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Palm Spring Break Chapter 2
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Bette unlocked the room with a swipe of the key card and they both stepped inside.
It was interesting to hear everyones stories today. I cant say I was surprised to hear Shanes was set at elementary school, Tina casually wandered into the room as she spoke.
Your story was my favourite, Bette said as she placed her purse on the stand by the door.
Do you remember our first real date? Tina inquired, curious as to whether or not the event held similar significance for Bette as it did for her.
What kind of question is that? Bette was a bit offended. Of course I remember – Ive never been so nervous in my entire life
YOU were nervous, imagine how I was feelingbesides, what did you have to be nervous about?
Bette hesitated before she continued. She had fostered quite the reputation for being a hard *****, both in her career and in her personal life. But if she couldnt open up to Tina, whom could she open up to?
Her heart won out over her head as she replied.
I knew I was already falling in love with you, she began and then she quickly continued. I know it seems absurd, we barely knew each other and you had only just stopped seeing Eric, but every time I saw you, I felt butterflies in my stomach and I even felt light headed her rambling trailed off to silence.
So from your description, it was either love or food poisoning, Tina smiled as she turned down the sheets on one side of the bed. Bette so rarely spoke with this intensity of emotion; she didnt really know how to respond.
Bette quietly moved in behind Tina and wrapped her arms around her waist. She continued reminiscing about the night of their first real date as she molded her body to Tinas and talked with a low throaty voice into her ear.
You looked amazing that night. But you looked amazing each time I saw you. I knew I was smitten, Bette gently swayed with Tina as she spoke of her memories. I didnt want to make you uncomfortable, so I really tried to take things slowlybut what I really wanted to do that night was this
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(27 votes, average: 4.37 out of 5)
I think you copped out at the last.
This is very, very good in its immediacy and impact.
I rarely give a directive, but I think you should go back and extrapolate – go further with the details. Don’t be afraid!
Here’s a ‘5’ even if you should decide not to. But you could make a good chapter even better.
Thanks.
that was a great love scene…i can’t wait to see where you take this story next.
Have to agree with Techgal here – bit of a cop out. Why? You might not have written a love scene before but this was very good. Go for a re-write! I know what you mean about villans. You have to have the lows to get the highs.
This is excellent. Sweet and hot. Love it.
Loved it. You did a great job. thank you.
Quite nice, but I’m glad it appears that you were goaded into a greater detail version…off to there next.
What a beautiful love scene, that’s so hot and awesome. Love it, post soon. Thanks!