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Scorpio Rising 7
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Scorpio Rising 7
Ch 10
It amazes me how I broke free
Then got brought back in
‘Cause when the feelings there shattered and scared
I know you’ve won goodbye I’m gone……………
After we tucked Marco in. Carmen went into the bathroom and didn’t come out for an hour. After I knocked and asked what was wrong. After she said nothing in a voice that suggested everything. After she came out smelling sweet, feeling wet, looking angry and sad all at the same. After she turned off her light, pulled the blanket over her head, used the remote to turn the AC on high and refused to kiss me goodnight….after all that I lay there not sure if she was asleep or not.
Unable to close my eyes. Unable to believe how tired this was. Unable to process why….unable to understand why was it so hard to please her.
She is mad and jealous and insecure. Even after I bled for her and she bled for me. Even after everything. She still felt small, she still felt like I really didn’t care about her. And honestly it was tired. So it upset me and I didn’t want to be in the same room as her let alone the same bed. No matter what I did, no matter what I do…she will always think I want to be somewhere else. Broken records, and patterns constantly repeating.
All these talks we have been having, all of these truthful moments. None of it mattered. Nothing….none of it. I just can’t win with her.
Didn’t try to be quiet while I got dressed and went out for a smoke. I could feel the silent pull of her as she watched me from the window willing me to go her. Fuck her and fuck that if she has something she wants to say to me here I am or more importantly here I go….
“You want me…..come and get me….you hear me Carmen! No more fucking bullshit…Ok! I am…fucking tired of your bullshit!” I yelled because I honestly couldn’t take it anymore.
I got in my car and drove to our office. It had everything I would need till she came to her senses. Mini bar, comfy couch and tunes. I pull into the empty parking lot. Parked in her reserved spot, got my keys, opened the door, typed in the alarm code and enjoyed the silence.
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holy shit. omg. wow…. uhm… yea. you had me so conflicted, i didn’t know who was right. if shane was really blind to her unhappiness like carmen said or if carmen was really being crasy like shane said. then… the intensity just flew off the chart and till the very last paragraphy, i really thought shane was gonna shoot herself. and it would be ironic because they would save her and she would wake up with no memory and just… SHIT. that was a fucking fantastic chapter. it was fucking. you are beyond great. my heart is still racing.
That was one hell of a chapter! I think it was right on with the characterization of Shane in this fic to want to kill herself than be without Carmen. I know she feels the pull of her former life but when faced with Carmen setting her free, her love for Carmen is won. Yet, with that said, I dont see how they can ever get over this hump…Shane will do anything for Carmen but is Carmen and Marco exciting enough for her. No doubt she loves her but is hard to deny the differences between the before and after Carmen. Amazing… Also was wondering which Carly on GH would Carmen like to sleep with…First, second, or the current one?
That was intense, whoa ! Excellent, excellent…
whoa
WOW!!!!!!! Just beyond great chapter ….
Holy fuck.
Wow! That scene with Shane taking out her gun… That got me so tensed up. God god, you write good… Excellent, gorgeous Writing.
holly shit!!!! holly GOD!!!, Holly fuck!!! Holly what ever this was … i cant even describe how i feel right now… but i got to tell you i was fucking scared… wuh!! youre awesome
Oh man, this is the best chapter yet! I love how intense you make these two it just keeps getting better! Can’t wait for more.
Ok at one point I was wishing for Shane to shoot herself. Cuz Carmen is just constantly messing with her. But it’s a great story. Very well done. And Carmen is still trying to figue herself out since her memory lost. She def should stop doing that to herself and Shane. Keep going I’m waiting for the next one.
uhhhhhhh wow i uh really am speachless such strong love from shane and carmen and ya wow your amaxing, post soon pleeeeeeeeeease
the word intense is not evn close to wut uve written! words that we use everyday, they sound so simple but when they come into ur hands u turn them into fire and thn ice. i was so sure that shane was gonna shoot herself thanku for surprising me! ur writingz out of this world man!! sorry havnt been commentin but i dun miss any chapter :D
I agree with bum. They are so out of control, I really can’t wait to see what happens next. You’re writing gets me all riled up. Oh, and sorry I haven’t commented on your last few chapters, I’ve been really busy, and also, I like to save them up…is that weird?