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Lucky – Chapter 23
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“You can lose the smug look Bette. You’re not off the hook yet.”
The brunette pouts, knowing the role that she is meant to be playing here. She would let Tina direct this little game.
“Do you want a doormat for a girlfriend Bette?” Tina asks, dropping her feet to the floor and turning to face Bette.
The brunette shakes her head.
“Pardon?” The blonde quickly responds.
“No” The brunette quickly answers, smiling as she does.
“No, what?” The blonde demands leaning forward.
“Tina?” The brunette asks a bit confused.
“Correct” The blonde smiles, knowing Bette would have first initially thought of the ‘M’ word.
“I know that for the most part I am your little… plaything. But we must re-establish some kind of equilibrium every now and then babe. Do you agree?”
The brunette isn’t convinced, how did Tina think they would ‘re-establish’ that equilibrium? Bette squints her eyes, mulling it over.
“Hmmm, so you think you can treat me like a house pet, or a piece of furniture and just generally tease the hell out of me?”
Bette just smiles, her expression translating a ‘yes’.
“And that is precisely why we have a clause in our contract. Let me remind you… On the rare occasion that I get too big for my boots Tina will be allowed to put me in my place… “
“However she sees fit…” Bette finishes the sentence for her. Immediately thinking she can worm her way out of it she begins to apologize “I’m sorry T”
“I know babe, but it’s not about that” Tina replies smiling slyly, she had recited this from Friday nights activity where Bette had spanked her for misbehaving.
Bette picks up on this, her head whipping up. ‘Oh shit, she means business’ the brunette is now slightly concerned.
Tina leans forward taking Bette’s chin gently. “I would like you to give yourself to me, just think of it as switching roles for the next hour” Tina declares confidently, though secretly feeling like mush.
“Ummm, I really don’t think so T” Bette says honestly.
“Well why you think about it, how about we disregard all of the other rules too” Tina grins.
Bette sighs, knowing that this relationship was about give and take. For the majority of the time they were both happy for Bette to take, but she knew that Tina was right.
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wow. though I have never personally experienced a relationship such as this one, you write so beautifully. Bette is naturally the alpha and therefore in charge but giving herself to Tina is the ultimate act of love. good job. pps
Hi Bayley,your comments made it clear what you were going for in this chapter, and I think you achieved your goal. It may not have been the most “on the edge” chapter you have written, but it does show the overall dynamic of this B/t relationship. You may have put it best in the last line of this post where you talk about the “silent communication” and how they both seem to understand the other’s desires. Hope you post soon. I’m with sporty, I check to see if you’ve posted!
Bayley – This is going to be long and I may be totally off base from what you are trying to portray in this story but this is my comprehension. In the context of this story “punishment” is not a penalty for wrong doing or a means of discipline to correct bad behaivor or change a behaivor instead it’s the endgame for their BDSM game play. Tina’s need to be sexually pleasured in ways that are dehumanizing, cruel and painful is satisfied by Bette dolling out “punishments” and Bette gets her sexual pleasure from the power she feels over Tina when she brings her to the brink of tolerance. Since Tina has such a high tolerance level and Bette has a cruel nature her acts and actions get progressively more intense to the point of almost breaking Tina. In order to maintain control they implement safe words, consent, and the “contract” to establish the boundaries of how far they will take their roles and each is trusting the other to stay within these established boundaries so it remains pleasurable for both. For me this chapter of Bette “submitting” to Tina was necessary to give Tina the assurance that the agreement between them is binding and that Bette can be trusted to follow through on her word giving credence to Bette’s genuineness in this relationship but what I got from it was just another of Bette’s manipulative tactics of keeping her possession and reasserting her power. The actions and thoughts that went through her mind whether it would pleasure Tina or not just confirmed that Tina doesn’t have any recourse should Bette really get out of hand and I’m not convinced that even the “safe word” would work with Bette if she was out of control. Bette knows exactly what methods to use whether it’s cuddling or spanking to keep her plaything and pet exactly where she wants her. I don’t think what Tina did to Bette to “put her in her place” was important. As a reader I was more interested in seeing Bette wholeheartedly giving “temporary control” over to Tina by showing her that she totally respected, trusted, and loved her and that it wasn’t just an act to satisfy her deviant proclivities. By trying to worm out of the agreement and only agreeing to submit once Tina threatened to disregard the other rules gave me the impression that Bette is more devious than already established and things are going to get progressively worse.
Quite a remarkable chapter, I must say. I really enjoyed Bette’s thought process in this chapter, and that you let on how truly vulnerable she can be. It’s important to know one’s strengths and weaknesses, just as Tina is finding out here. It is obviously difficult for Bette to take what she gives, and that’s understandable, but I think this role reversal was crucial to their relationship. A Domme or general “top” should know how each punishment feels before using them on someone else, otherwise he/she could accidentally injure their partner. I’m really glad you decided to write and post this chapter, because it really peers into the emotional depths of a game like this, and allows others to see that while it might not be a usual practice, there are reasons for every tease and jolt. Bette and Tina’s play was well-constructed, as was the rest of this chapter. Well done.
Didn’t really like the role reversal but totaly understand why it had to be done… Bette giving her self to Tina in that way shows how deep her love is for her… Please keep them coming I looke for updates every hr ;)lol
Maybe it’s my naivete about BDSM relationships but I don’t see how this is an act of love or how Bette gave up any control. Tina didn’t gain any ground. All she’s done is given Bette another reason to punish her and the cruelty is escalating. If it’s in the contract that Tina can put Bette in her place if she gets too cocky why are there repercussions? Like I said I just don’t get it but I’m trying to be open minded so hopefully I can stick it out until the end.
Thats it??? Bette treated Tina as a pet and what not. And Bette gets THIS punishment??? Treat Tina well or get Bette punished more. What does equal relationship mean?? BDSM is fine, but … where is EQUAL in it??
Thanks for your comments. Maybe I should explain a little about this chapter. The purpose was for Tina to indicate to Bette that she had on a couple of occasions pushed Tina a bit too far (the shelf incident, the conversation on the phone). By the end of their little switch they both come away feeling they understand their boundaries better. Bette’s naughty visions of what she would do to Tina would have happened regardless of whether chapter 23 happened or not. And when Tina is on the receiving end, she will not see this as a punishment – she will love every minute. My intention was for Bette to learn she needs to rein in her cheekiness, and for Tina to witness Bette’s love and respect by seeing her temporarily becoming the submissive. We all respond in different ways, for Tina to possibly restrain Bette and spank her would not have worked in this instance, as Bette does in no way enjoy being spanked – whereas Tina does. Every relationship is different. I hope this explains this one a little better?
I’m glad that Bette was strong enough to let Tina be in control. It’s nice to flip the script every now and then =) Gorgeous story.
Great that Bette let Tina take control. Excellent update. Thank you
That was hot and nice to see Bette giving herself to Tina !