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Blind (Chap 16)
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“I… I don’t know T… I just… freaked out… when… when… I was… about to… climax…”
My eyes shot up wide… I got scared too… I wasn’t thinking about having a sex like orgasm when I thought we were going to just make out like usual… well… a little bit more than what we did usually… and with the fear when hearing her about to have an orgasm… I guess I really wasn’t ready after all…
“I’m sorry T… I really love you… but I don’t think I’m… ready.”
I stroked on her hand absent minded while calming myself down from my own freak out… “Don’t worry about it Bette… I’m not ready too…” Bette leaned in to rest and snuggled up against Tina.
Sitting in silence while processing what happened… both of them were left frustrated…
Chapter 16
Bette
The gigantic flashing headlights became more and more urgent when my Saab heading nearer and nearer to it… my body jerked when they hit… the impact was great… I wanted to shout… my mouth was dry… wide opened… my lung and stomach muscles were tensed… but no voice was to be produced… I saw whole bright light… I shut my eyes… feeling the oh so familiar warm fluid spreading throughout my body… fatal pain coursing all over me… I wanted to give up… to death…
Suddenly I saw Tina… holding my lifeless body… pleading and crying… pleading for me to come back… crying and shouting for me to be alive… “BETTE… PLEASEEEE!!!” she choked between sobs… my heart broke into million pieces… it hurt me more to see Tina hurt… the pain doubled… I felt her pain as well… my heart ache is greater than the fatal pain my physical was experiencing… I cried… “TINAAAAA!!!” ‘No…no… this must be a dream… wake up… I must wake up…’
I managed to ‘wake up’… but I was holding something… clinging onto something… ‘No… no…’ dreading to look down to confirm what I was holding to… I shut my eyes… took a deep breath… looked down… “NOOOO!!!!”… Tina… all pale and lifeless… my heart stopped at that moment… I wanted to faint… I wanted to shout… I wanted to get angry… my brain couldn’t control my breathing rhythm anymore… I couldn’t bear the pain… the great lost… it felt like the end of the world… “TINAAAAAA!!!”
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O.o Freaking intense zabo! Wow… This is so full of emotion this one page was a rollercoasterride to remember! I do hope you continue soon! Lovely!
Great Chapter!!!! Thanks
lOVE THE STORY. keep going please…
I don’t think the chapter was horrible at all. I think Bette needs to talk to a professional. Never been there but I think it would be hard knowing you almost died….but look what she has to live for now. Tina. Please post very soon.
Well Zabo, this chappy dose not suck. Looks like they both have a fear of losing each other. So I feel a good long talk is in order.Going past their limits dosn’t have to be a bad thing if they open up and communicate. Hasn’t that always been their problem.I luv this story, just push past it and go girl!!!
It doesn’t suck at all, you may not be happy with it bc as Lament says it doesn’t explain why the hell they’re not ready. From where I see it Tina should get Bette to talk to her about her fears and insecurities, her trauma after the accident. I’d also like to read more about Tina’s feelings, what’s inside her brain…. Trust us, it doesn’t suck.
This chapter is far from sucking…I felt Bette’s anguish…you made it so real. Keep posting…do NOT delete this chapter.
This is a great story, Bette does need therapy
This doesn’t suck – it’s very good actually, but I don’t understand some of it. Is Bette avoiding Tina to keep them from getting too close sexually? If so, why don’t they just talk on the phone? Or is Bette afraid of something else? And why, if they love each other, are they afraid of having or causing the other to orgasm? They need to talk to each other about these things. Please continue zabo!
No no no no no no, Zabo! No suck! Great! Intense! Fear, love, need! Goodie! More! Please? You, great writer! Why, me, write, silly? Hmmm. Here, 2.30 am, late, need sleep! Probably, reason… Thanks!
i think this chapter shows that there’s a great connection between B&T but they have to work on the situation together to keep this connection…great chapter, very intense
This chapter didn’t suck, but it didn’t work for me either, a bit weird but they have a great connection.
suggestions? I suggest that Tina stays and Alice goes over to Dana’s. Tina could plan to stay a few days to take care of Bette; sleep with her but no hanky panky until gradually they get comfortable and at a natural point simply make sweet, tender love…should be easy, these girlz have had plenty of practice making love in everyone else’s story (lmao)…and then thats that hurdle ove and done with…then the rest of their lives can begin…okay??? but hey I know, i have writers bloc frequently…..anywayz whatever u decide PPS
Sounds like Bette may be worried that what she has with Tina could be an illusion waiting for be shattered. Now, this chapter doesn’t suck. I’m a bit unsure how it explains why they aren’t ready to be intimate, but really it doesn’t suck. It could be sort of like an interlude (not THAT type of interlude you perverts =p) as you work out where to take the story. I’m a little stuck on my two stories as well so I know how it feels to try hard and still not feel totally happy with the finished product. Feel free to bounce ideas off of me. =) Anyway back to the chapter. Bette may be a candidate for therapy as her accident was pretty traumatic.
Great chapter…just too short…thanks!
1st?
Bette needs to talk to Tina and together they will find the way to put the nightmares aside, well done zabo!
Finally finished your chapters – and OMG you had us there for a while. You sure know how to bring your readers to the end of their chairs :O) and then back again. Our Bette sure need to let Tina in but I do know what it is like to keep something like what Bette is doing insider herself – it is hard to share but when you do……life is a gift. Post soooooon. Love it
Poor Bette, she and Tina need a talk and Tina will help her to go through this. Ok post soon please, thanks!