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Bitter Endings, Sweet Beginnings: Part Six
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Slamming her trunk shut, she took off like a shot, running up the
sidewalk of her building to leave a stupefied Helena watching her
escape. Snapping out of this state fairly quickly, Helena shouted at
the still running Alice who turned to stick out her tongue at Helena
while continuing to run. Unfortunately not having eyes in the back of
her head, Alice couldn’t watch where she was running and she went
tumbling backwards into a large hedge in the front of the building.
Despite the heels she had on, Helena went running, dropping the
grocery bags once she reached Alice and pulled the blonde out of the
hedge. The momentum caused Alice to fly forward and into Helena, making
them land on their backs on what Alice’s landlord liked to call a
spacious lawn but was in reality a sad cube of grass in front of the
building that was perpetually covered in dandelions. They stayed like
that for a long while, Alice lying perfectly still on top of Helena and
Dana started to get out of her Outback, afraid the women had actually
hurt themselves. Then she saw first Alice and then Helena’s body shake
with laughter. The writer moved back to grin down at Helena and the
heiress pushed a lock of hair from Alice’s eyes as she spoke.
It was when the always mellow Patty, a neighbor of Alice’s, walked out
of the building that Dana knew she had to leave. Because as they spoke
with Patty, they didn’t bother to try and get out of their positions.
They stayed where they were, seeming quite comfortable with the fact
that Alice was lying on top of Helena as Helena stroked the small of
her back in lazy circles. There was no way Dana could sit and look at
the proof that the one thing she feared happening the most was slowly
but surely taking place.
That with each day that passed, Alice wasn’t as in love with her as
before, and very soon there would come the day when she wouldn’t be in
love with Dana at all.
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“I’m stuffed,” Alice declared, flopping down on her ugly yet super
comfortable couch. Feeling rather lethargic, she turned to face Helena
and waved her hands aimlessly at her. “This is some evil plot of yours,
isn’t it? To stuff me full of food and then do something nefarious to
me while I’m in a food bloated coma.”
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Great job on the portrayal of Veronica..I could soo see and hear her…it was kinda eerie..lol, but none the less great. You and sulkygeek have some kind of helacious conspiracy…you write them soo well and it just makes me like them a little more every time. Like how you put Dana into play, checking up on Alice and it’s obvious she still loves her. Ohh…i’m soo torn…the danish or helacious in this story is soo hard to choose
This was my favourite chapter of this story so far – perhaps because we got close to Helacious. But it might also have been that I can’t think of much better than going to an Augusten Burroughs reading at Book Soup with Gabby!
Wow i love this chapter, and the story overall so far, hope you post soon!!!
Dreiser – choppin broccoli!! I’m telling you I sat in history class my junior yr of high school the monday morning after that episode of sat night live singing it with my friends!!! God im old.
Veronica was so dead on, i could actually actually cameron manheims voice.
alice and helena? unbelievable cuteness. “Thank you for being what everyone else is not.” I actaully swooned!!!
great update – loved it. it was so good, i couldnt come up with a philosophical reference good enough!
OMG..’Im Luvin it’ I JUS..I LUV YOU 4 WRITING THIS STRY..the way u write – 2 cute..I like that you wrote Dana out 2 b a stocker as Alice had once been an obsessive stocker of Dana&Lara fiasco..GREAT chapter..Alice&Helena’z relationship seemz 2 be progressing niceli – closer&closer 2gether..’Young Luv’..I always look forward 2 reading your wrk..thnx 4 writing, dun stop..PLEASE mst Post so0N..
*melts* Full credit to your writing abilities!!!! I love the cuteness and dorkiness of Alice and Helena. It’s beautiful
Dana is by no means a stalker in this story. She’s simply still in love with Alice and wants to make sure she’s happy.
I have to say that the danish fan in me it’s hurt when I read the Dana’s part but you made unbelievable loving the helacious part too, so I can’t stop reading your work. Thanks. oh and I love Veronica too :P
I like Helene in this, Alice bring out the true person. she and Helene are very dorlie and very loveablem also. Wish she could show this side to others. thanks for a remarlablr chspter.
Oh dreiser, thank you for this latest chapter. The choppin’ broccoli song in the supermarket had me laughing my ass off. I love how close they continue to get and just hate knowing that it will be at least another two weeks before you pick up where you left off with your evilly planned ‘to be continued’. Your such a tease!
Though i am not a big shane or carmen fan, they were both very cute as you said they would be (i think i can handle things like that in small doses). But the best bit about that whole scene was Gabby fucking Deveaux! I can’t express how much i love Gabby. She’s a complete bitch, she’s got a wicked/sarcastic sense of humor, she’s fiercly intelligent, she uses words to cut people down in just nano-seconds… and she does it all with her ‘whatev’ blase attitude. Call me sick, but there’s just something about all that that makes her so damn hot. And its just so adorable that little ol’jenny gets her all embarrassed with her smiling pixie ways. I do hope that you intend to have more Gabby/Jenny flirting going on.
I like dana more in your story than in sulky’s… which is not to say that i think one of you is a better writer than the other, i enjoy you equally ;). But as i was saying, i do like dana better in this because she isn’t all stalkerish and super clingy… and she acknowleges helena being good for alice, and even sees that she is not what one would automatically assume she is.
Those are my comments for now, love your work.
woot that was really good… Hope you’ll come around and write some more of that…;)