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More Than a Feeling
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“How ‘bout pets? Dogs, cats, a hamster? Anything?” Carmen bit the edge of her lip, waiting for a response. I shoulda known. She sighs, moving a strand of hair behind her ear as she looks down, avoiding eye contact. “Look, I’m sorry if you thought I led you on, but this can’t go anywhere if I don’t get to know you better.” She looks back up at Shane, who still hasn’t moved. “I’m sorry.”
Shane huffed, setting her jaw. She hated talking about herself. Why should anyone care? What did Carmen gain to know that her mother gave her up when she was seven, leaving her to jump from shitty foster home to shitty foster home, leaving her angry, hurt and alone? What did she have to gain from telling it?
Carmen sighed again, reaching into her back pocket and retrieving a card and a pen. Writing, she said, “I’m here again tomorrow and the next day, but after that, who knows.” She handed Shane the card. “That’s my home number on the back. No more games huh? You call me when you want to talk.”
Shane took the card, exhaling loudly. Fuck. She opened the door, stealing one last glance at Carmen before hopping out. She closed the door and pulled a cigarette from her pocket, jamming it between her lips, hurrying out to the street, muttering, “God damn mother…come all the way out here for a fucking card…two and a half fucking hours….” Fuck…you traveled two and a half hours for a girl! You’ve never done that before. And, its not just a fucking card, it has her home number on it. Her HOME number! Go back there and talk to her! Shane stopped and turned, but Carmen’s van was already gone.
**Carmen’s interrogation was partially taken from Season 2, Episode 3 “Loneliest Number.”
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The next day…
Bette pulled up to Tina’s house, frowning when Tina wasn’t outside. Every day since they started, Tina had either been exiting the house just as Bette pulled up, or was waiting either on her front step or at the curb. That’s odd. Bette couldn’t help but think that yesterday’s events might have led to Tina’s non-appearance, but tried to convince herself otherwise. People were allowed to be late, weren’t they? We’ve all had those days. I’ll give her five minutes before I go in and see what’s happening.
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IM SOOO GLAD YOU FOUND THE TIME TODAY TO POST.I WAS MISSING THIS STORY.PLEASE FOLLOW IT UP REAL SOON. THXS
I’ve been missing this story like crazy! Can’t wait for B&T to talk about what happened at the beach. Oh and this cracked me up: “Okay.” Tina stood back and let Bette leave, suddenly feeling better about everything. She felt weightless, numb…And then the sting of her sunburn returned. LMAO!
You post! this is so good! i like so much this story! poor Tina with she must to feel bad! i am waiting for the talk too!
Ahh i love your story so much, post again and soon…maybe even tonight, hopefully with a lot more on bette and tina!
Right now I’m at work and the excitement of this new chapter hasn’t subsided yet. Once I return to a relaxed state of mind, I’ll add a follow-up comment. Viva More Than a Feeling!
Yay! It was about time Manda! lol, I know people get busy most of the time… so, what’s the deal between Lara and Dana? well, I know what’s the deal but I want my Danish!!
Yay! So glad you posted Manda! Nothing to forgive, just glad you haven’t forgotten about us! Can’t wait for more!
i missed this story, i’m glad you’re back…can’t wait for B&T to talk and also how dana is going to explain lara to everybody
Thank goodness, I was starting to wonder if you were ever coming back! ;) Poor Tina. But I can’t wait until they talk. As for Dana and Alice, I worry about them, as a couple, but I hope everything works out. Please don’t keep us waiting as long next time! :)
MANDA! finally hun! omggg, so glad you posted. You know i am in absolute love with your story, awesome post, and please please try hard and post sooner..i can’t wait to see shane with carmen and tina’s talk with bette…adios!
Ahh poor Tina and can’t wait for her and Bette talk. This is good that Dana give Alice a chance and let them work thing out. Ok post soon please, thanks!
gee whiz, i hope you find time and energy to post soon, i’m enjoying this story so much and time Bette and Tina had that ‘talk’.
yes!!!!! you are back *does happy dance*. poor sunburned tina. hope you post again soon with b&t’s talk. =)
Great to see a post from you – I love this story. I’m trying to picture Tina as a tomato LOL, I bet she is the cutest tomato in history :o)) I can understand why Dana gave in to Alice, but I still think it’s a mistake. She is visible smitten with Lara. I’m really looking forward to B&T going to talk after school, they need it and so do I…..post soon.
High school Bette, Tina, Alice, Dana and Shane are fun to read about. All those feelings and scared of what to do with them. I really hope that both Bette and Tina can have an open discussion about what to do next. This is hard to pick about Dana, Alice, and Lara. My first pick would be Alice. Shane really should let Carmen in. Excited about what the next post will include
Hey Manda. So happy to see you post. Was missing this… Love the way the story is progressing and looking forward to B&T’s talk … now what will Alice do when Lara joins them for lunch…
Manda, girl, I have been laid up from a martial arts injury facing potential back surgery since my promise to comment on 6/21/06. As for me, M to the E = no SURGE to the RY! I’m hoping to get out of it. Anyway, you know I’m still craving this story in a way that is completely unhealthy yet satisfying. All of the ladies in this story have a had a rough couple of days so hopefully they get some quality time with their significant others and work it all out. Hope you’ll hook us up with another chapter soon. Go easy with the school and seriously take some time out for yourself this summer.