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Beaten, Working Toward Recovery Chapter 5
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One of the games that Alice and Dana like to play was; when they would watch people; they would try to come up with stories about their lives. Sometime they would have each other laughing; sometimes they would be more serious, contemplating relationships. Today was one of those days Dana was in a contemplative mood.
As she watched an older couple walking down the sidewalk in front of the beach, it made her feel good seeing them walk hand in hand. She had always hoped on day she would meet someone she could walk hand in hand with when she was old. “Al, were do you think we’ll be in forty years?” Alice though for a second. “I don’t know I guess you’ll be playing tennis in the senior’s bracket, and I guess I’ll be in the stands cheering for you.” Dana liked the sound of that, “So in forty years, you’ll still be cheering me on.” Alice smiled at Dana seeing somehow she had made her happy. “Dana I’ll be cheering you on as long as you can swing a racket.”
Dana wanted to walk on the beach, she reached out her hand for Alice to take it so they could walk on the beach, but she noticed Alice did not take her hand. Now holding hands or locking arms was something she and Alice always did. One of the reasons they were close was they both were demonstrative with their feelings. They did not mind touching other people, and if it was, someone they cared about they both tended to what people referred to as touchy-feely.
So when Alice would not take Dana’s hand it surprised her. Then it hit her, Alice did not want people to think she was *****. She recognized the look of fear in Alice eyes that someone might see her, having had that same fear when she was in the closet. Dana never thought she would see that look from Alice.
Alice could see what she was doing to Dana; she could see the confusion in her eyes. But Alice did not want to walk down the beach holding Dana’s hand. She did not want to hold hands with anyone. At that moment, she decided she wanted to go home, because she really did not know who might be around. She wanted to go home where she knew it was safe. Where she could hold Dana’s hand or lock arms with her and not worry about getting hurt. “Dana I want to go home.” Dana realizing her mistake, “Al, let’s just walk a little, it’s OK, nobody going to hurt us.” Alice felt like everyone was watching them and she did not like that feeling. “Dana, I want to go home. You can walk I’ll wait in the car, just give me the keys.”
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I really love the relationship between Dana and Alice. I hope you will continue this story beyond their healing.
Deb!! I love ur writin! its fantastic! I love this story line its so serious yet with alices sense of humour in with it a bit it makes it fantastic! I love the relationship u have goin on between alice and dana its amazin!
i love it when i see a new chapter of this posted, and i wasnt disappointed, great job :D
Love it. Keep it coming. I espically enjoy how they care about it each other.
i really like where this story is going so far and can’t wait for you to post again. keep em comin.
I think I told you this before but let me do this here. The things I enjoyed most about this chapter:
– The touches of fluff and humor were great, it evens out the pain of the subject and true to life
– I’ve always thought you did a great job capturing not only Alice’s fear but the impact it has on Dana as well. The protective nature of Dana was perfectly expressed.
– The moment that Alice felt her fears set in at the beach was spot on and real.
– Last but not least, Dana thoughts about the treadmill was so true cause that’s exactly how I felt when I have to run indoors lol.
This post is killer..Post s0ON..
It was a wonderful chapter and I cannot wait until the next post you write wonderfuly
this story is amazing. i applaud you. keep up the great work
wow Debs. i’m starting to dread the ‘comment box’ cause i feel like i keep writing the same thing to you but really- this story is wonderfully concieved and delivered. I am hanging on every word- can’t wait to see where you take them. and HOW do you make such a painful experience so romantic?
i love all of your fics, theyre all great and this one rocks :o) cant wait for the next update. xx
I love this and this is going to be a long hard road for alice and dana but will they find there true feeling for each other please post soon
I love this chapter. All seem so real, the therapist,the fears, the relationship, its fantastic.
Oh and the fara fawcett glasses are great.