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Apogée 11
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Dana peeked her head out of the shower to see if the writer was serious, she looked in Alice’s eyes, trying to see what the blonde was thinking.
“Alice…why would Morales shoot Jenny?” The writer stood up, the small smile on her face causing the agent to smile with her.
“I was hoping you’d ask that, after you get out of the shower come in the living room and I’ll show you.” Dana nodded finishing her shower quickly, throwing on some shorts and a t-shirt and sitting on the couch next to Alice. The agent had to admit to herself, even if Alice was way off base she had to admire the writer’s ability to think outside of the box. Dana pulled her legs up to sit Indian style in front of Alice, the blonde still deep in a final thought. Alice eyes shot up to the ceiling and she bit her bottom lip for a moment, her face snapping into a smile nodding to herself and typing a final sentence on her laptop.
“Okay Dana are you ready?” The agent nodded, actually excited to hear what the writer had come up with. Alice turned her computer around for Dana to see, the screen revealing a large diagram of where Jenny was shot. Alice took a deep breath before beginning her speech,
“Alright here is the scene, we have Agent Shecter’s SUV here and the transport vehicle here…” Alice clicked the enter button and a small dotted line ran from off screen,
“The dotted line represents what I think was Shane’s path…So she shoots the transport vehicle’s tires from behind it overturns and Agent Shecter goes to help…” Dana nods in awe of how much Alice has thought this through in one morning, the writer notices how interested the agent seems which causes her to smile as she continues.
“We know Agent Shecter reached in the backseat window, there’s a small blood sample on the glass…” the writer hands Dana the evidence file so she can read along,
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Excellent update! I loved it. When the dotted line made its way across Alice’s computer screen, a huge grin appeared on my face. It’s Alice’s chart! That was a very inovative way to put her chart in there. Great job. I absolutely can’t wait for more.
I just have to comment. I TOTALLY DIG this fic. I would prefer a lot more Bette and Tina though. Love the Dana and Alice. I am not a fan of Shane and Carmen. Now with that said, I am a little confused. Bette and Shane are criminals right. So, how is it going to work. What is Tina going to do when she finds out that Bette KILLED her husband (something that has not been mention lately). Love your writing of the different characters and their emotions. Please give Bette and Tina more time and let’s dive more into them and Bette’s occupation.
again as usuall another fan bloody tastic chapter, im totally hooked, it brightens up my rather hectic days when i read your stories. Thanks for your words of kindness regarding my story its really great to get such good feedback. :-)
Alice is my hero! She figured it all out on her own…it’s the out-of-the box thinking that does the trick. ;) (Btw, this whole story is greatbecause it’s all about that! :D). Ok, I googled the cayenne pepper, it’s one of the most valuable herbs on earth, who would have guessed?! :) Shane must have been in real pain, but it saved her day. Carmen is one smart lady. :D I still think the storyline of those two is very intriguing! So many questions need to be answered. Bette got what she wanted, Tina giving in to her. Good for her! They’re getting there, slowly, but surely… I’m still a bit clueless on Bette’s background (maybe because it’s getting reallt late here and it’s been way too hot all day, my brain doesn’t seem to work how it’s supposed to be).
ClosetDana did I ever tell you.. you make me smile? The disclaimers get more interesting… just like the chapters. Damn.. Alice/Dana sure know how to have fun, glorious condiments, lol. The strawberry thing was rather sexy… even better if you added chocolate. Would love to know what’s up with Shane…. what’s wrong with her. Still curious from the last time why Carmen was crying. Alice/Dana work so well together.. and they have such great chemistry. I would love to be able to fall asleep with my head resting on someones chest… listening to their heart beating, unfortunately I’m not that lucky. I’m usually not a big Tina/Bette fan… but how you write always keeps me interested. You don’t need me for motivation to write… you have enough for the both of us. Your comments always leave me wondering about you… and what you’ll say next. I’m hooked and never leaving… get busy on that next chapter. I love everything you do…
I am glad that someone knows the problem with Shane. Not only is Shane in physical pain but seems to be also in emotional pain. Jenny put some of the bruises there but that does not account for all of them. Sounds like she has internally bleeding taking place. Got to love Alice’s mind, how she was able to come up with her theory. Dand has a lot of confidence in Alice. Whoa, Tina kissed Bette. Still wondering how Tina will react to the news that it was Bette who had Marcus killed. Can’t wait for the next post.
my eyes lit up when i saw that you had a new chapter up. sorry i didn’t comment last time, but i just have nothing witty to say. i could bake you cookies..?btw: it doesn’t cease to amaze me how true these characters are despite how the complexity of the storyline.
Wow Bette is cooking and for Tina, that is sweet and cute. Alice is cool, Shane and Carmen are in trouble and still curious about them. Ok post soon please, thanks!
Oi, I love this fic…hadn’t much time to sit as I used too, but I’m still reading even if it’s to catch up…The scene w/Alice and Dana reminded me of an CSI ep…it was well written. Loving it, loving it…ta…cheers mate.
I totally love this! You’re amazing! But about the thing I said earlier, it’s still a bit confusing. If you want to, I can explain a bit more what I mean. My email is “darkness @ darkness-descends.net” (remove the spaces). Just contact me if you want my help
Nice update…I think I have been a silent reader thus far. And the story is very enjoyable to read. I can’t wait to find out what happens next. Does Helena make an appearance?
I really love this story ClosetDana, I can’t wait to read the next chapter..Five Stars from me =)
Bette can cook? lol Alice’s editor at work is a dumbass. And cayenne pepper…I wonder how drinking that will stop a nosebleed? I suppose it’s time to Google it! Heh glad you liked “fucknuts.” =p
Your story keeps getting better! Well done with this chapter, it kept me very entertained.
Another well written chapter leaves us wondering what the next piece of the puzzle will be. Tell us soon! Thanks for writing.
Acooking Bette and the house is still standing. Shane and Carman are so tight Hey love that Alice she has a mind like a steel trap thanks
I’m loving this story every moment!! Will our characters crash into one another?? I can’t wait for the next chapter!! Take your time and let it come to you!!! BUT MAKE IT FAST!!! I’m FEENING!!! Keep up the good work!
oh god, shane and her whole ‘keep it to myself’ attitude. I just watched the episode where Dana dies a couple hours ago so I’m really invovled in the Danish at the moment. I love the idea of her being a cop, it reminds me of one of her and alice’s sex games, lol
This is fuckin’ ‘A’ . . . . I really have fallen in love with this story. My Sharmen girls are clickin’ on a closer level, I’m really feelin’ dat’!!! Just continue, and soon!!! LYLAS ;-p
Hé ClosetDana, this was a great update this story is getting better and better. Hope you find the time and inspiration to update on your other story as well.