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Masked Feelings CH 84 Holding On… Praying for Strength
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Alice – Perfect timing as usual.
Dana – Shit… what time is it?
Alice – I don’t know. Why is your mom here?
Dana – She’s here to pick me up…. damn it… it must be later than I thought.
Dana grabbed a change of clothes from her closet and another pair of panties from her dresser. Sharon called for her again. Dana yelled back this time.
Dana – I’ll be out in a couple minutes!
She grabbed the bra off the floor and put it on. Then she starts to put on the clothes that she laid out on the bed. Alice gathers her clothes off the floor and goes into the bathroom. She knows that she doesn’t need dear ol’ mother to walk in on this… she’d surely have a heart attack and Dana doesn’t need this kind of aggravation. After she got dressed, she ran a brush through her hair and washed her face.
When she walked out of the bathroom, she could hear that Dana was in the living room with her mother… apparently having a disagreement about something. She decided to just wait for Dana to come back and they could say their goodbyes in private. Alice waited several minutes and then she heard the front door slam shut. Did she really go without saying goodbye? She went into the living room and no one was there. Alice looked out the window and saw the car already going down the street. Dana was gone…. just like that.
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She could hear them in the walls, running past her, in the direction of the hole in the wall. Roxy prayed that she had it patched well enough to keep them at bay. She feared that her best wasn’t good enough. They knew where to get the food now and they were waiting for the opportunity to feed again. She could hear them fighting in the wall not far from where she was at. Roxy could feel herself shaking like a leaf and couldn’t stop.
She couldn’t see them but knew they were coming. The rats were either pushing or pulling at the sheet. She could hear the friction of the sheet against the drywall… then she heard the metal clanging of the lids she put in the sheets to keep them from entering. The rats were in! She could hear their feet on the concrete floor. Roxy stood up and braced her body against the wall… one leg attached to the box and the other pressed to the wall. They sounded like they were everywhere.
Roxy had put the bag of groceries on the sink in the bathroom, hoping it would be out of their reach. They still had the scent of where their last meal and was looking for food. Roxy had swept up most of the mess from the last time, but couldn’t get all the crumbs. She could hear their shrieks of dissatisfaction when they didn’t find what they wanted. They paced the length of the floor and chewed at the closed door of the bathroom. It sounded like they were shredding the thing. She shook all the more imagining what they could possibly to to her… God knows how many of them there were.
She covered her ears, trying to block out the horrible noise. It would take more than that to silence the racket of the rat pack. She started to pray out loud, which is something she hadn’t done in too many years to mention. There was a loud crash from the bathroom. They had found their stash and all the vermin came running past her. One ran across her foot, causing her to jerk her foot away from the wall and scream. She lost her balance, fell to the floor and landed on top of one of them. Roxy could feel the vermin bite in defense as she tried to roll off. Her ankle twisted in such a way that she couldn’t move. She could feel the blood trickle down on to her foot. Roxy knew she was hurt bad, but at least she didn’t hear any bones snap like she thought they would.
The pain of her ankle was unbearable. It felt like it was split open and was oozing out now. The rat ran from under her when she muscled her body up… then she collapsed back to the floor. She could feel one licking at the blood in her wound as she passed out.
TBC – Do you want more? This is just a start to 2008. Hope you come back. Please feel free to comment.
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Luckily I already had a glass of wine in me when I saw you posted. And then I read your author’s notes and opened another bottle. Here we go… The NC-17? Hot! Work that dildo, Alice! Definitely required two cold showers. And it actually didn’t seem weird. I think sometimes when there is a death, you want to feel alive. Argh! Once again I feel bad for Roxy! Shame on Dana for not saying goodbye to Alice. I hope she had a good reason. Another great chapter, brteyes!
WOW!! Jam packed chapter there!! And omg tht must be the best sex scene i have ever read on this site, it was so real and HOT!! lol. Not only did u show there need for each other and there wanting for some pure good sex but u also showed what love they have for each other tht seems to just keep growing. Well done :)And again with Roxy some reli interesting stuff, didnt expect her to do wat she did watching tht video and i cant help again but feel sorry for her, how much can tht woman withstand!! As for Dana leaving the way she did, i hope it was a good reason cus Alice must be reli confused after the way they seemingly just connected. Another mind blowing fantastic chapter and reli can not wait for ur next one :D. P.S I still havent started my next chapter for my story Im terrible lol. I cud blame ur story as a distraction lol just kiddin. PPS X
Me again lol. Dont worry i will never not be a Danish fan and will never stop reading stories as good as this one. :) Dont worry bout tht. x
Alright … you’re not getting a full comment tonight. That being said, I have two things to say to you. Love Juices! Seriously! And enough with the rats already … it’s just fucking gross!
