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The Payback
“Shane!” Carmen went towards her girlfriend, but the woman behind her grabbed her.
“Let her go!” The man hit Shane in the back of the neck, making her drop to the ground. Carmen stopped the act, and the woman let go of her.
“Nice act baby,” Papi wrapped her arm around Carmen’s waist and kissed her neck.
“Well—y’know I always wanted to be an actress.” She smiled as she looked down at unconscious Shane.
Papi snapped her fingers. “Pick that up.” The man picked up Shane’s lifeless body and put her over his shoulder as they walked away from the Planet.
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Shane looked up at the dim light and groaned in pain. She opened her eyes and saw Carmen standing in the corner with the mystery woman standing next to her.
“Carm—what’s going on? Where am I?”
“You don’t need to worry about her anymore. You need to worry about yourself.” A fist came towards Shane, and her head flew back. She dropped on her back and groaned. She slowly got up on her knees and blood was running from her nose.
“What the fuck!” She got a foot to her ribs as she dropped to the ground again. Carmen watched with a sick smile on her face. A man cracked Shane in the back with a bat. Shane cried out in pain as her body went through excruciating pain. She got another kick to the gut, and her head was lifted up by her hair. Another man pushed across the face, and she dropped to her knees. Carmen walked towards the two men.
“Get her on her feet.” The two men picked up Shane and placed her on her feet. Shane’s head hung low, and she struggled to stay on her two feet. Carmen gripped Shane’s hair and pulled her head up. Shane’s face was bloody, her right eye was swollen, and she had cut on her cheek.
“Why?” Shane whispered, and she swallowed hard. “Why—are you doing this?”
“Why?” Carmen laughed bitterly. “You really want to know why.” She looked back at Papi. “She wants to know why.” She looked back at Shane and gripped her hair tighter. Shane winced in pain and sniffed. “It’s because you fuckin’ disgust me—you make me want to vomit everywhere, but really what I’m after is that sweet lil’ bank account of yours. Now, you will be dead, the money will be all mine.”
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(22 votes, average: 3.27 out of 5)
Wow…that’s really cruel of Carmen…very interesting…please continue.
damn . . . . u jus fucked shane completely ova . . . whelp, im sho u know wat u doin baby . . . and Carmen can’t be like dat . . . I jus can’t see it . . . Whelp, ya got me hook, chicka, like alwayz from me, Baby-girl, LYLAS ;-p . . . Stank . . . Da’ one and only . . .
oh God… it’s very beautiful, but… Carmen can’t be bad… you know… she’s too cool! Well, she’s still cool… even if she’s a psycho… but, can I ask u something? I know, I’m obsessed… but this is a Sharmen right? Please, PLEASE, tell me it’s a Sharmen. There aren’t so many of them!
Well, this is certainly different. I like it. Keep going.
Shit! What the hell, girl? It’s sooo strange to see Carmen so cruel and heartless.. But please, do continue. This is good.
Are you still writing this? I hope so! I hate to be left hanging like that. Please continue! I’m a sucker for Shane getting hurt type stories so if anyone can point me in the direction of any it would be much appreciated. Cheers!