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Closure – Chapter 4
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Alice was extremely nervous about the party. She was almost a basket case by the time Saturday rolled around. She hadn’t spent any time with her friends in so long. She really hadn’t spent time with anyone but Jackie for so long.
Jackie came in from a few hours at the office to find Alice preoccupied with picking out a pair of shoes.
“Allie? I’m home.” Alice broke out of her daze and hurried over to give her girlfriend a welcome home kiss.
“How was work?”
“Good. The new designs are coming along well. I think it will be a good line for us.” Alice listened attentively while she moved to the bar in the corner to fix Jackie a drink.
Jackie collapsed into one of her overstuffed leather chairs and Alice brought over the drink.
“Thanks, babe.” Jackie pulled Alice into her lap and gave her another kiss.
“Having problems picking out a pair of shoes?” Jackie tipped her head towards the shoe pile as she sipped her drink.
“I have it narrowed down to these three.” Jackie looked them over and pointed to one of the pairs Alice decided not to wear for the evening.
“Wear those. I love how they make you legs look.”
“They really hurt my toes, though. I’m not sure what I was thinking when I bought them.” Alice frowned.
“You’ll be fine. Wear them for me?” Jackie coaxed.
Alice looked at the killer heels and relented “Of course, baby.” And she gave Jackie another kiss.
“That’s my girl. Let’s grab a quick shower before we need to get ready.”
“I’m not sure we have time…”
“Allie, hon, there is always time for shower sex.” Jackie gave a wicked grin. “Get your sweet ass upstairs.”
After a quick and energetic bout of sex in the shower, the couple emerged to get ready for the party.
Alice wore a new earring and necklace set and a stunning summer dress with the killer heels. Jackie wanted to make sure she was decked out for this gathering so her friends knew she was being well cared for. Jackie herself wore a shirt and slacks combination once again tailored to show off her physique.
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this is really good. I mean it’s bad for the chatacters but story-wise, thumbs up girl. Jackie is really bossy isn’t she? She’s changing dear old Al(well maybe not od but you know what I mean;) ) to quiet, conservative, yes-dear member Allie. I think Alice just lost herself and Jackie’s a real b**** or not giving Alice her letters and greetins from her friends. But this is what i think, one of those thins that makes the plot great. And this is great. I’m rambling so I’m gonna shut up now, heheh I hope to see you post soon, I’m looking forward to what happens next.
I am so not liking Jackie at all. Coming between Alice and her friends the way she did was just low. And what’s with Alice not ending it because she wouldn’t want to upset her? That’s not the Alice I know and love. Anyway I can’t wait for your next post. This is getting really good.
MaGoose, thanks for showing Jackie’s (J) true form. I took the liberty to diagnose A was suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. A was doing everything to please her abuser. It would take a long time with intense therapy to bring her back. A’s self esteem had been destroyed by both D & J. I do not expect J to want to change a thing to keep her pet girl friend. Understanding D’s love for A, I would expect her to go all out and to bring back A’s confidence and qualities that A’s used to have. I think it will be a long and winding road to bring back Danish and I am ready and willing to stick with this great story. Also, what J did with the birthday cards are mean and evil. Can’t wait for your next post. Thanks.
Alright. I’m not going to go about commenting on this lightly. Dana needs to grab Alice way from Jackie. Then Dana needs to punch Jackie in the twat. That’s really all there is to it. and WE NEED AL BACK. anyway Magoose I love your story. I wanted to say thanks again for all of your great support during my break up
Okay so I just found and caught up with this story. I really like it and the twist you put on it: ala Alice being a stepford wife. I’m not sure why but the way you described Jackie at first made me think of Jackie Warner from “Workout”…I clearly watch too much TV. pps!
I don’t know what’s up here. Alice is being transformed into another person and she’s letting her girlfriend do it? This is Alice Pieszecki! She’s not conservative or bending to wills. It’s like she’s with another Gabby. Now that’s scary and sick. I’m not saying you’re a bad writer. Hell, I wouldn’t say that except to Ilene. Keep on going.
I don’t like the sound of Jackie and have a familiar sense of foreboding…these possessive woman always end up committing violence and Alice sure doesn’t deserve that. Hope someone like B & T or Shane comes to the rescue and Jackie gets dealt to asap.
Jackie reminds me of Tonya, but in a relly really bad and not very funny way *gulp*. Maybe this could be a good line for Dane when her time will come…And you wrote a sentence that is sadly true “It was the first relationship she had where she felt like she was really important to her partner” and I have to ammit that the Danish relationship on the show wasn’t that great. I mean, they didn’t show Dana on her best behavior with Al, but we are Danish and we know better…right? Sorry if I didn’t make myself too clear and I ended up speaking no sense but the point is I really like this and I wanna see what’s next ;)