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The Burden of Control – Chapter 17
Previously
Tina: (smiles) Bette?
left.
me what it was you had to say.
something you had to tell me.
eyes. The delicate contours of her face. The quirky, teasing grin that is
always present. And now a slight, healthy roundness to her chin and cheeksan
early sign of her pregnancy.
I was going to sayI wanted to tell you(pauses) I think that
thinkJust tell me.
walk in here, you had thisyou looked different. (pauses) You look happy, Tina.
Bette’s cheek, somewhat confused by the melancholy expression on Bette’s face.
She smiles and is relieved to get an answering grin back.
the room. Just as she reaches the door, she turns and waves to Bette. As she
steps outside she closes her eyes briefly and takes a deep breath and smiles.
now.
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Chapter
17
Bette
sat alone at the end of the bar, nursing an almost empty glass of beer. The place was mostly dark and relatively
empty. During the course of the day a few
friendly patrons had approached the seemingly distracted woman in attempts to
make small talk, but all were refused.
The bar itself was small and simple, somewhat off the beaten track from
the more elaborate establishments that frequented the city. Judging by the outdated fixtures and worn,
weathered stools, one would expect that the owner relied heavily on the locals
to keep the place in business.
Bette
brought her hand up to the rim of the cup and slowly traced her finger along
the edge, briefly pausing to watch as a drop of condensation rolled down the
surface of the glass before pooling on the coaster below. She brought the drink up to her lips and
finished off the remaining alcohol before lifting the glass up and over towards
the bartender to garner his attention.
“I’ll have another.”
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