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And Now for Something Completely Different (Single Chapter Story)
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"So perhaps a family just got transferred in then?" Bette inquired sarcastically.
"Our firm will guarantee any agreement we come to under the terms of your lease," Mr. Strathmore explained. "There are things that can be done to virtually eliminate the possibility that any pests could invade this property."
"I would hold you to that Mr. Strathmore," Bette drew herself to her full height in establishing her bargaining position. "I think I do need to return in the light of day in order to make an adequate assessment."
"Bette, there are mice all over these old warehouses, you can’t expect to be in an abandoned building and not see a rodent here and there," Tina said. Bette was having a meltdown over a mouse, when she should have been worried about this stranger guiding them around the twilight zone.
"I’ve seen enough this evening," Bette said. "I’ll be in touch sometime tomorrow Mr. Strathmore."
She took a breath and regained her calm before addressing Tina.
"Are you ready?" Bette asked simply.
"Absolutely," Tina replied. "Let’s get out of here."
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The trip out of that area of the city took forever. It took them almost 45 minutes before they pulled into their driveway. The ride home had been mostly silent, only punctuated with occasional references to the events of the evening, as brief as their mini adventure had been.
"Is that really the type of place you’d be interested in moving your gallery to?" Tina asked as they crawled into bed.
"I need something innovative, something different. It has to be set apart from the rest of the pack," Bette tried her best to explain just what she was going for.
"You’re what sets your gallery apart babe," Tina said. "You don’t need to seek out a new space to make it unique. You only need to continue to market what you already have. Your eye, and your expertise."
"Thanks for the vote of confidence, Tee," Bette said as she curled up behind her. "Maybe I should look into a short term special event facility, rather than a completely new gallery space."
"Mention it to the realtor when you talk to him tomorrow," Tina said. "I’m sure he’d have some suggestions for you."
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Excellent!!
That was great. You are a great writer. You keep writing and I’ll be reading. Thanks!
Wooooo… I’ve got goosebumps!
Awesome!! That was truly amazing, JKS. Thanks.
Ha! Great story. Loved it.
Wonderful story! Happy New Year!
Different and interesting! Keep on writing, love your stuff!
I don’t like thrillers so I can see why Tina would be jumpy – excellent!
Cool!
you just keep me speechless every time i read one of your stories…bravo!!!!
ok, i am usually a silent reader, but that spooked the biggibies out of me! excellent short story!
Very interesting story and I think you can take it further if you want to and make it into a thriller….hahaha. Just a thought. Whatever you offer up, I will gladly read. Thanks, JKS.
Scary!! I’m with obzidian, I’ll read whatever you write for us!
Ok that creeped me out I was like run Tina run. You should always trust your first instincts even if they seem utterly ridiculous. btw the mice/rat would have been enough to have me high-tailing it out of there.
That was fun. B,b,b,but who (or what) was that guy?
Great story for New Year’s Day,,,it reminds me…is The Twilight Zone marathon on today…I must go see. Thanks for the eerie story!
wow that was indeed different but fantastic. thanks. i loved it.
EERIEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
In a word…Superb. The Swimmeister rules!
When women put themselves in a dangerous situation like this, I am always annoyed at their taking such a chance. Don’t they ever watch movies? Don’t they know how dangerous it is to go into a spooky building? As I was reading your post I kept wondering if B&T were wearing those four-inch spiked heels. It’s hard to run in those stilts……Perhaps you’re right that “less is more,” but I always enjoy your stories, long or short.
This was excellent!! Great job!
I’m with slipperynipple. I would’ve said “Fuck this shit!” and ran as soon as the mouse appeared. Actually I probably wouldn’t have gone at all. It’s crazy how easy it is to scare me. Feel free to continue with this because it sounds cool.
Hey great to hear from you so quickly :o)) This was very creepy and very diffirent, but in my book you’ve carried through another challenge to an A (grade)….I don’t know if that sounded right in english??? but I hope so….I just wanted to say I loved it :o)) Take care in 2006…
Yay, a new story, looking forward to rolling with this one. Keep it coming swimmie, maybe 50% less viewers, but we are 100% faithful. Keep the ink flowing…Cheers luv
WAAAARGH! thats a bit of a psycological twinger that one!! eeep
Spectacular and Mysterious! I am very impressed with your new story! Excellent writing as always ms. swim.
That was awesome. Do Bette and Tina wander around aimlessly in the back of your mind until you figure out a new scenario in which to place them? Between you and me (and everybody else who reads this comment), they own a penthouse in my mind.By the way, I love the Monty Python reference.
Damn this is scary and interesting and let see what’s next, thanks!
fun change of pace- loved it and happy new year!
Oooo! This was great–wish you had posted it on Halloween!
hmmmmm… i also have goosebumps… and i would be with tina… grab bette and get the flock out of there…
Wow, that gave me goosebumps. That whole scene gave me the creeps. Very nice job!!
Interesting…and different. Thanks.
Why did chose to get up at 2:30 in the morning, wander down a dark hallway to my office to read this story? Who’s going to hold my hand as I try to get back to my bedroom? …Great change of pace JKS, an excellent diversion of domestic drama… Now, where’s my flashlight?
wow! Awesome writing!! i loved this story! It really made me think :) Don’t worry about the other readers…we’re the important ones! Please, keep writing. I’ll be reading.