst hangover on earth.
She was conscious of movement to her left and she squinted as hard as she could; feeling relatively certain that the shapes were human.
Her vision cleared somewhat as her eyes opened further, adjusting to the light and enabling her to identify the human-y shapes.
The unlikely sight of her mother embracing her girlfriend convinced her that she was having an out of body experience.
Her voice came out in a raspy croak as she questioned indignantly, "What the fuck? Am I dead?"
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OMG you had me laughing at the end with Al’s words frip…Don’t know how you managed to write so much in such a shirt period of time and then for me to read them is amazing. I liked how you had the whole scenario of how one has to wait for anykind of news of a loved one. Thanks frip loved it
Seriously…GO TO BED!!! Lol. I love this more than ever, but you’ll kill yourself posting at this rate. And give us some time to process! Haha, I’m kidding, if you’re this into it you may as well let it all out. I was that way too, still am mind you, I just can’t get myself to write so much so quickly. I’m a perfectionist who feels compelled to mull over every chapter I post. I’m glad Al’s okay and that Lenore is appearing to be nice. Okay I still need a little time to get this into my head, but it’s great. Oh, and I’m from the lovely corn-filled state of Illinois. Yay me. Except not really, lol.
fripster, I just post the comment to your last post. And here you are with another post. I was right, you are on “ludicrous speed.” You are killing me. Now I shall read this post.
I barely finished 6 chapters of Goldrun15’s “Crossroads” and you posted chap 9. With the speed you are writing, I will not get to Tiff_Duke for a while. Church lady, you had me laughing. Pick another frame, it will save your eyeballs. Take my word, my eyes are degenerating because of all the abuse during my crazy partying years. I too tend not to read anything other than Danish. A little bit of the others are ok, just like the way you have written. As for this chapter, love the drama and it read like a thriller. I could not wait to find out what would happen next. It just proves to me once again why I like this story so much. “Bette was occupying herself by reading instructions to the Heimlich maneuver”, too much. fripster, I could not stop laughing after the 2 last sentences, “What the fuck? Am I dead?” Where do you come up will all these unbelievable ideas & lines? I felt like doing a Wayne & Garth ‘s “I am not worthy” bow. Just tell me that you are not going to make Dana sick too with her scratchy throat? Then again, we might need the drama. And thank you for waking A up before the end of the chapter. Thank you again. btw, I second MT’s comment above which was a laugh and a half too. p.s. See it took me like an hour to read and comment a chapter meaning I am slow.
Wow! I had to catch with the last 2 chapters because I was at work, but what can I say? I love Alice’s last words, but of course, we know she’s not dead. (She better not be!) I love how Dana is so devoted to Alice. She drove back just to see her girlfriend. I love the part with Lenore and Dana, which was really bittersweet. I also loved Alice’s last word from chapter 10. The Six Million Dollar Man?? lol Will Dana be upset with Alice for not staying at home, and will she be more upset when she found out what kind of pills that she took? Well I guess I won’t find out until the new chapter!!! You’re a great writer and I wanted to tell you that myself. You make me want more and more with your story!!! Keep it up and PPS!
Hee! I have my own theme song! ;-D You are incredible. Not only do you post another great chapter but your author’s notes are almost as entertaining. So glad Alice is OK and it appears this incident will not impact her rock star aspirations. I also like how you wrote Lenore — I think she does have some good mother in her. And I gotta know — was it Lee Major’s plane that she used? I also loved how you wrote Helena in this one — so strong but also so fragile. And Dana rushing back to be with Alice was wonderful. Your chapters are always so rich in detail, too. Like how you descibed Alice’s blanket at the hosptal. It’s subtle, but, just shows what a strong writer you are. I could go on but I want to get these comments done before you post another chapter… ;-D I forgot to mention in my comments that I loved you using “cogitate” in one of your summaries. That is one of my favorite words and I think it needs to be used more in conversation.
I love Alice! You have wrote the very soul of what she would be like. And the dedication amongst that group of friends is excellent. You’ve even made her mother seem real but I never doubted that she loved her child. She just has a problem she needs some help with. Great update!!
Alice is too fucking funny! I can’t imagine her saying anything else but that. PPS
i like fripsterbot. through all of your posts today i had so many things to say and now i can’t remember them. i do remember something about a fanny pack, and i agree – they are hideous and useful at the same time. this was an awesome chapter. i love what alice says at the end of the chapter. bette and helena are cute together. though i could never picture it on the show – you make it work. i love helena. and i love how you seem to have a character on all of the characters, not just danish. so we agree… three more posts tomorrow? ok sounds good. kidding, kidding. get some sleep or a life or something, bot! again kidding cause then that would mean i need to get one as well and we can’t have that happening. ok good night, good weekend, cheers!
okay quick comment here, I’m late as usual for sure, my professor has dragged me into an effing contest without briefing me and my teammates saying it’s a boring two-day seminar. Anyway, I was hoping you’d post so I’d feel better about my day and yay! lucky me, you did. what the fuck am I dead? hahah Alice is just great, and I’m glad that Lenore’s finally being a good mother. Dana coming home at the wee hours of the am is really sweet, just to see Alice. And who would’ve guessed that the first person to hear her say she loved Al was Lenore? all in all this is an awesome chapter. Loved it again. thanks for the update!!!x0x