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Collision Course 4.51 – Foreshadowing
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Dark eyes narrowing, turning to look behind her, a strand of her silken hair falling into her eyes, pursing her lips and blowing it away, Ro stared out the back of her car. What she saw, made her pause, then she realized it was real.
“Son of a fucking bitch!” yelled Rosita, pushing the door open, oblivious to the traffic, thinking she’d fair better against a car than what was coming her way. Diving, rolling and coming to a stand, her prosthetic almost giving way, but she threw her weight to the right, dashing for the sidewalk, horns honking. Feeling the air getting heavy, and the hulk of metal came lunging at the street, turning her body, covering her head as the large wheel slammed the hood of the car that had been behind hers.
Six Days Later….
Rosita sat in the garage, staring at what was left of her car, the street silent, the only sound was the soft voice of her lover on the radio. Sitting on a wooden box that her father had made for her when she’d been three, and to short to reach anything, it was a multitude of colors, spray paint from years of cars being painted, and Rosita’s days of tagging every wall she could find in the middle of the night. Her elbows perched on her knees, her hands cupping her pretty face, listening intently to Alice, just a glimmer of a smile on her full lips.
Six Days Earlier…
Jack Bauer saw the wisps of smoke coming from West Hollywood, grabbing his cell phone, about to dial CTU, when it rang. “Bauer here.”
“Jack, thank god, you’re ok,” said Chloe quickly.
“Chloe, what the hell is going on?” asked Jack in is rapid fire voice, Jack always sounded like he was in urgent need to take a breath. “I’m on my way to meet Agent Scott and Wheaton, and I’m sure I felt the earth move, are we having an earthquake?”
“Hardly Jack, no less than six aircrafts were shot from the sky in the last 18 minutes, Jack. The President has authorized you to do anything you can to find out who, and why, this has happened, Jack,” said Bill Buchanan, head of CTU.
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JP – What frakking award are you talking about girl? I think Jo’s gotten to you somehow… award… Ok girl… LOL
Would like to say something about the awards but I afraid the sex faries will leave me. Dont let Jo lose her powers and Jack fron 24 wasnt the hero in this the ladies were. Love the minor danages to the gang,Shane will think about this for a long time to come. What happen to the people on the plane?? I know you are busy thanks for posting. thanks bvh
Good stuff! I like how you meld and twist so many storylines. Looking forward to the next installment.
I know..I know..you don’t want the award. Well, to damn bad! Deal with it Ms. JM, you are f*#king good, and deserve it. So, smile, say thank you and then post the next chapter!!! LOL Hugs J…really, congratulations. You know how much I wanted you to win. :)
Love how you wrote the past vs. the present/future events. Gotta admit when you bring Amy into the mix, I get a tad bit confused as to which lady Jo should be with. Alice, please keep your mouth shut, for once? Lovin’ it!
WooHOO!!!!!! JACK BAUER OF CTU!!! HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHA great job!! LOVED IT! i took my hands away long enough to read. So now of course Al is going to talk to Jo about what happened. and poor Jo with a broken leg and all. Very cool update!!! LOVED IT!!!
Great chap. You wrote that extremely well. I dont like Amy, i hope she doesnt cause any problems for my fave couple. So Jo is human again huh? Thanks for the update, PPS.
YES! I’ve been hoping for a chapter for what’s felt like an interminably long time… Thanks for posting… Now then, about the chapter: Ha! for once Jack wasn’t the hero! I really want Al to be able to keep her mouth shut. She can NOT blab about Jo… And on that note, I don’t want Jo’s powers to be diminished, or completely gone. Hey, what about the other people on the plane, they alright? And what’s the gang going to do without the Planet? I guess they could use Twilight as the new hangout… Great chapter, Janet, and many congratulations on the award!
whatever the fucking award is… give it to the lady!! u deserve it! all of it!!! OMG! what an episode… intense man, just totally intense… every moment it’s BAM!,WOW!,BOOM!,KAPOW!,YOWZA!… ETC! amazing janet. simply amazing… i really do wish i have your talent in writing and ideas… PPS!
Also, I am not as stupid as I look sometimes, – I meant accolade’s
OMG – JM, I am soooo sorry about the award. It will be okay, you may get many interview requests and when it comes to the book, I say hold out for the bidding war… F tina. (F = forget, it just looked naughtier the other way)——————————Could Shanes lips get any sexier? Bette & Tina, Amy & Jo turn to each other at a time of crises? We all know what a tease your are. Run Rosita Run!Seriously congrats on the award you deserve all the aculades you can receive.
Well thanks for the history lesson there J, though your answer wasn’t as fun as the one I got from my mate (“they” speak French cause they thought they were so cool that they needed to lower their cool levels cause the cool mixed with the snow weather coldness would have made for and uninhabitable arctic environment, so they picked the most assy language in the world to speak… he had a bad incident with the french) I have a feeling yours might hinge on accuracy. Was watching 24 this evening, have you ever considered what a Jack Bower dwarf would be like, most kick ass little package ever. Pistol whipping bad ass midget….with a really deep voice. Any way props to the award, which means you write good. And props to the whole not turning you characters into corpses thing. Have a nice day :-)
Oh and whats the story with the dude and the chick written by the guy? is it Zorro? Zorro is awsome :-p
thanks for your story JM. i really like it and glad you added another poem. i usually don’t leave comments but i do read the stories.most of my comments sound stupid.