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Pendulums
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“Uh, I slipped as I came in the room, and when I let go of the door, it flew back and hit me in the head,” she explained, recognising almost immediately just how lame her excuse sounded. “That door is a real safety hazard, you know,” she added, in an effort to shift the subject.
“It’s meant to prevent people from barging in on us,” Dana said teasingly, giving Alice an amused smile when she saw a blush creeping across her face. She had seen Alice staring at her just before the door slammed into her, so she wasn’t entirely convinced by the story she had given. But, since she couldn’t figure out what else would have caused Alice’s accident, she shrugged off the doubts in her mind.
“So, what are you doing down here, anyway?” Dana asked after a moment. “I thought we were going to meet at the café upstairs after the match.”
“Oh, well, I just thought I’d come down and be the first to congratulate you,” Alice explained, feeling even sillier as she realised that she was coming off as some sort of crazed fan. What is happening to me? she wondered vaguely. Dana was supposed to be the dorky one in this friendship, but Alice had never felt like a bigger geek in her life.
And, if she was being completely honest, her state of flustered agitation wasn’t being helped by the fact that Dana still hadn’t put her top back on. Alice was having a hard time keeping her gaze above the neck; her eyes kept moving rebelliously downward toward Dana’s toned stomach, which was still slick with perspiration from the match. Biting her lip, Alice forced herself to look away.
“Congratulate me?” Dana repeated with a smile, completely oblivious to the effect she was having on Alice. “I don’t know if you were paying attention, Al, but I lost.”
“Yeah, but you played really well,” Alice replied firmly. “Plus, you didn’t tell me that you were playing a top-ten player. I’d say you gave her a run for her money.” She shot an encouraging look at Dana, and was surprised to see the suddenly serious expression on her face.
“Well, I wouldn’t have played half as well if I didn’t have such a loyal cheerleader in the stands,” she said gratefully. “I’m really glad you came, Al,” she added softly with a quick but meaningful glance.
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Aww man did you have to end it that was so good!
Yeah I agree wit De, this sory should mos def be continued, thanks for the post!!!!
I am sure you could go a lot further with this, so please continue.
Wow, so nice to see you posting again! I really liked this… I never got how *Alice*, of all people, could hold herself back for so long (years!) before acting on an attraction to someone. This was a very good take on what might have caused the shift. Thanks for the post, blue. I hope you’re back to writing regularly soon. Cheers
Aw..you’re making me miss Dana all over again..**sigh**
I completely loved this story. I was an avid reader of your Lace stories and I just love your writing. This was so enjoyable, I know you said it’s a one-shot, but I’m hoping a little positive feedback may convince you to continue with it!
Really good story, please continue.
that did end so soon. but it was so perfect. i could see it happening just like that. fantastic job. good to see you back as well. and i can’t wait for your danish story.
Love.This. Yay backstory! And one that really needed to be explored…I’ve been wondering about it since I saw 311. Yay again.
You’re back! I loved your Lace-stories, but I’m very exited to see you’re going to work on a Danish story! Loved the chemistry between these two in this short story.
hehe. danish. yay.although i’m not liking dana’s interest in melanie, i’m looking forward on the development of the relationship between danish now that dana is out but how much would they ignore the intensity between them…
Hey blue! Pendulums was indeed the perfect title for this very satisfying one-off! Like everyone else, I’m sure you could delight us further with is she/isn’t she situations….but this definitely set the stage perfectly for that great tension that is so obvious now in retrospect! I thought this was finely and realistically crafted (for just a teensy moment I thought you were going to have Dana make a miraculous comeback in her tennis match…which would have been fun…but utterly unrealistic!) And, REALLY loved the door in Alice’s face! Finally, I could just ‘see’ Alice making the comment about Melanie…you truly captured these two in a very engaging story….great to see you posting again!
I would love it if you would continue this wonderfull story… could my puppydogeyes do the trick?
Yay Blue, wonderful to see you posting again! I’m so glad I caught this fic, and like your chracter development in your stellar Lace writings, the way you portray interaction between Dana and Alice here is delightful–I especially loved the way Dana confides shyly in Alice and feels something shifting between them. And Alice and the door? Classic. So Bravo to you! And if you decide to continue with this, you know, hey, I’d be OK with that;) –your loyal fan