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Closure – Chapter 13
Alice woke very slowly the next morning. Her body was incredibly stiff and the pain came back as soon as she tried to move. She looked at the clock on the bedside table. Shit! It was 11:00. She overslept. Jackie didn’t like her to sleep later than 8, maybe 9 as a treat. Alice felt like she was drowning in fear for a moment until she realized she was at Dana’s. She slowly relaxed and took a closer look around.
Next to the clock on the bedside table were two bottles of water in an ice bucket along with Advil and Tylenol. On the dresser was a pair of clean sweats.
Alice took a couple of the pills and pulled herself up. She sat on the edge of the bed while she tried to take stock of her body’s condition.
She was in pain. Her back was on fire and she knew would become much worse when she tried to get up. She had a few other bruises, but, it was nothing she wasn’t used to. Man. She could remember when a hangnail would send her to a doctor. How times have changed…
The pain between her legs was…bad. She wasn’t bleeding at least. She tried to fight Jackie off, but, was unable to. And Jackie was very forceful.
She was a rough shape, but, Alice thought she could get through it without going to the doctor. She was stupidly proud of the fact that she had never had to go to the doctor after any of the incidents with Jackie. No explanations required.
A shower would feel like heaven right now. Alice slowly stood and shuffled towards the door and to the bathroom. She didn’t see or hear Dana and figured she was out training or something. With any luck, Alice could clean up and be gone before she saw her. She would call a cab, get to her car, and then figure out what to do.
She couldn’t face Dana. She must think Alice is an idiot for getting herself into this situation. All her friends will think her stupid when they hear. Better to go. She just needed to decide where. Could she go back to her apartment? Not if she didn’t want Jackie around. Did she want Jackie around? Fuckity fuck fuck. Why was that such a hard question? Alice really wasn’t sure what choice she had.
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(35 votes, average: 3.89 out of 5)
Dana+her boxing training=DEAD BITCH. Jackie should pick on someone her own size. Poor poor AL. WOOT PROTECTIVE D. I love the idea. Great job Magoose. My internet is still on the fritz. I’m at work right now.
Another great chapter. I love that Dana is in such a good place that she is not rising to any of the bait Alice is throwing her way to try and put her off. I am feeling safe in the knowledge that you have the gang downstairs waiting and you will protect Al. Can’t wait to read the intervention. Thanks for posting!
No, no – she cannot leave – the gang have to persuade her it is in her interest to leave that horrible, abusive woman. Well done on keeping us gripped. More soon please.
I definitely would’ve done it the same way. If a friend of mine was in this situation, I’d be more prepared than a squad of Boy Scouts with OCD. You really did good with Alice’s behavior. She just got hurt over a simple talk with her ex, Dana, and now she’s jumping to make sure that her abuser doesn’t get mad again. You really did give Jackie a good hold on her. I’m with mariam on this: Give Alice her freedom for this Christmas. More than that, give her the love that still exists with Dana. Bring their love back to life.
Love the caring Dana!!!! Please dont let her leave,she is safe with Dana and her friends! Thanks again for the great update! PPS
Lets get the whole gang going,Alice was good at the intervention,lets see if she likes the receiving end of one. First the Dr. them the police. Get Jackie in jail before the gang,gives her a real old fashion woodshed whoppin. thanks
amazing chap, really want to beat J down now after the first page. The gangs going to need to handle the intervention delicately since Al is in a very fragile place right now….Great job!!!!
Hoooooo no, I am not first lol. Never mind. PPS
First?????? That is a premiere lol. Ok, MaGoose, please it is Christmas, don’t let one of our girl’s abused like that. come on give me her freedom as a christmas present I am waiting lol
Oh yay first. Intervention. ASAP. there’s no way she should leave that house and get back with Jackie. This is really good Magoose. I like protective Dana. I like her goofiness and everything. Thanks for this chapter, looking forward to more :)
Interventnion time bring it on, great cahpter!! :)
=0 INTERVENTION!! YAY! Of course I still like your story, its totally original and greatly written. Poor Alice all the things that Dana has done for her to keep her safe =) thanks for the update! PPS!
Awww don’t let her leave!! You can’t let Alice get hurt more than she’s already been. Please let her let her friends help her? And no I didn’t mistype that, lol. I’m in love with a fictional character, how sad is that? Please let her come to her senses, and let the others help her! I’m addicted to this story, it’s awesome, and so are you for writing it. I’m sure it has to be tough; there aren’t many stories that deal with abuse on this site. Big hugs for doing this, I think it’s definitely a scenario everyone needs to see. You rule my dear.
MaGoose, Great Chapter and teriffic story! Your description of the abuse and chacters reactions are perfect! I love protective Dana and I hope the intervention works. But I’ve studied DV enough to know the 1st invervention may have an impact but is likely to not be successful. The emotional abuse sadly is generally much worse than the physical abuse and is why the person repeatedly returns to the abuser. Regardless of how the interventions goes I just hope eventually Alice is free from Jackie and happy and not freed tragically. PPS! :D
I have my baseball bat all ready, Geeze there is no way that Alice should go near that woman . I have no problem with anyone you want to write giving that Jackie some serious bitch slaps. Great story and so well done , its also so sad but I love to see when true friends rally around. PPS