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Summer Vacation. Chapter 28
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Angie just giggled,
An hour later and they were helping to pass out nibbles and chips at The Planet,
“Where’s Jo?” asked Alice, grabbing a handful of chips from the bowl Lottie was passing around,
“Huh?” replied Lottie, confused,
“Jo … isn’t she coming … you did invite her?”
Lottie stared at her confused, “No …”
“How come?”
“I don’t know”
“Oh …” replied Alice, before walking away,
“What time’s Bette getting here?” Helena asked, to no one in particular,
Lottie looked up, waiting for someone to answer, before she realised that all eyes were on her and it seemed they were waiting for her to provide a response,
“I don’t know …” she said sharply, “why should *I* know?”
“Because you called Tina!” said Alice pointedly, “didn’t you arrange something? … what did she say?”
Lottie frowned and put down the bowl of chips, resisting the urge to hurl them at Alice after she’d been a pain in the butt all day,
“No I didn’t, I didn’t ‘arrange’ anything, you didn’t tell me to ‘arrange’ anything, in fact you didn’t even tell ‘me’ a time,” she paused, realising that she was seething slightly, “and when I called Tina, all I got was some cryptic comment about surprises and then she hung up on me, so truthfully … I haven’t got a clue!” she added, glaring at Alice in particular,
“Okay then …” said Shane, handing Freddie to Carmen as she got up to diffuse the situation by picking up the bowl of chips Lottie had discarded and continuing round with them, “why don’t we just all chill out, I’m sure they’ll get here when they get here …”
“Like now …” said Helena, glancing towards the door as Tina’s car pulled up alongside and then carried on to park a little way out of sight.
It was still sunny out and to avoid a bunch of people coming knocking at the door without realising they were closed for the evening Lara had pulled down the blinds at the windows and turned on the lights, giving the strange illusion, unless you looked at the door, that it was dark outside and much later,
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yay for you! this chapter is a major accomplishment…not only because it is so very long and took you so very long to post and not only cuz i was there and can attest to the latter point, but because you’ve been genuinely innovative within an already innovative storyline. i love how this story is evolving and moving forward. very cool! helena’s development is a lovely subthreadplot, and as always, i’m loving your willingness to give kit more than a passing ‘mofo’ comment. che’s additions to the story are going to be something to look forward to! pps:)
YEEEEEESSSSSSSSS!!!!!! … WOW, just saw that you posted and HAD to leave this cry of JOY before I went off to read!!! THANKS THANKS THANKS so much for posting!!! Yayyyyyy!
I am so glad you are posting again. I know how hard it is to write sometimes when the real world calls. I love this story. I can’t wait for the next chapter. PPS
I guess I’ll have to keep reading even if I’m lost.
Well I’ll be cow-kicked. And here I’d thought you’d given up writing and gone off to split your time betwixt pastures helebettian and the working world. Hell, I’m glad to see you back, sofa. And now that you are, please, DON’T EVER LEAVE AGAIN. Mkay? Ta, sofa. Ta. Anyhow, loved the chapter, loved the twist, missed the story, and now that I’ve been a greedy fool and read it all at once, I still have two hours to kill ’til I can go get Potty. Wait, I already am. Anyway, I regret nothing. Post soon!
Welcome back. I though David had a child, but then I though maybe that was just another story I read. Could still be a different story (lol). Anyway, glad you’re back to continue this story. Great update.
So why do I get a sense that Tina is not all that happy about this new addition to their family, or I assume to their family….tks for finally updating..love it!!
HUGE comeback sofa!!!! Great indepth, tense, all the way to the end…I thought for a minute that maybe David had relented and left sperm behind for Tina or something miraculous like a child, so well done, at least Kit and Melvin have a part of David with them…terrific…yes its flooding in the North Island and snowing heavy in the South Is of NZ…that’s the reason so many of you Britishers come here to live; u like the similarity (Lol) so I know what u mean by staying in to write, me too!!! Its too damned dangerous on the roads. Plz don’t be a stranger with your posts as u well know I’m loving ‘Lottie’ and the whole family, I adore me some Helena, has she got a nice woman yet? (I forget?)…Who is Lara with? Its been so long kiddo and I don’t want to have to reread the entire story so just tell me in your comments back Huh??? Like I said …great story…
Yippee!!! Sofa is back in town! I was so happy to see your post and enjoyed it as always! I hope Lottie doesn’t start to neglect Jo, as they are such a good thing! Hope Tina is not becoming overwhelmed with Bette’s family… first came Lottie and the foundation issues, now Che…one thought… why doesn’t Lottie want to live alone? She can obviously afford it?…..
Welcome back Sofa!! Seeing you had posted made my day. I am now comfortably in my happy place even though the post was a bit somber – but I loved it. You write these characters so well, all of them, and I’ll be glad for whatever updating you can give us. You’ve been missed! Good luck on the awards and congrats on finishing up school.
So Glad to see you back Sofa!!! You made my Friday!
First of all, welcome back. I am soooo glad that you are back and writing. I have missed your stories immensely. Next, I had a feeling that a child was left behind. The fact that David’s wife’s parnets and family had nothing to do with them struck me as odd until you nammed the child. It hit me then, Che is bi-racial child. It sounds like he is Asian-Afican-American (like Tiger Woods).
I’ve been missing this story and am so happy to see your post. Interesting twist… anxious to read where they go from here.
Hey I read one of ur stories and loved the way u write.So I visited ur page and ended up reading all ur stories. I loved this story in particular and can’t wait for ur next post:)PPS
Good chapter!