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Round n Round We Go (Ch.15)
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Chapter Fifteen
7 years had gone by…
The Planet was packed as usual after nine, people were dancing, drinking, having a good time with their friends. Kit had remodeled this place into a fabulous coffee club, but then because of the market, it began to hold night parties again, starting the buzz on the dance floor way earlier than before. It was exciting, party, liquor, flirting, but sometimes I missed the old Planet, where on those non-theme nights people could have dinner and coffee after work in relative peace, the crazy night life of Los Angeles people wouldn’t start until midnight. Now I really missed the old Planet.
“Excuse me, hi, bartender?” I called the provocatively dressed man mixing cocktail for some giggling girls and flirting with another guy at the bar. He was kept so busy the whole time I had arrived and only came once to see if I needed something. I caught his attention fairly quickly this time. “Bennie, right? Can I have another Long Island ice tea? Put it on my tab please.” Though extremely stressed out and worried, I still remained civil but my temper was wearing out.
“Right away.” He said so, and disappeared into the waves of laughter and banters.
I sighed heavily, and glanced across the room to the swarming dance floor. It bothered me to no end. Where did the old DJs go, those who knew anything about music and didn’t torture people with abomination like the ones playing right now? My head started to throb in pain, my drink still hadn’t arrived, my hands balled up into fists and my knuckles went white. “Where the fuck is my ice tea? Gosh I seriously don’t understand why Kit even pay you for this service.” I yelled at Bennie and was surprised that I was frustrated enough that my voice reached to a malicious pitch. I rarely spoke louder to anybody like that. But this bartender was just pushing at the wrong button.
The girls and guys looked at me as if I lost my mind temporarily and stopped flirting. Bennie was clearly scared of me. He ducked into the liquor shelve and mixed up my drink. Without making any eye contact, he pushed the glass in front of me.
“Thank you.” I tried again, to sound less vicious, and gulped a mouthful of the freezing liquid. The amber alcohol swirled in the glass, I looked into it and it was looking back at me, its coldness, iciness, cruelness, taunting me. I felt like crying. And I did, sobbing just a little into the back of my hand. This was not supposed to happen. With everything seemed to fall into the norm, this was not supposed to happen. I was not ready and would never be ready.
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My dear readers!
I just did a major change in my story telling. I changed from third person perspective to first person POV!
How do you like it? I want to know if you prefer this writing technique to the old one. It’s okay if you’d like me to return to third person view point. I’ll just rewrite this chapter and the next one.
And I know there are questions unanswered, things unresolved. But things will gradually work out.
Thank you for reading and please, COMMENT on this one because I need your direction.
Peace
woo！now I see the big picture here! You’ve handled well with the child part, so can we see the duo have some passionate action next chapter? I am hanging and waiting, thanks for the adequate updating!
Passionate action, huh, well, maybe not the next chapter immediately but soon, I guarantee.
There’s just so many emotions and complicated issues between the two.
I hope you’ll enjoy this more. I’m actually improvising here.
And I am reading “down to earth ” by browneyedgirl28,and she hasn’t updated it for nearly two months ,soooo frustrating!
Oh, I think I’ve read her stories. But lately I don’t have much time reading fanfic. I don’t know why, just have been busy here and there.
I won’t disappear for two whole months, nevertheless! :)
You did a great Job writing in first person! For me, i like third person versions more, but you don’t have to re write for me. I love the story and will read it in the version you give it us.
Wow, Bette was so cold, but i hope Angelo will warm her heart.
They are still married? Hmm…
Can’t wait for their diner meeting on Monday.
Thank you very much for the encouragement!
Bette is a bit heartless as she comes back. But kids, they have the power to capture one’s heart in no time. She will come around and set things right between her and her son.
Yes, still married. They have so much history together and it’s kind of difficult for them to give that up.
I hope you’ll continue to enjoy!
Well Bette is a bitch, but I understand that, but pleas you have to sort that. Please please.
Haha she is kind of bitchy in this chapter.
I will absolutely make her come around to her senses.
Thanks for reading and commenting!
Nice….a little disappointed by the turn of events, but I’m sure there are happier days ahead!
Yes, that I can guarantee! Thank you for reading and commenting!
O.M.G!!!! i just love this story. please don’t let me wait to long for an update.
Won’t be long! I’m working on it!
Thanks for the support!
smart kid pps
yes, he is a smart one.
Thanks for commenting! Please continue to read and enjoy!
RT,
The Past was kind of Bad, the Present is Slightly Good but the Future of Bette, Tina and Angelo seems going to be Better :)
Thanks for posting.
Scribe
The past has some good memories in it, the present is complicated, the future, I promise, will be sweeter.
Thanks for reading and commenting!
That was great and the kid are so smart and cute, like him. Wow they still married, what a surprise, hope they will talk more and get to know each other again. Please post more, thanks
Yes, the kid is great! I wish I could have one of those in the future haha.
They are still married, and a lot of unresolved issues in their relationship.
Things will get better!
Thanks for commenting.
Threw me for loop completely. I would love to really the aftermath from when Bette heard Tina and her father conversation I mean after all these chapters thats what we been waiting for and the story just turn….but Shit I like this too I dont know I want it to be the way you written at first but its your choice and you are a brilliant, exquisite writer, I trust you lol!
On the other hand wow Bette was a lil mean but can you blame her for the way she treated Tina, I still can’t believe how many chances Tina had to tell her and didn’t, and Marcus died awe how sad, I would love to see them have another baby but im thinking ahead, and can’t believe Tina still in touch with her dad but family is family.
I guess im going to just see where this goes and enjoy every moment of it.
I know, it’s kind of a surprise isn’t it?! I was going for that kind of effect, actually. Besides, I can’t really go on with the confrontation anymore. That was just plain painful.
Bette is really mean here. She has her reasons to be, and you’re right, Tina not telling her the truth on so many occasions is one of them.
Marcus, oh I am sorry about him, too. But… to serve the plot…
They still can have another baby. Just it’s really too long in the future for them to talk about having another kid. They got to get back together first!
But it will all happen eventually!
Thanks for commenting. And I wish you’ll enjoy it more!
I understand Bette.Thank you for the update,PPS
Yes, she has the reasons to be mad. But she’ll come to her senses.
Thank you for reading and commenting! I’m working on it.
I love the story and will read whatever version you choose to write.
Thank you! You are very kind.
Ok, I’ll continue in the first person for more chapters and maybe I’ll return to third person perspective in later chapters!