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If I Fall: Chapter 23
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"Oh," Alice finally remarked before resuming her own look of concentration.
A few more silent moments passed between the two and with each one, Dana couldn’t quell the uneasy feeling that was rapidly developing in the pit of her stomach. Alice’s face now revealed a mixture of disappointment and insecurity, and Dana took note of it as she began feeling more and more like she’d already let the writer down.
"Al, I don’t have to—," she started, but was all too quickly cut off by Alice’s brave front.
"Stop," the writer signaled with her open palm in the air. "Please, it’s your fucking job, Dana. This is like, one of the most important tournaments you play all year and that should be your number one priority right now."
"But…what if I don’t want it to be my number one priority anymore?" She knew the effect her tone would have on the writer as she asked the question in the most adorable whimper she could summon, and stuck her bottom lip out for emphasis.
And just as Dana suspected, Alice smiled widely and shook her head at her before moving in and stealing a few more kisses.
"Listen," Dana managed to get out during the brief moments of air intake. "We don’t have to talk about New York right now." Again, the words squeaked out in the few short seconds she had in before Alice covered her mouth with her own again. "I mean, it’s an entire week aw—," the last syllable swallowed up by the writer. "And we can figure all that stuff out then." She finally managed to move far enough away to halt the writer in her tracks, taking her hands in her own and rubbing her thumbs over the palms slowly. "But I would like to talk."
Alice let out a dramatic groan. "I was afraid you were going to say that. We were doing so well up until now."
Dana let out a playful chuckle and brought Alice’s hands up to her lips. "Yeah, I’d say very well, actually." This time she noticed the face the writer made, and she was thrilled to find that she still had the power to make Alice blush…no matter how infrequently it occurred. "But seriously, Al. I think it’s important that we talk some more about this."
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YAY!!! I love it! Post Soon!
Yay! I’m sitting in a hotel room in London, online for the first time in almost a week, and I see this on the first page. So happy you posted, and what a great chapter. I’m glad my girls are talking and holdong off on just jumping each others’ bones, although I have to be a perv and admit that I think they should jump each others’ bones all the time. And I know she’s already been claimed, but can I have Jules? Give a girl a break, I got through all of L3 without even a kiss. But it was such an awesome time, and all f them were gorgeous. Leisha and Erin kept watching each other talk on stage, and it was enough to make your heart melt. Well, maybe just mine since I’m a sap. This comment is hella long, sorry!
you blow me away. that was so good. i am glad alice went easy on dana when she tried to walk out, that would have sucked if they already got in a fight. i knew jules was going to know (but how could she not?) and yeah she should have let alice have it – but i’m glad she didn’t. we need to meet up in ny sometime soon? i will email you.
What a great update. This is such a fantastic story it’s been such a journey that you have taken this pair on to get to this point I can’t wait to see what you write for them together. Thanks for updating.
I have loved this story from the very beginning. This chapter is another example of your finest writing, beautifully executed. My heart melted while reading A & D’s tender moments. They absolutely belonged together and thanks for reuniting them at last. Simultaneously, I also felt sorry for Jules. Her speech was accurate, wise, thoughtful and most important of all, flawless. It is really pointless to be someone’s #2. Lastly, I want to convey to you my utmost admiration of your ability to deliver a perfectly crafted story. Bravo!
Hey, I’m totally new here and this was one of the first stories i started reading, I’ve been a bit of a silent reader but I finally decided to come and join the gang. I’m so happy you’ve found time to come and write again, this was a flawless and heartfelt chapter and I can’t fault you. Amazing =)
you rock!! so much too, more more please!! i crave this story so much it’s a little weird actually. Your one of two writers that i get really excited for wen i see u’ve posted i just can’t get enough and now that they’re finally back together its just gunna get so much better, poor jules though oh so sorry for her but it had to happen for danish sake. I can’t wait till next time on if i fall…. neways until next time i guess :) snaps for the swissmister!!!
Excellent chapter as always, swismiss24!! You write both girls so well — so honestly. And it’s great that they are actually communicating. I also love the maturity of the both of them. They both wanted to stay and get re-connected but both realized they had other things they needed to do. Gives me hope that things will work out this time around for them. “Capitan” Hee! Jules? Come on over here and MaGoose will take care of you. ;-D Thanks so much, swismiss24. This really was an amazing update to the story!
I feel sorry for Jules. She’s a great woman, if she were real and here, well somebody would be awfully lucky to have her! hehe This is one awesome chapter swismiss. But even if Jules is great and all, it wouldn’t be fair o neither of them if they continued sailing their ship. Thanks for updating! dear awesomeness:)
Nicely done yet again! I really like the fact Danish slowed down and talked to each other. It’s encouraging to see their relationship maturing. As much as I liked the impulsiveness of “Finally” in S2, I equally enjoyed those few glimpses we had into their still-intimate but less frenzied conversations. Thanks for rounding out their interation for us here. Congratulations on your Bar results! As always, I’m looking forward to the next installment. Thanks for continuing.
I hope you plan to update this AMAZING story soon!