I’m sorry for saying this but truthfully I have a new favorite when it comes to sex scenarios.I don’t know how you manage to write over 10 pages full of hot and steamy sex but you succeed leaving me all warm and fuzzy:-)) Every time I think you can’t do any better you come upwith a new detail here and a new detail there….et voilà , the effect is clearly to be seen. Thatyou still have a lot of ideas in that lovely head of your’s amazes me. Actually, this really provesto me that you understand a lot of your “profession”. I still believe that you should changeyour “métier” and become a writer. Brteyes, you have a great talent, please take advantage of yourabilities, darlin’. I have faith in you. Well, if you should reconsider and start a new career justlet me know:-))) I have a feeling that you’ve got more hidden qualities. Alright, let’s reviewthis chapter now. Roxy is still a character that polarizes. One moment you want to hug her, the next instant you want to kill her. It’s a bumpy road with her and it reminds me of a rollercoaster. Everyone deserves better, even our imprisoned Roxy. I wonder how long she’s going to stay in that bunker. Althoughreacting phobic to the rats I’m sure she’ll find a way to get used to them and with any luck she’ll vanquish her fears. That would be a victory on her side. I kinda feel sorry for her again. This year won’t be as promising as she’s hoping. Well, maybe I’m also wrong….mostly I am anyway, lol. You mentioned that she hasn’t been through the worst yet. Does it mean she finally gets a body transition and becomes a Rox or a Rex? lol Or does David have a genetically manipulated rat which is bigger than a dog? lolJust don’t torture her too much. I still like her as you know. She’s a good girl in my eyes, even thoughshe’s fighting dirty. As for David: what can I say what I didn’t say before? I like his name, lol. I think,I’ve never mentioned that. Who’s his Goliath by the way? I have the impression that David’s pretty muchbored most of the time. He has nothing to do. Give him a gun and a target:-))) I can see a showdownbetween David and Tony though. Could be quite interesting. Why the hell did Dana leave Alice withouta simple bye? Was she too confused as to what had happened earlier (and I’m referring to that supernaturalsex plot you created….simply P-E-R-F-E-C-T!!)? Or was is just a bit too much for Dana? Women tendto have a dramatic exit, lol. I still hope that Al and Dana can work it out someday. It’s still too soonto trust each other, and they apparently are far from it. The solution is lots of conversations but eventhat seems to be too difficult for them. You can send Dana to me for some time. I wouldn’t mind keepingher entertained, lol. But I think, my woman won’t like that. Ehm, I didn’t say anything, lol. I am sosorry for that Britney Spears slogan last time. If I knew that you don’t like her I probably wouldn’twrite that down, lol. She has a song you’d like though. I won’t tell you the title because it’s too dirty. Maybe next time, lol. Can’t wait for your next installment, darlin’. Your story is a qualitymasterpiece and I’m very grateful that you write it:-))) You’re funnytastic…..
P.S.: That dildo plot is stuck in my head now. Thanks for that, lol.
An excellent storyline. Sorry for not commenting on it earlier. I’ve been a silent reader for a long time and thought now it’s the right time to raise my voice. I’m fond of it and expect more to come. Whoever loves thrillers should be reading Masked Feelings. Great title btw. I highly recommend you, brteyes. PPS!
Sweet Baby Jesus! I think I need a cold shower! I was a few paragraphs in when I had remembered that I had read this chapter when you first posted it, but for whatever reason, didn’t leave you a comment. That was all sorts of hot and I loved it. They just keep taking half a step forward and a marathon backward. As for you being a sick bitch, you should totally take that as a compliment. David is still just as twisted as ever, but I don’t think we’ve seen his worst yet. Roxy, while you know how I feel about rats, I’m still having a hard time finding any sympathy for her. Plenty of people have had plenty of bad breaks and wouldn’t consider pulling half the shit she tries to pull. I’m not a black & white person by any stretch of the imagination, but I’m not finding anything redeeming in her. Off to the next chapter. Trying to catch up.
what the??? im confused:S why would she leave like that? so weird i hope shes okay tho nothing bad..poor alice she must be confused…great chapter i love this story so good!! :)