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Let it Ride- Chapter 11
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Tina made no move to get it and Dana walked back into the room with a questioning gaze at the blonde. Grinning mischievously, Tina said, "You’re closer."
Dana rolled her eyes at Tina’s juvenile behavior and reached for the phone. It had to be someone from the team. Nobody else knew the number.
Resting the phone in the crook of her shoulder as she looked at her reflection in the nearby mirror, Dana said brightly, "Hello."
The tennis player heard Shane’s voice greet her and one of those eerily dualistic moments where she felt two strong emotions so powerfully and yet they were so poorly-defined that she couldn’t rightly distinguish occurred.
Dana didn’t immediately assume something was wrong but even as she found herself greeting Shane enthusiastically she had the sense that the ground was about to snatched from beneath her feet.
Shane’s voice sounded strangely distant and Dana vaguely registered how bizarre it was for Shane to sound so dull and blunted. If Shane had gone through the trouble to track her down when she was due to return the next day something had to be wrong. Her parents? Howie? Her stomach flipped unpleasantly as she considered the possibilities. Her mind didn’t automatically single out Alice. Though Alice had been sick, Dana couldn’t even conceive of anything happening to her.
Shane was quiet as she said, "Al’s in the hospital, Dane. She collapsed tonight."
Dana found herself frozen in place, as she heard the story filtered through the phone line and into her ear.
The tennis player said quickly, "She’s okay, though. Right? Tell me what the doctor said, Shane."
Dana was more or less aware of Tina sitting up on the bed, her playful mood completely gone.
Listening to Shane describe Alice’s condition, Dana pushed aside her questions and made an instant decision.
"I’m coming back tonight, Shane."
The other girl sounded wary. "I dunno, Dane. It’s so late. And you went there on a bus." She seemed genuinely flummoxed as to how Dana could return.
Dana was already throwing her tennis things in her bag and saying coolly, "It doesn’t matter. I’ll rent a car. I’m coming home tonight."
Shane wavered for a moment before she seemed to relent. "Okay, just get to St. Michael’s."
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OMG you had me laughing at the end with Al’s words frip…Don’t know how you managed to write so much in such a shirt period of time and then for me to read them is amazing. I liked how you had the whole scenario of how one has to wait for anykind of news of a loved one. Thanks frip loved it
Seriously…GO TO BED!!! Lol. I love this more than ever, but you’ll kill yourself posting at this rate. And give us some time to process! Haha, I’m kidding, if you’re this into it you may as well let it all out. I was that way too, still am mind you, I just can’t get myself to write so much so quickly. I’m a perfectionist who feels compelled to mull over every chapter I post. I’m glad Al’s okay and that Lenore is appearing to be nice. Okay I still need a little time to get this into my head, but it’s great. Oh, and I’m from the lovely corn-filled state of Illinois. Yay me. Except not really, lol.
fripster, I just post the comment to your last post. And here you are with another post. I was right, you are on “ludicrous speed.” You are killing me. Now I shall read this post.
I barely finished 6 chapters of Goldrun15’s “Crossroads” and you posted chap 9. With the speed you are writing, I will not get to Tiff_Duke for a while. Church lady, you had me laughing. Pick another frame, it will save your eyeballs. Take my word, my eyes are degenerating because of all the abuse during my crazy partying years. I too tend not to read anything other than Danish. A little bit of the others are ok, just like the way you have written. As for this chapter, love the drama and it read like a thriller. I could not wait to find out what would happen next. It just proves to me once again why I like this story so much. “Bette was occupying herself by reading instructions to the Heimlich maneuver”, too much. fripster, I could not stop laughing after the 2 last sentences, “What the fuck? Am I dead?” Where do you come up will all these unbelievable ideas & lines? I felt like doing a Wayne & Garth ‘s “I am not worthy” bow. Just tell me that you are not going to make Dana sick too with her scratchy throat? Then again, we might need the drama. And thank you for waking A up before the end of the chapter. Thank you again. btw, I second MT’s comment above which was a laugh and a half too. p.s. See it took me like an hour to read and comment a chapter meaning I am slow.
Wow! I had to catch with the last 2 chapters because I was at work, but what can I say? I love Alice’s last words, but of course, we know she’s not dead. (She better not be!) I love how Dana is so devoted to Alice. She drove back just to see her girlfriend. I love the part with Lenore and Dana, which was really bittersweet. I also loved Alice’s last word from chapter 10. The Six Million Dollar Man?? lol Will Dana be upset with Alice for not staying at home, and will she be more upset when she found out what kind of pills that she took? Well I guess I won’t find out until the new chapter!!! You’re a great writer and I wanted to tell you that myself. You make me want more and more with your story!!! Keep it up and PPS!
Hee! I have my own theme song! ;-D You are incredible. Not only do you post another great chapter but your author’s notes are almost as entertaining. So glad Alice is OK and it appears this incident will not impact her rock star aspirations. I also like how you wrote Lenore — I think she does have some good mother in her. And I gotta know — was it Lee Major’s plane that she used? I also loved how you wrote Helena in this one — so strong but also so fragile. And Dana rushing back to be with Alice was wonderful. Your chapters are always so rich in detail, too. Like how you descibed Alice’s blanket at the hosptal. It’s subtle, but, just shows what a strong writer you are. I could go on but I want to get these comments done before you post another chapter… ;-D I forgot to mention in my comments that I loved you using “cogitate” in one of your summaries. That is one of my favorite words and I think it needs to be used more in conversation.
I love Alice! You have wrote the very soul of what she would be like. And the dedication amongst that group of friends is excellent. You’ve even made her mother seem real but I never doubted that she loved her child. She just has a problem she needs some help with. Great update!!
Alice is too fucking funny! I can’t imagine her saying anything else but that. PPS
i like fripsterbot. through all of your posts today i had so many things to say and now i can’t remember them. i do remember something about a fanny pack, and i agree – they are hideous and useful at the same time. this was an awesome chapter. i love what alice says at the end of the chapter. bette and helena are cute together. though i could never picture it on the show – you make it work. i love helena. and i love how you seem to have a character on all of the characters, not just danish. so we agree… three more posts tomorrow? ok sounds good. kidding, kidding. get some sleep or a life or something, bot! again kidding cause then that would mean i need to get one as well and we can’t have that happening. ok good night, good weekend, cheers!
okay quick comment here, I’m late as usual for sure, my professor has dragged me into an effing contest without briefing me and my teammates saying it’s a boring two-day seminar. Anyway, I was hoping you’d post so I’d feel better about my day and yay! lucky me, you did. what the fuck am I dead? hahah Alice is just great, and I’m glad that Lenore’s finally being a good mother. Dana coming home at the wee hours of the am is really sweet, just to see Alice. And who would’ve guessed that the first person to hear her say she loved Al was Lenore? all in all this is an awesome chapter. Loved it again. thanks for the update!!!x0x