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Closure – Chapter 4
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Jackie came into Alice’s life at just the right time. Or just the wrong time, depending on your viewpoint. Alice had hit rock bottom. Her friends had pretty much given up on her and her career was in jeopardy. At least that was how Alice saw it.
The Gabby “thing” was a new low. Alice just desperately needed to some human contact and Gabby was the closest thing she could find at the time. Gabby wanted her and Alice needed to feel wanted. She wasn’t upset when it ended. Gabby actually tried to get back with Alice again after that which Jackie put a stop to quickly. Alice was a little surprised that Gabby didn’t leave town after that encounter. She certainly never looked twice at Alice again.
In any case, Alice was a mess when she met Jackie and no longer had the strength to put up the façade that she normally showed the world that kept her safe.
Jackie saw the vulnerability when Alice showed up for the interview that day and she pounced. It was an added benefit that this troubled woman was incredibly hot.
She moved quickly and really did sweep Alice off her feet. Alice found herself showered with gifts, attention and compliments. Alice was amazed that this successful, beautiful woman would be so interested in her. It was the first relationship she had where she felt like she was really important to her partner.
Jackie slowly transformed Alice’s image. She loved black hair on her women and had Alice get her hair dyed just that color. She also made her way through Alice’s closet and slowly replaced her old clothes with more conservative attire with high class labels.
Jackie was not above tipping situations in her favor. For Alice’s birthday she took her on a surprise trip to Hawaii. She made sure that the cards and well-wishes from her old friends were never received by the writer. She did not want any interference as she was sculpting their relationship. Jackie realized that Alice missed her friends. She made sure to reinforce to Alice that her friends had moved on with their lives and left her behind and that she should move on with hers.
One day Alice realized that her life revolved around Jackie. It wasn’t the romance that Alice might have once hoped to have but she was well cared for by Jackie and was told every day that she was loved. Although Alice still had her apartment, she spent the majority of her time at her girlfriend’s spacious home.
Alice didn’t know where the relationship was heading, but, she knew she wouldn’t be the one to end it. That might make Jackie upset and Alice did whatever she could to make sure Jackie was never upset.
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this is really good. I mean it’s bad for the chatacters but story-wise, thumbs up girl. Jackie is really bossy isn’t she? She’s changing dear old Al(well maybe not od but you know what I mean;) ) to quiet, conservative, yes-dear member Allie. I think Alice just lost herself and Jackie’s a real b**** or not giving Alice her letters and greetins from her friends. But this is what i think, one of those thins that makes the plot great. And this is great. I’m rambling so I’m gonna shut up now, heheh I hope to see you post soon, I’m looking forward to what happens next.
I am so not liking Jackie at all. Coming between Alice and her friends the way she did was just low. And what’s with Alice not ending it because she wouldn’t want to upset her? That’s not the Alice I know and love. Anyway I can’t wait for your next post. This is getting really good.
MaGoose, thanks for showing Jackie’s (J) true form. I took the liberty to diagnose A was suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. A was doing everything to please her abuser. It would take a long time with intense therapy to bring her back. A’s self esteem had been destroyed by both D & J. I do not expect J to want to change a thing to keep her pet girl friend. Understanding D’s love for A, I would expect her to go all out and to bring back A’s confidence and qualities that A’s used to have. I think it will be a long and winding road to bring back Danish and I am ready and willing to stick with this great story. Also, what J did with the birthday cards are mean and evil. Can’t wait for your next post. Thanks.
Alright. I’m not going to go about commenting on this lightly. Dana needs to grab Alice way from Jackie. Then Dana needs to punch Jackie in the twat. That’s really all there is to it. and WE NEED AL BACK. anyway Magoose I love your story. I wanted to say thanks again for all of your great support during my break up
Okay so I just found and caught up with this story. I really like it and the twist you put on it: ala Alice being a stepford wife. I’m not sure why but the way you described Jackie at first made me think of Jackie Warner from “Workout”…I clearly watch too much TV. pps!
I don’t know what’s up here. Alice is being transformed into another person and she’s letting her girlfriend do it? This is Alice Pieszecki! She’s not conservative or bending to wills. It’s like she’s with another Gabby. Now that’s scary and sick. I’m not saying you’re a bad writer. Hell, I wouldn’t say that except to Ilene. Keep on going.
I don’t like the sound of Jackie and have a familiar sense of foreboding…these possessive woman always end up committing violence and Alice sure doesn’t deserve that. Hope someone like B & T or Shane comes to the rescue and Jackie gets dealt to asap.
Jackie reminds me of Tonya, but in a relly really bad and not very funny way *gulp*. Maybe this could be a good line for Dane when her time will come…And you wrote a sentence that is sadly true “It was the first relationship she had where she felt like she was really important to her partner” and I have to ammit that the Danish relationship on the show wasn’t that great. I mean, they didn’t show Dana on her best behavior with Al, but we are Danish and we know better…right? Sorry if I didn’t make myself too clear and I ended up speaking no sense but the point is I really like this and I wanna see what’s next ;)