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Instinct
“Carmen” I hear Shane’s voice from the back… great
“Get the fuck out!” I yell from the floor without turning around to see her.
“No we need to talk”
“Shane what happen to you?” Alice asked her
“Carmen I need to explain”
“This is not the time Shane…” Alice said…
“I love you” Shane said going around me, to look at me. I start crying when I see her, Blood in her shirt looking all messed up
“Carmen please don’t cry” she start crying and it only makes it worst
“Get out, get out!” I yell closing my eyes, I didn’t want to see her anymore. I wanted her to disappear… to just close my eyes and make her go away.
“Carm please don’t”
“Shane…stop…” she gets down and touched my face, which I pushed away
“Don’t fucking touch me”
“Carmen please” she breaking down and I cant take this anymore, I cant look at her like this, I don’t want to.
“Leave… ALICE MAKE HER LEAVE!” Kit came in grabbing Shane and so did Alice and took her away, closing the door. I feel like I can’t breath again like my heart just stopped… it sounds stupid but that’s how I feel… I cant control the tears any longer so I cry and cry… not being able to stop
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One year later
In life, we are taught that there are seven deadly sins, we all know the big ones, gluttony, pride, lust. But the sin you don’t hear much about is anger. Maybe because we think anger’s not that dangerous. That we can control it.
So what makes anger different form the six other deadly sins? Its pretty simple really, you give in to a sin like envy or pride then…Try lust or coveting and you’ll only hurt yourself and probably one or two others….. but anger… anger is the worst…. The mother of all sins.
“Carmen get here quick!” Papi yells from her car parked in front of my house
“What?” I get out and she turns the volume of her radio up and I hear a familiar sound
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(31 votes, average: 3.52 out of 5)
Interesting start, looking fwd to the next chapter.
Daaaaamn!!! I’m lovin diz babez!!!! Okay, so it’z Carmen? who iz doin da whole ‘Shane’ thang now huh? I wonda wat happened to Shane? Can’t wait to find out though!!! Man!! I’m excited as to see wur you tak us on dis adventure, chicka!! Whelp, hope you fina’ update like now cuz you already got me hooked and i need my fix ASAP!! LOL!! Like alwayz from me, Baby-gurl, LYLAS :p Stank, da’ one and only, chicka :D Holla’ at me if ya need anything, baby ;-)
great start. its different seeing Carmen from this side. keep it comin!
I’m digging this start.. tables has turned! Interesting!=)
hey (: everyday i log in to see if u’ve updated your previous story “the lighthouse”. now u have a new story! and the verdict is that… it’s so GOOD! i love the way u play with the words, they make so much of sense, makes me think.. would lovelovelove to see where u’re gonna bring this story to ((: – 2 thumbs-up!!