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Uncharted Territory
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‘I thought you’d call when you’d wake up?’
‘Good morning to you too, or should I say evening?’ The engine of the sports car roars as I floor the gas pedal to avoid having to stop at another red light.
‘Funny.’ She says clearly not amused. ‘Kit told me to give you a big hug. I don’t know why people say those things though, it’s stupid. Like it can be done over the phone… Whatever the fuck.’
‘Do you think if I call you back in fifteen minutes you will be more yourself?’
‘Why the tone?’
‘What tone?’
‘That tone.’
To my left, on the corner, restaurant Les Deux Margots just opened its doors for the day. It’s only a few days ago we had brunch there. We were sitting at a table in the corner, she in the shade, me in the sun. We tried to have a conversation but her lips kept on searching for mine. So at some point I lost track of what we tried to talk about. I do remember that her lips were tender as velvet and tasted like strawberry. ‘Let’s try again.’ I offer. ‘I’m running late.’ When she’s quiet and in the background the kitchen cabins open and close like domino stones, I rub my forehead. ‘How was the gallery?’
‘Same old.’
‘Bette, I think it’s better to hang up now. You’re obviously…and I’m worked up.’
‘Tee, wait.. fuck.’ She sighs and pauses. ‘I’m sorry. It’s just… I never imagined myself coming back alone here. Well I did. But it was never a pleasant thought. The house, it’s still so empty without you.’
Slowing down I follow the endless stream of cars in front of me. Headlight to tale light. The row of cars as a snake crawling through the city. Each soul going to places they need to be. Doing things they are supposed to do. In LA it’s night. The sun set long time ago. If she switched the outdoor lights on the pool is lid now and the garden has that cozy feeling that invites for long talks. Could be the patio doors are open and in the kitchen there’s only the small light under the extractor hood burning. ‘Where are you now?’
‘On the couch. Taking off my shoes.’
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It’s a wonderful story with great emotion that you can feel as you read it. You depict France very well!!
Looking forward to read it this weekend!
They’ve been through so much that even when they are doing well, a part of me worries for them. Bette taking a trip to L.A. on her own? I’ve never been happier that Tina could join her in the end. But the last part of the chapter killed me… I wish they can have the family that they want.
The good news is that this was a long chapter and the sad news is that this story is almost over and the end of this chapter was so sad. I feel for both of them. I really wish and hope that one day they will have their family!
The description of Paris, beautiful written! I visited Paris a few times and it’s such a beautiful place!
Glad that Tina came to LA at the end, came home, the home she left to go to Paris. This is a very important step in their relationship.
Diana, i love her!
Love the longer chapter. This is such a great story. It can’t be ending, though, that is not ok. Just when they are coming back together. It needs a second verse, please consider continuing it. :)
One things I love about your writing is that you show the connection in the dialogue you write – no easy task – but artfully done here. It’s in the shorthand way that they talk to each other and in the way they read each other so well. You don’t tell the reader – Tina missed Bette – you add them talking about Tina being in a grumpy mood because she is accustomed to hitting snooze since Bette has been with her and this morning she had a hard time getting to work on time because of it. It’s delightful and adds such depth. Thank you !
Hi BetteisBetter, I am enjoying this story so much, you have a unique writing style that really captivates me. I hope to read more to this story, it’s beautifully woven…
I’m one of the silent readers. I absolutely loved this story and your writing is beautiful. I almost want to go to France now! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Oh my fucking God! What an brilliant chapter! The way Tina was like struck with lightning when Bette told her that she loves her. The way you used content of the purse to show Tina collecting herself and then hanging up! And then the voice text and the way Tina subtly used LDR to tell Bette that she loves her too, just bc it wouldn’t do it justice to say it over the phone for the first time after such a long time. And then their acknowledgment with ‘I got your text’/‘I got your flowers’! And what an amazing way to show through Helena and Winny what divorce does to the surrounding, it’s such a heavy ballast that impacts everyone.
The way you showed how Bette misses working but how she grew and learned what really matters! I love Bette in the gallery! And the way you used Tina starting to write again as a reference to her growing feelings for Bette (as Tina said bf ‘It had nothing to do with Paris’). Not only that you said you are about to finish the story, but you write it in so many small details, that you make it beautiful but painful obvious! (Sorry for all exclamation marks – this story makes me that excited!) And then… at the end, the twist I’ve never seen coming… I could feel how lonely Tina was without you putting too much effort in it. It broke my heart. Seeing this story and it’s tone it wouldn’t surprise me anymore if it would happen they end up with just the two of them. It would be so sad and yet it would fit this story.
BK is right though-sequel maybe?
I’ve read this stories since 2 or 3 days ago.. And finnished all 22 chapters in short time (English not my language so that rate of speed.. Is really super fast on my account lol). I even read at office in working hours… (Bad employee i am.. Hahaha)
But your stories are just soooo good… Makes me so addicted.. Turned every emotions upside down… The chaos, turmoil because of the loving, cheating, regretting, feeling lost, it’s so mixed up..
Can wait for the next chapter..
Finally, thank you for sharing your wonderful story…
Wow… i just realise how much i Missed this story…
It woke so many emotions in me… Like silent reader my first language isn´t english – but i could not stop enjoy this story!
I hope so much you will finish it one day!!
I keep coming to check for updates and keep getting disappointed. Pretty please BetteisBetter, don’t leave us hanging :(