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The Telling
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Freezing for a second, she dropped the clothes she was holding and they fell carelessly onto the floor by her feet. Then she turned around and saw me looking at her, our eyes meeting for an electric moment before she tugged her gaze away and stood tall, assuming the stance and expression I had come to realize was her last line of defense against me.
"I didn’t think you’d be here," she said bluntly, folding her arms across her chest and tossing her hair back, her chin jutting out defiantly. Her eyes flickered around the room, looking anywhere but at me as I moved through the doorway and stood by the bed, shoving my hands into the pockets of my black pants.
She waited for me to answer, but I couldnt. I didn’t know what to say. Apologize? Beg forgiveness? It had all been said and done so many times that the weary submission in my heart advised me to silence the pleas I had so carefully constructed in her absence. From the hard set of her jaw and the glittering pain in her eyes, I knew they would fall on deaf ears anyway. She was still hurting. As was I; the pain spreading through my chest and down into my gut, where it split me apart and tormented me time and again.
"I won’t be long," she pursed her lips and shook her head slightly, turning away from me to retrieve the clothes from the floor, tossing them behind her onto the bed with the others.
"I just wanted to get some more…" her voice trailed away and I saw her shoulders shake, just once. But it was enough.
"Tee," I moved further into the bedroom, my legs knocking up against the bed as I held out a hand to her. She turned around, looking at me for what seemed like the first time, the pain in her eyes blistering my skin as they raked up and down my figure. "Tee, you dont have to – "
"No," she held up her hand, cutting me off as she chewed at her bottom lip momentarily. Taking a deep breath, she blinked slowly and lifted her hand to push a stray lock of hair behind her ear. The next time she spoke, her voice was clearly more under control; I wasnt sure what scared me more, the fact that she had to control her emotions, or the fact that she was succeeding in doing just that.
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gaymo, your writing is exceptional. Great job!
Gaymo, very nice, as good as the first time but where is part 2. Don’t tease its not kind :0. Who is on the cell phone?
Whao, that was great, no worries about bruising, because that was phenomenal. Well written, you should continue.
You have a great handle on the way words flow and an excellent vocabulary. The sentences take on a languid quality which reflects Bette’s inertia very well. Perhaps dividing this into chapters would make it easier for those of us with short attention spans.
Five stars and two cold showers (at least). That was HOT, gaymo, and beautifully written.
Wow! This is excellent writing! I wish i could write as beautiful as this!!! Keep em coming please..
I can’t remember where I’ve read this before………but, that’s not important…….I just want more……please! ;D 5-stars
incredible writing. i don’t think you need to worry about bruising when you write like this. fantastic, please write more. thanks! :)
Gaymo..this is absolutely great…more soon….and i love the name..”You big gaymo…” hehehehe
Does the end mean the end or TBC. That was womderful,well written. Letting us know that Tina still loves Bette,but can’t be with her because of all the hurt. Thanks
amazingly written, well done!
This is extraordinary. I loved it the first time I read it and have been longing for a next chapter ever since. Please follow this up with something–ANYTHING!
Gaymo, that was some excellent storytelling. Man…pick me up off of the floor!
This was incredible. As I was reading, I kept thinking that this can only end badly, but I couldn’t stop from reading it anyway…one hand periodically hitting the down arrow button on my keyboard, the other clenching the arm of my chair. Thanks!
WoW! The flow was great, the vivid imagery was very well used and the internal thoughts are well written, graciously weaved into the whole story. Articulate and clear language. Very well done. Like JB said, sex can be a lot of things, it can be about power, reconnection, and other things… and yours have been graciously and beautifully written to reflect as reconnecting as well as asking for forgiveness.
wow. totally impressive writing!!!!
This is sooooooo good, Gaymo. And I know the American went back home so you should have plenty of time to write more for us. Put the Bailey’s down and get busy.
holy hootin’ hell! That was AMAZING! you capture their pain and just, wow, just that’s crazy good. I’m floored really, so glad to read some quality BT emotional storytelling. I hope this isn’t the end for this story!!
oh my goodness, you made me cry. you write very visually i can just see bette’s heart breaking… who is on the phone? will you please write a part 2? you’re really doing a wonderful job
Please let it be Tina on the phone. Just asking for some more time. Anything to ease this ache. You are sooooo good at this, gaymo!!
Absolutely wonderful writing – you capture the conflict of continuing love with the pain of betrayal so wonderfully. Exceptional
I’m never writing again. I swear to god. Anything I could come up with would be like lining up a hand tracing that became a turkey with a New York Times best-seller. :D To say this was incredible would be an insult. I still feel the ache in my chest. Please, for the love of all that is good and holy, please write more. Soon. Now? :P 5 stars!!
Hahah cramit! i was thinking the same thing.. right now i feel like i couldnt write anymore… All i want to do is wait for the next chapter… :D Gaymo please write soon… dont let your Portard family down!
Exceptionally well written.
That was incredible. Again i say, I don’t know how you guys do it.
I just don’t know what else to say. That was just great!!
Could you please use your wonderful literary and writing talent for good…and put them back together? Your story has moved me to tears.
wow!
Oh my god!
How great is that story, it moved me so much with your expression and use of words, ( i even shed a few tears) you are truely a great writter, keep up the good work.xxx
Just wanted to reiterate my desperate need for you to continue this story. The ache while reading this……it’s still unbelievable. Your writing is amazing. Please, please continue this. :)
that was amazing, seriously. amazing. thank you