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Uncharted Territory
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‘There’s no dust anymore.’ I say surprised.
‘I thought to clean it. I was hoping…’ She hesitates at the threshold. ‘Was I hoping for nothing?’
‘The last time I was here…’ I try but I fail at the sight of the empty crib. ‘I can’t do it here.’
In the bedroom, our bed is neatly made. I close the curtains, shutting out the world. Sitting down on the edge of the bed I wait till she sits down next to me. ‘Where do I start?’
LA – A year and a half ago or so.
The pointers on the white clock on the white wall show 3PM. The couple next to me faces each other and shares words meant only for them. But I hear them nevertheless. He can’t wait to be a father and she tells him she hopes the baby will look like him. The front door opens, I sit up and my heart stops for a second, only to break a little more as another couple walks in holding hands.
‘Porter-Kennard.’ The name bounces through the sterile space. The front door slowly starts closing. It will take me exactly ten steps to walk out and no one would ever know, who that woman was, sitting there alone. No one would ever wonder. It’s an half an hour drive to the gallery taking the busy traffic into account. I could storm in and give her hell she has never known of for this. What have I ever done to deserve this? We moved here for exactly this. We gave up our perfect life in Paris for exactly this. It was her who mentioned starting a family first.
‘Porter-Kennard.’ The assistant repeats louder this time. And instead of walking out, I follow him into the fertility specialists’ office.
‘Ah this time I actually get to meet you.’ The doctor with a fine sense for my sensitive spots extends her hand.
‘Sorry for cancelling the last two times on such a short notice. My wife.. she’s really busy.’
‘I hope not too busy to raise a kid. That’s what you’re here for right?’ She laughs at her own misplaced joke and sits down behind her frigid desk. The white wall behind her is covered with colorful pictures of all female organs. Bette chose this clinic because after thorough investigation and comparing statistics, reviews and success rates she concluded this is the best one in the country. That’s all she seems to be concerned about lately anyway, sales revenues, figures and forecasts. ‘But you’re here so let’s start. Non-smoker. Sporting. Didn’t have previous pregnancies or miscarriages. Looking good so far.’ She nods as if she just read a grocery list, before she takes off her reading glasses with thick lenses and turns to me. ‘You can take off your clothes behind the screen. The assistant will give you a paper gown. I’ll see you back later after the examinations.’
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It’s a wonderful story with great emotion that you can feel as you read it. You depict France very well!!
Looking forward to read it this weekend!
They’ve been through so much that even when they are doing well, a part of me worries for them. Bette taking a trip to L.A. on her own? I’ve never been happier that Tina could join her in the end. But the last part of the chapter killed me… I wish they can have the family that they want.
The good news is that this was a long chapter and the sad news is that this story is almost over and the end of this chapter was so sad. I feel for both of them. I really wish and hope that one day they will have their family!
The description of Paris, beautiful written! I visited Paris a few times and it’s such a beautiful place!
Glad that Tina came to LA at the end, came home, the home she left to go to Paris. This is a very important step in their relationship.
Diana, i love her!
Love the longer chapter. This is such a great story. It can’t be ending, though, that is not ok. Just when they are coming back together. It needs a second verse, please consider continuing it. :)
One things I love about your writing is that you show the connection in the dialogue you write – no easy task – but artfully done here. It’s in the shorthand way that they talk to each other and in the way they read each other so well. You don’t tell the reader – Tina missed Bette – you add them talking about Tina being in a grumpy mood because she is accustomed to hitting snooze since Bette has been with her and this morning she had a hard time getting to work on time because of it. It’s delightful and adds such depth. Thank you !
Hi BetteisBetter, I am enjoying this story so much, you have a unique writing style that really captivates me. I hope to read more to this story, it’s beautifully woven…
I’m one of the silent readers. I absolutely loved this story and your writing is beautiful. I almost want to go to France now! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Oh my fucking God! What an brilliant chapter! The way Tina was like struck with lightning when Bette told her that she loves her. The way you used content of the purse to show Tina collecting herself and then hanging up! And then the voice text and the way Tina subtly used LDR to tell Bette that she loves her too, just bc it wouldn’t do it justice to say it over the phone for the first time after such a long time. And then their acknowledgment with ‘I got your text’/‘I got your flowers’! And what an amazing way to show through Helena and Winny what divorce does to the surrounding, it’s such a heavy ballast that impacts everyone.
The way you showed how Bette misses working but how she grew and learned what really matters! I love Bette in the gallery! And the way you used Tina starting to write again as a reference to her growing feelings for Bette (as Tina said bf ‘It had nothing to do with Paris’). Not only that you said you are about to finish the story, but you write it in so many small details, that you make it beautiful but painful obvious! (Sorry for all exclamation marks – this story makes me that excited!) And then… at the end, the twist I’ve never seen coming… I could feel how lonely Tina was without you putting too much effort in it. It broke my heart. Seeing this story and it’s tone it wouldn’t surprise me anymore if it would happen they end up with just the two of them. It would be so sad and yet it would fit this story.
BK is right though-sequel maybe?
I’ve read this stories since 2 or 3 days ago.. And finnished all 22 chapters in short time (English not my language so that rate of speed.. Is really super fast on my account lol). I even read at office in working hours… (Bad employee i am.. Hahaha)
But your stories are just soooo good… Makes me so addicted.. Turned every emotions upside down… The chaos, turmoil because of the loving, cheating, regretting, feeling lost, it’s so mixed up..
Can wait for the next chapter..
Finally, thank you for sharing your wonderful story…
Wow… i just realise how much i Missed this story…
It woke so many emotions in me… Like silent reader my first language isn´t english – but i could not stop enjoy this story!
I hope so much you will finish it one day!!
I keep coming to check for updates and keep getting disappointed. Pretty please BetteisBetter, don’t leave us hanging :(