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The Telling
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"But I know you still love me." Her eyes met mine again and I stepped closer, seeing her inner battle reflected in the gaze that she turned upon me.
"I know you do," I whispered, reaching up and daring to touch her hair, sliding my fingertips down the curl that fell against her cheek.
"I know you still love me, baby," I murmured, moving ever closer, ever nearer, craving her kiss and her closeness just once more.
She put her hands squarely on my chest and shoved me backwards, hard. I stumbled against the edge of the bed and ended up sitting down on it awkwardly, the horror in my eyes mirrored in the hurt that spread across her features. Pressing her lips together in a thin line, she shook her head firmly, reaching back behind her and pushing up against the chest of drawers, as though seeking some kind of support or solidity.
"Stop it!" she hissed, gulping against the tears that were in her eyes and on her cheeks. "Bette, you have to stop this, you have to…" she dropped her head and let out a hurt, wrenching series of sobs that echoed futility and the emptiness that was once more sinking into my chest.
I didn’t know what to do. I wanted to fight for her; I would take on the whole world if I could. I’d done it before; so many times I’d risen up against the odds and emerged victorious. But they were battles I felt I could win; they were situations in which I knew I was the best. I didn’t feel that way right now. I wanted to fight for Tina, but only if she wanted me to win. The way she was looking at me, fire in her eyes and tears in her words, I wasn’t sure that she even wanted me to fight at all.
Lifting a hand to her face, she rubbed at the tears on her cheeks, trailing a finger under each eye and sniffling loudly, opening her mouth to draw in deep lungfuls of air, attempting to calm herself before she laid judgment at my feet and on my shoulders. She put a hand against the base of her throat, splaying her fingers out on the velvet skin that I had kissed a thousand times, swallowing visibly and letting out a long, slow breath of composure.
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gaymo, your writing is exceptional. Great job!
Gaymo, very nice, as good as the first time but where is part 2. Don’t tease its not kind :0. Who is on the cell phone?
Whao, that was great, no worries about bruising, because that was phenomenal. Well written, you should continue.
You have a great handle on the way words flow and an excellent vocabulary. The sentences take on a languid quality which reflects Bette’s inertia very well. Perhaps dividing this into chapters would make it easier for those of us with short attention spans.
Five stars and two cold showers (at least). That was HOT, gaymo, and beautifully written.
Wow! This is excellent writing! I wish i could write as beautiful as this!!! Keep em coming please..
I can’t remember where I’ve read this before………but, that’s not important…….I just want more……please! ;D 5-stars
incredible writing. i don’t think you need to worry about bruising when you write like this. fantastic, please write more. thanks! :)
Gaymo..this is absolutely great…more soon….and i love the name..”You big gaymo…” hehehehe
Does the end mean the end or TBC. That was womderful,well written. Letting us know that Tina still loves Bette,but can’t be with her because of all the hurt. Thanks
amazingly written, well done!
This is extraordinary. I loved it the first time I read it and have been longing for a next chapter ever since. Please follow this up with something–ANYTHING!
Gaymo, that was some excellent storytelling. Man…pick me up off of the floor!
This was incredible. As I was reading, I kept thinking that this can only end badly, but I couldn’t stop from reading it anyway…one hand periodically hitting the down arrow button on my keyboard, the other clenching the arm of my chair. Thanks!
WoW! The flow was great, the vivid imagery was very well used and the internal thoughts are well written, graciously weaved into the whole story. Articulate and clear language. Very well done. Like JB said, sex can be a lot of things, it can be about power, reconnection, and other things… and yours have been graciously and beautifully written to reflect as reconnecting as well as asking for forgiveness.
wow. totally impressive writing!!!!
This is sooooooo good, Gaymo. And I know the American went back home so you should have plenty of time to write more for us. Put the Bailey’s down and get busy.
holy hootin’ hell! That was AMAZING! you capture their pain and just, wow, just that’s crazy good. I’m floored really, so glad to read some quality BT emotional storytelling. I hope this isn’t the end for this story!!
oh my goodness, you made me cry. you write very visually i can just see bette’s heart breaking… who is on the phone? will you please write a part 2? you’re really doing a wonderful job
Please let it be Tina on the phone. Just asking for some more time. Anything to ease this ache. You are sooooo good at this, gaymo!!
Absolutely wonderful writing – you capture the conflict of continuing love with the pain of betrayal so wonderfully. Exceptional
I’m never writing again. I swear to god. Anything I could come up with would be like lining up a hand tracing that became a turkey with a New York Times best-seller. :D To say this was incredible would be an insult. I still feel the ache in my chest. Please, for the love of all that is good and holy, please write more. Soon. Now? :P 5 stars!!
Hahah cramit! i was thinking the same thing.. right now i feel like i couldnt write anymore… All i want to do is wait for the next chapter… :D Gaymo please write soon… dont let your Portard family down!
Exceptionally well written.
That was incredible. Again i say, I don’t know how you guys do it.
I just don’t know what else to say. That was just great!!
Could you please use your wonderful literary and writing talent for good…and put them back together? Your story has moved me to tears.
wow!
Oh my god!
How great is that story, it moved me so much with your expression and use of words, ( i even shed a few tears) you are truely a great writter, keep up the good work.xxx
Just wanted to reiterate my desperate need for you to continue this story. The ache while reading this……it’s still unbelievable. Your writing is amazing. Please, please continue this. :)
that was amazing, seriously. amazing. thank you