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Work to Do Chapter 12
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Dana looked up startled, her face darkening.
“Hilarious.” She scowled.
Alice
shrank back at the sharp tone, surprised. Dana had seemed to be
softening in her anger a bit. Alice had thought she was okay with the
small overtures she’d been making.
“Sorryyikes.
Look at the time,” Alice mumbled, while gathering up the keys, coffee
and laptop she’d just set down. “Um, Tell Shane I forgot I had an
appointment.”
Alice
left the Planet and walked toward her car. She was so absorbed in
trying to figure out what she’d done to piss off Dana she practically
ran into Shane.
“Alice!” Shane called, when she realized Alice didn’t know she’d just passed her. “Where are going?”
“I’m running away.” Alice told her.
Shane
was disappointed. She’d been looking forward to seeing Alice. “What
happened to breakfast?” she whined. She made an exaggerated ‘pout’ with
her bottom lip.
“Sorry
Shane. Dana’s in there and I picked up a weird vibe from her… more
like a weird 2″ by 4″ vibe.” She was so NOT in the mood for my act.”
Alice admitted.
“Really?”
Shane sympathized. “Well, she broke things off with Lara a few days
ago, maybe her mood doesn’t have anything to do with you.”
“They broke up?” Alice repeated.
“Yeah they did. She wasn’t too talkative about it but I gather they both saw it coming.”
Alice digested this bit of news.
“Come on back with me, Al. We’ll be silly and cheer Dana up, like the old days.”
Alice looked at Shane with one eye. “You’re joking, right?”
“Not ready for that, huh? Yeah, maybe it’s a little soon,” Shane conceded.
“Possibly,” Alice nodded.
“Okay, well I guess I’ll go check up on our tennis player. Let’s hook up later,” Shane suggested.
“We’ll do it,” Alice called over her shoulder. Her mind was already a million miles away.
Dr. Rudnick’s Office – present day
“Because.”
Stella sipped her water, leaning back in her chair.
Alice sat with her knees pulled up in front of her chest.
“Because a part of me was glad,” Dana admitted in a whisper, she was both humiliated and confused.
Stella’s voice was neutral as she urged her to go on.
In a dull voice Dana continued, looking at the floor.
“She’d
been so cruel to me. When she was leaving she said over and over that
we were breaking up because she didn’t want to lose what mattered most
to her, our friendship.” Dana’s laugh was derisive.
“She broke my heart and then just dropped out. Disappeared.”
Looking at Alice, Dana continued on, her voice raspy,
“You
were so remote, so removed from ‘us.’ The only place you talked to me
was on the radio. You made fun of everything we were. That killed me
Alice. You hurt me indescribably. And you were so *****
funny while you did it. They loved you for it.”
“Stalking me was incredibly fucked up, I KNOW that. But it was the first time I got even a hint that I still mattered to you”
Dana looked at Dr. Rudnick miserably.
“You
asked me if I felt violated? Yes. Of course I did. But what I didn’t
say was I also felt validated. I didn’t imagine it; Alice loved me.
‘See? Alice couldn’t just forget about me.’ Ugh! I’m embarrassed.”
Alice stifled a strangled noise from the couch. She was staring at the ceiling.
Dana ignored her, continuing in a tired voice.
“I’m
not sure exactly how I felt, but I knew I shouldn’t feel all of it.
Alice following me, watching us was such a breach of everything- I was
sickened, I was. I was angry. I still am, but I was also upset with
myself to find some comfort in something so screwed up.
Looking at Stella, Dana wiped away the only tear she’d shed all afternoon.
“When
someone you love completely abandons you and leaves you wondering if
what they had felt for you was real you take what you can get.”
TBC
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This is one of my favorite chapter, simply because you gave real reasons to the possible spoilers (of course not counting the horrible Dana rumors) and hope that despite the whole situation, maybe they might just be able to work things out. Dana’s reaction to the stalking was painful yet wonderful at the same time. “when someone you love completely abandons you and leaves you wondering if what they had felt for you was real…you take what you can get” –LOVE this line, it summed up how she felt perfectly.It hurts to read the last scene, I feel Alice, fearful and cringing at Dana’s confession of her feelings.
OK capes I have to totally agree with Jac on this one. I don’t know what to say other then, I hate I have to wait for next sunday for your next installment. My chest hurts from feeling all the pain in that chapter. Well done. Deb
You were right about me loving this chapter cape, it’s very heartbreaking to read about Dana’s sincere confessions. I never thought about the radio shows and how cruel Alice can be on air. – I’m loving the fact that you take your time to explain every little detail in the most naked form. Which we won’t be (unfortunately) getting from the real show. – If I ever come across IC, I’ll be making sure she reads this story. :)
wow, is all i gotta say, Dana’s explanation to the whole thing was well written, especially that last line, that was a very nice touch to an incredible chapter, can’t wait for your next post.
This is a great story. Is it really your first? I think you are a really talented writer. Althought I did feel the slight change of style like you said, it doesn’t affect the wonderful insights of the charactors you are delivering. (Is this flattering enough for you to post the next one sooner? :p )
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, not only because of the way you write the ‘stalking’ phase through Dana’s perspective (which, btw sounds better than what they’re actually gonna give us) but you’ve also made me want to head down to Starbucks and order coffee for no good reason. Intentional or not, advertising works. Next I’ll be ordering some sweet Danish to go with that, tip included. So please post soon!
Gotta agree with Jac on this, too. It really helps some of the spoilers/rumors make more sense, and the whole thing is very real. Painful, but real, and I could see it really happening. I, too, loved that last line from Dana. Great job with details. Can’t wait for the next chapter! *cracks whip* Get to it!
Wow, great as always. This is one of the best stories I’ve read so far. Dana’s admitting to ‘liking’ the stalking was… so painful and what a great line! I’ll be waiting for more!
I really love this story. It has felt like Dana has been divorced from her feelings for much of the story. Now I understand why a part of her seemed to turn off, and she appeared to be experiencing things as an outside observer. I liked the guarded interaction between the two of them because it was so real, especially after what they had been through.I was surprised to find that Alice and Dana has seen each other after Alice ran Dana off the road. I always got the impression that the first time they saw each other after the accident was when Dana appeared at Alice’s door.I can’t wait for next week.By the way, I’d never call you Jenny! You’re much too cool for that! :-)
this is great and I hope that they work it all out soon please post soon I love it
i get confused myself about the time line- like 4 and half months between the therapy session on stalking and alice’s apology seemed long- but it’s right-i do have a time line drawn out- it felt supid to post it- but maybe i will. they have seen each other ‘around’ -plus at that party at shane’s when they fought by the pool about 3 weeks before she shows up at her door.
I forgot to add that I liked when Alice used the title of the story when she and Dana were in Starbucks. She does have a lot of “work to do” to regain Dana’s friendship. Both of them do.I’m looking at your timeline, but I have to reread the story first. I’ll email you.
Wow girl, respect, you give to the characters very good explanations to their actions. Beautiful and painful but well writen. Thanks.
hi cape – great job. i think the style is very good. i appreciate that you are explaining situations that won’t be explained on the show. i like the flash backs and then the present day scenes that explain their feelings. i like dana’s outlook on the stalking. i am glad dana is not throwing al under the bus.