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Carnal Pursuits
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If Wikileaks had been done by a four hundred pound man lying on a bed in a basement somewhere, as Donald Trump had claimed then, it followed, in my mind at least, this so-called somewhere had many rooms filled to capacity with these big fat hackers, all experts at weaponizing mass propaganda.
”And the rest is history, Nightingale.” I rouse out of my inner musings and voice my disquieting thoughts to the horse, ”The Great American Mind Fuck has happened.”
Leaving the barn in search of my cell phone locked inside my car, I consider how to phrase this idea of launching a study to my medical assistant, Cassie. When I step from behind a horse trailer, I collide right into Maria.
Long English boots with jeans tucked in and a short-waisted, but warm winter coat, she resembles the woman from Room 303, but with clothes on.
I beam a thousand watt smile at her and she falls into my arms, ”Oh! God!” she cries into my jacket. ”I lost it three times on the way over here. Four, if your barn hadn’t appeared when it did.”
”Baby, baby…” I squeeze her tighter.
”Being on set, watching the inauguration on big screens along with a panel of commentators, I had to keep a TV face, but I wanted to scream. I believe a few others did, too.”
”Jesus, I could never do your job.”
Which she takes as a reason to kiss me. ”Hm,” she says softly when leaving my lips. ”Definitely stick with the job of kissing me. You wouldn’t like being a pundit.”
With my arm around her shoulder and hers looped around my waist we walk from the parking lot into the barn.
”Where is everybody?” She spins around on the heel of one boot before stopping in front of Dev and softly rubbing his nose. ”Bette, he smells a little like you did…” she trails her hand down the horse’s neck. ”…the night we met.”
”Fresh off the trail might be another way to put it.” I loop the reins over Dev’s head and lengthen out her stirrup leather. ”
She crooks her leg for me to push her up into the saddle. ”No, you had a definite animal scent. It’s how I think of you now.”
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Hi, Command:
Very nice chapter, you are nurturing my curiosity on what Bette would do after the inauguration, I’m curious, also, about what is Maria pursuing in this context; why did she meet Bette? It should have to be with the fact that Bette is a neurosurgeon and has a theory about the elections, but what is what Maria wants about that? Does she have the other piece of the puzzle to complete Bette’s theory? What is the message she has for her?
Anyway, I think I have to wait until next chapter to find out. Thanks for posting I will wait anxiously for the next post.
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Proteonomics, To me this chapter became one where I developed a sense of the emptiness and unusualness of a Saturday afternoon by using contrasts of the normally busy barn to create a sense of standstill. A sense that everyone and everything is holding its breath.
Bette fills the few paragraphs with metaphorical descriptions of this, taking our camera eye of her POV on a view of her surroundings, before her mind begins to focus on a new angle she believes leads to how we got here. So, the chapter became next about giving personal background to Maria and Bette.
There was a second where I could have had Maria blurt out what the message summoning Bette to the Tabard Inn had been about, but instead they had, what I hope is an amusing exchange of Bette’s suspicions. Her outburst is followed by Maria’s face frozen in a mask of quizzical shock, I think is how I put it. They remedy their tension with a nice love scene and we leave them for the moment…
Which is also to say, yes, it’s time in the next chapter to lay out some spy story plot structure and get them into a planning mindset.
My thanks always for your reading and comments.
I’ve been waiting for this update and as usual you did not disappoint! Julianne Moore is gorgeous! PPS
Tee,
However one writes a growling sound in text is how I hope readers feel about her, and when their magic happens, about her and Bette. If you had a moment, I’m interested in your thoughts about their ‘getting to know one another’ conversation. As they begin their outward adventure we’ll get to know them better with more biographical details.
As you know writing this story in the first person POV allows me to have Bette tell us anything she wishes, but details surrounding Maria come through her telling us in dialogue, or from someone she knows, also in dialogue. It is possible, and I considered this last night after arriving at my Spring Vacation spot and settling into a house in the woods, I could do a whole chapter with Maria narrating. It’s called a ‘head-pop’ in fiction writing and absolutely can’t be done with two characters revealing their inner thoughts in the same chapter, unless there’s a definite break in action/location, but it’s best if one person tells the story, thus the (somewhat) dilemma of fleshing out Maria’s character.
To that end, I don’t see Bette as the type to snoop around and look for details about Maria, it would disappoint me if she did! Unless, Maria got into trouble then, I could see it as an act of desperation, but only then.
Thanks for reading and commenting. My apologies for the few errors that remain unfixed in the story, but the site keeps 504 timing me out whenever I attempt to edit and correct the commas I didn’t see when proofreading the first eight times, and a word or two I saw as typos.
Blackbird
So im assuming Bette is very discrete about her sexual encounters? Im mean she’s a gorgeous single surgeon and Maria couldn’t find anything about her? Bette appeared to be a very private person on the show. I’m liking the idea of fleshing out Maria’s character. She’s gorgeous and fun and good for her although I love Tina. We know Bette is a very focused woman but in this story and on the show we know she’s at her best when she has someone to balance her out and Maria is doing just that. She’s bringing out the naughty and charming side of Bette.
Each chapter gets better! No pressure! lol
Hello Command / Blackbird,
Great chapter! I like the first person POV, especially when Bette tells us everything she wishes.
Maria does bring out the naughty and charming side of Bette , i agree with Tee about that. But i already pointed out that i prefer Tina, but i must admit that Maria is a interesting woman and i like how they get to know each other, it is somewhat playful.
Is there any chance that you wil finish the story you wrote as Blackbird?
I am looking forward to the next update!
By the story I wrote under Blackbird, do you mean my imagining The L Word’s Season 7, if it had continued? “Touch Tones” was the title of my vision for them. God! Thinking back that was so much fun to write without having to stick to the scripted show and its constraints and attendant neuroses. It was relief to have Bette and Tina at peace and not unraveled by annoying characters like Jenny and Jodie ad nauseam.
Remember Bette’s cowboy boots? She wouldn’t take them off, until Tina insisted she absolutely could not wear them in bed. I think she tried to anyway.
Sure, I’ll get back to Touch Tones one day. Right now, I’m in the thriller mode with Doctor Porter about to get into something out of her control.
Yes, that is the story! You had much fun to write it, but i had much more fun to read it!
Ooh and Bette’s cowboy boots, those i wil never ever forget, priceless ????
I am happy that you will get back to it after this thriller.
Can i assume that you have a Spring vacation! If so, enjoy your vacation.