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Pendulums
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“So, where is Harrison anyway?” Alice asked, looking back inside the glass doors behind them to see if she could catch sight of the hunky – and obviously gay – tennis partner that Dana had brought to the party under the guise of being her boyfriend.
“Off with a waiter,” Dana responded without thinking. That was true – Harrison had disappeared after catching sight of a cute waiter within minutes of their arrival at the party. Cursing inwardly as she realised how that sounded, she added, “he recognised one of the waiters from college, and they started talking – you know, about football and that sort of thing. I thought I’d give them a bit of space to catch up. You know how guys are,” she finished with a laugh that sounded cringefully off-key. Trying to shift the topic, she asked, “where’s your boyfriend anyway?”
“Oh, he had to leave,” Alice replied vaguely. After a pause, she decided to be honest. “Actually, I think we’re splitting up.”
“Really?” Dana asked, surprising herself and Alice with her sudden, almost giddy, shift in tone.
Alice’s face brightened into a smile as she took in Dana’s happy expression. “Yeah, really,” she replied softly. She felt her breath catch in her throat as she met Dana’s eyes and held them for a few quiet seconds. Suddenly, it seemed like everything around them was stilled; the noises from the party inside were almost imperceptible, and the normal sounds of street traffic were silent. Alice couldn’t hear anything except her own laboured breathing and the almost deafening thudding of her heart.
Dana felt her face flushing as her eyes were drawn irresistibly down to Alice’s smiling lips. Forcing herself to fight down her sudden desire to pull Alice toward her, she reluctantly tore her eyes away, breaking the spell that had momentarily taken hold of both of them.
Dana cleared her throat in an effort to fill the silence between them, which was becoming heavier by the second. Staring hard at the ground, she decided to bring up something she had wanted to ask Alice all night. Before she could lose her nerve, she spoke. “Alice, I was wondering… I have a tennis match this weekend – it’s just a small tournament I’m doing for charity, and it’s the semi-final, and I’ll probably lose, and it might be boring as hell, but… do you want to come watch?”
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Aww man did you have to end it that was so good!
Yeah I agree wit De, this sory should mos def be continued, thanks for the post!!!!
I am sure you could go a lot further with this, so please continue.
Wow, so nice to see you posting again! I really liked this… I never got how *Alice*, of all people, could hold herself back for so long (years!) before acting on an attraction to someone. This was a very good take on what might have caused the shift. Thanks for the post, blue. I hope you’re back to writing regularly soon. Cheers
Aw..you’re making me miss Dana all over again..**sigh**
I completely loved this story. I was an avid reader of your Lace stories and I just love your writing. This was so enjoyable, I know you said it’s a one-shot, but I’m hoping a little positive feedback may convince you to continue with it!
Really good story, please continue.
that did end so soon. but it was so perfect. i could see it happening just like that. fantastic job. good to see you back as well. and i can’t wait for your danish story.
Love.This. Yay backstory! And one that really needed to be explored…I’ve been wondering about it since I saw 311. Yay again.
You’re back! I loved your Lace-stories, but I’m very exited to see you’re going to work on a Danish story! Loved the chemistry between these two in this short story.
hehe. danish. yay.although i’m not liking dana’s interest in melanie, i’m looking forward on the development of the relationship between danish now that dana is out but how much would they ignore the intensity between them…
Hey blue! Pendulums was indeed the perfect title for this very satisfying one-off! Like everyone else, I’m sure you could delight us further with is she/isn’t she situations….but this definitely set the stage perfectly for that great tension that is so obvious now in retrospect! I thought this was finely and realistically crafted (for just a teensy moment I thought you were going to have Dana make a miraculous comeback in her tennis match…which would have been fun…but utterly unrealistic!) And, REALLY loved the door in Alice’s face! Finally, I could just ‘see’ Alice making the comment about Melanie…you truly captured these two in a very engaging story….great to see you posting again!
I would love it if you would continue this wonderfull story… could my puppydogeyes do the trick?
Yay Blue, wonderful to see you posting again! I’m so glad I caught this fic, and like your chracter development in your stellar Lace writings, the way you portray interaction between Dana and Alice here is delightful–I especially loved the way Dana confides shyly in Alice and feels something shifting between them. And Alice and the door? Classic. So Bravo to you! And if you decide to continue with this, you know, hey, I’d be OK with that;) –your loyal fan