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Everything and Nothing: 15.) Sur la Table
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She pulls me into her arms, and I just moan. She kisses me wetly. I can tell she is excited.
Hmm. You taste amazing, like you were down there all day.
Her expression is priceless. First confusion, then her eyebrow raises, then she blushes and she grins, my favorite lopsided grin with her lips pulled to one side.
Oh my god, youre blushing.
***** off, she says boyishly.
Again?
Shut up.
Oh my god, Shane. You have no clue how ***** adorable you are.
Oh, shut up.”
Her lips pout so prettily when she gives me that disgusted sneer.
If you insist. I kiss her again. Thank you. That was ***** phenomenal. Now… you have to tell me how I can repay the favor.
You dont have to-
I want to. But I want you to tell me what you want.
Im easy to please, D, I donno what you want me to say.
Its not about what I want, Hottie. I begin to undo her jeans, pushing them down over her creamy skin. I push the warm soft denim all the way down her smooth silky legs, and she steps out of them. I kneel down and do the same with her boy-cut panties, and she steps out of them, too, but still she doesnt tell me what she wants. So, I kiss her gently, so as not to chafe her already exhausted lips, and I push her back to the table.
Lie down for me? I say, looking her in the eyes.
She wordlessly moves backward, gingerly putting her slight weight on the table. She seems as if shes afraid of falling, and it makes me think of our fabulous make-up *****, and the scary way I felt.
Its sturdy. You wont fall,” I say gently.
She nods and looks strangely vulnerable. I wonder what shes thinking. I wonder what shes feeling. She looks like shes at the gynecologists office.
I move my hand up her stomach, and out of nowhere, make a silly face at her, sticking out my tongue and crossing my eyes. She laughs, and its visible, her chest shaking, ***** jiggling slightly, a sweet, childlike sound. What the-
You looked scared for a minute. Like you were gonna get a PAP smear or something.
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Y’know, if it weren’t for one thing, this chapter would be the hottest damn thing. Seeing words like ‘cunt’ in the midst of a love scene just snaps me right out of the moment in a very unpleasant way – especially considering this scene is supposed to be a very meaningful one between Darah and Shane. But it’s happened in previous chapters, as well. It’s just way, way, way too harsh a word for this context, I think.
And, darnit, I’ve got chair sex in ch 15 of Parallels. *grump*
Thanks guys.
Lilpink, especially, thank you. I’m sorry you aren’t down with the C-word.
I’ve gotten a lot of crit for using it in the past and choosing to use it was always a tough choice, but I decided to because that’s the way I think of it. I find “pussy” to be prissy, “twat” to be vulgar, “sex” (when used too much) to be cheesy, and “core” to be victorian and euphemistic.
Personally for me the C-word connotates a certain rawness that is sexy. Though it’s a widely used insult, I generally tend to find that more of a reflection of society than inherent in the word itself.
Sorry if the use offended; I’m a big fan of your work and was glad to know you enjoyed it otherwise.
I usually don’t mind the c-word – matter of fact, it’s one of my favorite cuss words ever – in fic, in certain contexts, it can be very effective, but like I said – it clashes really badly with the emotions you’re trying to evoke here, I think.
There’s no need to use euphemisms, though. I mean, I don’t use ‘core’ or ‘twat’ or ‘pussy’ or anything like that in my fics. I do use ‘sex’ but very sparingly. Usually, it doesn’t take much to give people a fairly clear idea of what’s going on without making it all about body parts and anatomy and the semantics of such. Because that’s usually not what the love scenes in Parallels are about, y’know?
i really like the use of the c-word (i feel weird writing it like that but don’t wanna offend anyone). i find it honest and sexy. personally when i read your sex scenes they flow for me and i honestly don’t notice the words you use, whereas with some other fictions on this site i piss myself laughing evertime i get to “love canal” which seems to be extremely popular. yeah so, uhh, just wanted to say there are different ways of writing sex scenes that are not “just sex”, and i like your detail november and the way you wrote this.
Exceptional dialogue writing, and the addition of the rabbit made it so much more real. And the sex really isn’t just sex anymore. Amazing chapter, I’m SURE you had a real good time writing that one.
Wow – amazing chapter – wow – well done.
Can’t remember every having just sex, All loving. that was an excellent chapter. Hope you enjoyed writing it as much as I enjoyed reading it Thanks
i think you are AMAZING…i am looking forward to the next part….
Wow!!! Only just caught this fic and read this chapter and now I’m gonna read all the others… Exceptional writing!
Thank you asrai, that means a lot to me. I mean, when you think of it to describe your own anatomy, it can only be so offensive. I was feeling bad though, so I’m glad to know I didn’t alienate everyone. Thanks for speaking up. :)
no problem. keep it up :) cunt-lovers of the world unite