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Insight. Final Chapter.
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Alice and Shane both turned, as Dana chastised them for doing it so obviously and forced them both to turn back around.
“What’s she’s doing?” Alice hissed.
“I don’t know.” Dana whispered, “looks like she’s waiting to talk to Marina … yeah … yup, they’re talking.”
“What are they saying?” Shane asked, leaning in close.
“I can’t tell,” Dana replied, still watching them closely, “Helena looks kind of mad she keeps waving her arms around and pointing …”
“What else?” Alice asked, desperate to look.
Dana watched them for a second, as Marina turned and walked away, appearing to leave Helena where she stood, “Marina’s leaving.” Dana stated, “ No … wait, they’re both leaving …”
Alice and Shane both snapped around to look. “Shit!” Alice stated, getting up quickly, she grabbed her jacket, “come on!”
“But we haven’t paid!” Dana muttered, as Shane grabbed her by the arm and dragged her out with them.
~
They followed Helena and Marina walking a reasonable distance behind, slightly breathless as they kept their fast pace, the two women walking in silence side by side, a couple of feet apart as Helena lead the way.
“Where are they going?” Dana whispered, slightly clueless as ever.
“Ssh …! If we knew that then we wouldn’t be following them.” Alice pointed out, returning to their previous silence.
They took a few lefts and rights, ending up on a street a few blocks over that none of them were particularly familiar with. Watching as Marina and Helena rounded up on the steps of a building and stood, their hands on their hips as they seemed to weigh up a way to get in.
“Whatever’s going on I think we should help?” Shane suggested, looking at them both for an opinion.
Alice nodded whilst Dana shrugged, a little creeped out by the churning sequence of events.
“Hey!” Shane called out, “Hey … guys, what’s up?”
Helena turned and saw them, instantly running back, she reached Shane’s side and brought her forefinger to her lips, “Sssh … please, shut up!”
~
“My star patient,” said Tina, opening the door to the room a crack further.
Bette glanced up from where she sat, perched on the edge of the desk in front of the window and she strained to read by the light of the street lap. She closed the file and set it down beside her on the desk, swallowing the fear that screamed inside.
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well if that isn’t a csi/law & order twist lol. Great story!!!
Good save at the last minute there, sofa! Well, well, well. That was one twist beyond. I should never have doubted the redoubtable Peggy. The old girl may be crusty, but she’s got a heart of gold. But poor Bette had to wander through this whole thing seeming not only lost, but a little dense as well.
Wait! You mean to tell me Tina was wearing the fuck me shoes when she was getting all Mrs. Peel/Avengers on Bette’s ass? Well, Bette showed her! Whoops! Upside your head! I said Whoops upside your head!
Tina needed hitting, that’s all there is to it. So Marina suspected all along, did she? It must have been hard, thinking you know something yet not able to prove it, and not able to see justice done. I’m really glad Helena didn’t do anything rash, though. This was really a great story, sofa, such a fun ride, and I loved the twists. Muchas gracias!
This was indubitably the most wonderful story I’ve ever read in my life. I am beyond myself with admiration! So skillfully and patiently executed! Thank you sooooo much! I hate to see it end, of course. But am sooo pleased with your tenacity at posting daily! Thank you, again. This was just stellar…Stellar, I say! Couch, you are the bomb! You blew my mind! :)
Holy Fu$%ing shit batman!That was totally awesome! Best twist on the characters EVER! You’re in my top 3 Sofa! I say we bring back the rating system!!!! Just for this one alone!!!!!Thank You.
Did I tell you ? – you’re in a league all your own! (well I meant to)
Do, I get any points for detecting that Satina was trouble? Helena acting Jennyish is a whole other kettle of fish on the DSM-IV spectrum…. L-Nore was a good game of smoke and mirrors. I love the visual of Peggy and her muscle. In my mind she’s wearing a trench coat, hat tipped to one side and red lip stick. In case you hadn’t noticed, I enjoyed reading this story!
So…Sofa, let’s see, it was a Belena story and you did make Tina the bad guy (but you let Tina and Bette have sex)and Helena and Evie were having an affair. O.K., I totally missed the twist about them all being in cahoots together, Helena, Peggy and Marina, to put the sting on Tina. (Clapping my hands and giving you a standing ovation)…really well done!
Bravo! Well done Sofa….even though I was hoping Bette would drop kick Tina out the window.
ah, retro, don’t we all wish that? haha, jokes! great story babe, serious standing applause:) i just can’t get over how good this is…plot, character, i mean yeah, you’re good, i knew that all along, but this bag of tricks, this wellspring of brilliance you keep pulling stuff outa, it gives me such a pleasant jolt every time. i wanna see more:) xoxoxox
Sofa, this story is beyond brillant! Seriously, you continue to amaze me with your wonderful character development and plot twists. I wasn’t always able to read and comment timely but I thoroughly enjoyed each and every chapter. Tina — a psychiatrist and a murderer — wow! Freud would have fun psychoanalyzing that one. Well done!
Sofa I highly enjoyed this twisty turny Belena/Helebette story.
Sofa, you put Nancy Drews ass on the curb woman. Outstanding performance. Thank you. Md
oh come on, whining like a child, this can’t be the end, i want more, more of these two together, oh and by the way great story, great suspense, great writing!!!
This was just excellent! You have truly out done yourself. Great job!!
SOFA!!! THAT WAS GREAT!! Loved the added twist at the end. This fic rocked! I so hope to see more of this caliber soon! Gosh I may have to go back and re-read it …again! LOL!!
Superb tale, start to finish! You seem to have a little Hitchcock in you, sofa…
Three words FAB U LOUS!! That was the bomb! Loved the twist!!!
This was fantastic!!! I was completely thrown. I had no idea what was coming!!!! Hostage jokes–LOL. Have I said that the story was great? Wonderful? Intoxicating? Thrilling? Better than average (evil grin)?
I had to check for the finale of this story while at work and I am so glad I did. This was amazing sofa, you are amazing!!! You are a superb writer and I definitely agree with others that this may have been one of the most intelligent posts ever on the site. No need to bring back the ratings system…There’s no contest!!! Thanks for such a wonderful read. yb1
omg…i just read this whole thing just now…it was brilliant…it was psychotic, it was romantic, it was almost like old greek tales…i loved it…good job!
Well im a huge tina fan so i hate she turned out coo coo for cocoa puffs but like a good book with a great plot i just couldnt put this story down. infact i usualy dont continue belena stories beyond a few chapters so thats a testament to ur incredible imagination and writing so thanks!
Excellent tale Sofa. Had us all on our seats. Little Tibette but NOT!. Excellent story again. The crowd roars.
I am late in catching up but what an excellent little story this turned out to be. It kept me guessing up until the end. Wow… amazing!
Gee…zus!!!!!! Well, love or loss of it can drive a person CRAZEEE!!!!! Great story. U betta come up with something on one of your other stories soon…I seem to think u have one unfinished. Thx for writing.
O…M…G!!! MAYBE I am not as paranoid as I thought I was… hehe I knew there was a reason to be afraid of Tina… this fic was FREAKING AWESOME!!! I loved the suspense!! thanks a lot.. I hope you do a sequel =D
VERY GOOD!!!