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Pendulums
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Dana was standing in the middle of the empty locker room, taking off her top. She had released her hair from its ponytail, and it tumbled loosely over her shoulders as she removed her shirt.
Alice stood in the entryway, transfixed by the image of Dana wearing only a sports bra and skirt. Not paying attention to anything else, she let go of the door, and it swung back into her so quickly that it caught her off-guard, with its full weight slamming unceremoniously into her head.
“Fuck!” Alice yelped in pain as the door knocked her backwards into the corridor outside the locker room. Adding to her humiliation, just before the door shut, she saw Dana look her way in surprise.
Alice rubbed her head, and briefly considered making a bolt for it before Dana fully realised what had happened. But, her mind was too preoccupied with the throbbing pain in her skull to form a coherent plan of escape. So, when Dana opened the locker room door a moment later, she found Alice standing before her, cursing loudly and wearing an expression that mixed pain with utter humiliation.
“Jesus, Alice, what did you do?” Dana asked with concern, as she lifted Alice’s hand away from her forehead to survey the damage. She could see a painful-looking red mark that would probably turn into a bruise, but which luckily wasn’t bleeding.
“I, uh, was coming to see you,” Alice stammered, looking up sheepishly. As she did so, she suddenly became acutely aware that Dana still wasn’t wearing a top. Dana caught Alice’s downward glance, and quickly realised the same thing herself. With colour rising in her cheeks, she motioned for Alice to come inside the locker room with her.
“Come on, I’ll get you a cold cloth for that,” Dana said, closing the door carefully behind Alice. Putting an arm around her friend, Dana guided her to a bench and told her to sit down while she went to the sink to dampen a facecloth. Alice gave Dana a grateful smile as she sat beside her and placed the cloth lightly on her forehead.
“There you go,” Dana said quietly. Then, she released a light laugh. “So, what happened to you, anyway?”
Alice returned Dana’s laugh, and quickly tried to think up a lie. She couldn’t very well admit that the sight of Dana topless had caused her injury.
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Aww man did you have to end it that was so good!
Yeah I agree wit De, this sory should mos def be continued, thanks for the post!!!!
I am sure you could go a lot further with this, so please continue.
Wow, so nice to see you posting again! I really liked this… I never got how *Alice*, of all people, could hold herself back for so long (years!) before acting on an attraction to someone. This was a very good take on what might have caused the shift. Thanks for the post, blue. I hope you’re back to writing regularly soon. Cheers
Aw..you’re making me miss Dana all over again..**sigh**
I completely loved this story. I was an avid reader of your Lace stories and I just love your writing. This was so enjoyable, I know you said it’s a one-shot, but I’m hoping a little positive feedback may convince you to continue with it!
Really good story, please continue.
that did end so soon. but it was so perfect. i could see it happening just like that. fantastic job. good to see you back as well. and i can’t wait for your danish story.
Love.This. Yay backstory! And one that really needed to be explored…I’ve been wondering about it since I saw 311. Yay again.
You’re back! I loved your Lace-stories, but I’m very exited to see you’re going to work on a Danish story! Loved the chemistry between these two in this short story.
hehe. danish. yay.although i’m not liking dana’s interest in melanie, i’m looking forward on the development of the relationship between danish now that dana is out but how much would they ignore the intensity between them…
Hey blue! Pendulums was indeed the perfect title for this very satisfying one-off! Like everyone else, I’m sure you could delight us further with is she/isn’t she situations….but this definitely set the stage perfectly for that great tension that is so obvious now in retrospect! I thought this was finely and realistically crafted (for just a teensy moment I thought you were going to have Dana make a miraculous comeback in her tennis match…which would have been fun…but utterly unrealistic!) And, REALLY loved the door in Alice’s face! Finally, I could just ‘see’ Alice making the comment about Melanie…you truly captured these two in a very engaging story….great to see you posting again!
I would love it if you would continue this wonderfull story… could my puppydogeyes do the trick?
Yay Blue, wonderful to see you posting again! I’m so glad I caught this fic, and like your chracter development in your stellar Lace writings, the way you portray interaction between Dana and Alice here is delightful–I especially loved the way Dana confides shyly in Alice and feels something shifting between them. And Alice and the door? Classic. So Bravo to you! And if you decide to continue with this, you know, hey, I’d be OK with that;) –your loyal fan