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Hindsight – Chapter 11
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My back straightened as her words sank in, “W… why… where are you going…, what… what about… Ang… Angelica..”
She smiled at me, she knew I had gone into panic mode, but what did she expect, she had told me we could spend the day together, and now she told me she needed to ‘pop out’…
“She still has her pj’s on… I need to get some clothes for her…”
“There are still diapers here…” I was grasping at straws, but I didn’t want them to go.
“I’ve already changed her diaper, she needs to get dressed, I thought maybe we could take her to the park this afternoon…”
I just looked at her, I felt my eyes well, if I let them go, would they come back… I wanted them to come back.
“I also need to get us something to eat, you… uh… there isn’t anything here I can make us for lunch…”
“We can get something delivered…”
“Bette…”
“I… don’t want… you to… go…” the words came choking out of my mouth; I suddenly couldn’t string a sentence together…
“I’ll be an hour… tops…”
“What if you… what if you don’t come back…?”
“We’ll be back…”
“But you might go and… you might decide…”
“An hour…”
“I can’t let her go… not again…”
“Bette…”
“Please…” it was all I could get out as Angelica started to awake and squirm in my arms.
“Bette…”
Her voice was sterner, I knew she was trying to calm me, but I couldn’t stop the rising panic in me, the twitching sensation in my stomach, the emptiness of my stomach, the rising bile, the lightness in my head, regardless that I was seated…
“Are you okay…?”
I shook my head at her words, the emotions that I was feeling were coming to the fore, the disbelief, the annoyance that she said she was leaving, even if only for an hour, she said we would spend the day together, and she asks if I’m okay…
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As always brilliant Jo. You deserved all the awards you got and i am sure that you will not be stopping at 4 will you ? as ever your writing takes my breathe away with the emotion dripping from every word. You still haven’t accepted the challenge to do damage to the Levi’s – i’d give you a new award for that ” the hell freezes over award ” you are still a yokel though Ally xxx
Tina should collect Her and Angie’s things and come back to Bette. B&T Rule!
Well, crap, Tina! Why don’t you just leave the kid with Bette for an hour. She’s too feeble to kidnap her right now. Besides it would go a long way to demonstrating both trust in Bette not to do that and give her a demostrative reason to trust as well. Or we can do the Solomon and cut Angelica in half. Whatever.
jo—thanks for the additions to this wonderful story. It has been hard to keep up on the site over the past week or so…but you, Ally, and J are a must. Hope you and your family have a wonderful holiday.
Tina could just leave Angelica but then again it is a way for Tina to build the trust by doing as she promises. I hope she won’t get held up because Bette will freak out.
Hey Jo. Congrats on your awards – soooo well deserved. The way you portray Bette’s fragility is astonishing. I bow to the master LOL… Thanks and have a great Christmas.
Bette has all the right to feel insecurities but Tina has the rigth to show Bette that she wants make happy and that Bette can trust in her. I think that She needs collect some clothes for her too and spend the night with Bette. congrats for you award. Happy hollidays
You know I spent hours writing that story just for everyone, who had read it, at the convention tell me that they liked your ending better! Anyway, I’m anxious to know what Henry is going to make of all this time that Bette and Tina have spent together. Brilliantly written, it always a pleasure to read one of your posts.
Jo that was WOW!!!! Thank you Merry Christmas and Happy New Year
Sweetie – huge thank you for your words, they mean so much to me….and I love you too mate!! 3 stories = 3 awards speaks for itself, you’re the very best and my Bomb :o)) About the post – Ed think Tina should leave Bette and Angel alone while she pop out, I know it probably will ruin your plans, but it’s the right thing to do and you know it LOL. xx
absolutely awethansome….u sooo have to post again soon….i cant make myself wait…..lol…..thanxxxx….
tina could just leave angie with bette, she doesn’t need her to bring some clothes and food…i can see why bette is panicking
Hello Jo. Congratulations on getting that really big pen next to your name! Your writing conveys such intensity and emotion. Bette’s angst is palpable. Have a great holiday season.
great
Great…intense…but I don’t blame Bette for panicking…what if T has an accident or Henry traps her somewhere…Congrats on your awards…u write great, intense, detailed,gripping
Jo, congratulations on all the well deserved awards. I love the way you write. Another great chapter. Happy Holidays to you and your family.
I’m with the others who said Angelica could just stay with Bette. And like Rau said, what if Tina is in an accident. I could just see something like that happening. Besides, going shopping sounds easier alone than with a baby.
I could feel that panick in Bette just through your words. Bette will be jumpy for a long time to come. In my little dream world she would return with all her stuff and move back into at least the neigborhood. Moving back into the house is not a good idea but at least out of Henry’s house and somewhere closer to Bette. Congrats on your awards and I hope that you will continue to write for many moons to come.
Intense! I understand why Tina might not want to leave Angelica as sky pointed out. Maybe one of the girls could come by. So hard, but you’re doing such a brilliant job with this story! Congrats on your well-deserved recognitions and have a Merry Christmas, Happy Holidays, have a nice day with your family!
Damn this is so good and I agree with skycaptain and let see more. Congrats on your Award Jo and happy for you!
Dear Jo… Wow… Bette is really putting herself out there… Its so wonderfull when someone who is usually so close, finally opens up like an oyster, revealing the most wonderfull oyster, called a soul. I think its good that Tina is not giving in and letting Angie stay with Bette, this is T’s first chance (in a long line) to show Bette that she can be trusted again… Thanks for this wonderfull chapter, Jo, hope you have one in store because I’m hooked ;)
wow
Yeah, indeed, I think the most accurate word to sum up how I feel after reading this chapter is indeed : ” Wow ” ! Wonderful chapter, Jo ! I loved every single word of it. In fact, every word from you melts in our minds like pure candy. You’re the best, Jo ! You are a fanfiction goddess and I humbly bow at your feet. Furthermore, as I told Ally too, I want to thank you, thank you, thank you so much for taking the time to write even during the holiday season. Merry Christmas, Jobadge !
Phew! So much emotions in one page. I could just feel Bette’s pain. Brilliant Jo!
I think just like Bette is not trusting Tina to come back…Tina is not trusting leaving Angelica alone with Bette for right now. I mean just last night Bette was thinking about offing herself with pills…also Bette has fainted in front of Tina at least twice in the last 24 hours and Bette admitted that she had fainted before. If Kit or one of the girls were there she would probably have left Angelica. It’s gonna be awhile before either one of them gets that full trust back…love this story so heart wrenching.
I love all your posts, but especially the chapters from Hingsight, they made me cry and begin to hope that Bette and Tina may be together again. Please continue to write, you are indeed one of the best writer in the forum!