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Uncharted Territory
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‘I got your message yesterday.’
‘I got your flowers this morning.’ I reply within a heartbeat and we both sigh letting the silence speak. In the hallway Helena looks at the ceiling before ripping off her wedding ring and pushing it into her now ex-wife hands. I close my eyes. ‘I can’t wait to see you.’
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Late afternoon the cab takes a last turn and we enter the tree-lined street that’s so typical for West-Hollywood. A nervous excitement brews in my chest, waiting to take over as the house comes into view. One story, with a white picket fence and a garden on the back side. At the driveway our two cars stand on exactly the same spot, parked, as if we just returned from work. The neighbor three doors down is talking his chihuahua for a walk. The same brown jacket. The same swaggy walk. Across the street a door opens and the woman with mops waves at him. She used to be blonde; probably she heard redhead is coming to fashion again. They exchange some pleasantries, she says something, he smiles and pats the dogs before they round the corner. To the small dog park down the street. The same as every other day.
Standing in front of the white sturdy door with my suitcase at my feet, I search for my keys. Life seemed easier when I had only one set of keys on my keychain. As I slide the key in the keyhole her melodic timbre increases my heart beats.
The door doesn’t squeak as I open it. Through the backdoor the pool water glisters. The kitchen looks just as unemployed as it did on our third date, when she invited me to her house for the first time. On the counter lays a bouquet of tulips. This house formed the negative decor in all the memories I relived in Paris. Standing here now, in this sunny room, with butterflies fluttering around in my stomach, it all seems a lifetime ago. Timid sunlight gets caught in the stylishly coiffed curls waving around her beautiful face. In the corner, a man crouches down, a hammer in the back pocket of his jeans, picking up his tools. ‘The wall is fixed ma’m.’
‘Thank you for your service.’ Straightening her sleek skirt she bends to pick up the wedding picture. She wipes the glass before hanging it back on its place, against the newly plastered wall. ‘It looks like new.’
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It’s a wonderful story with great emotion that you can feel as you read it. You depict France very well!!
Looking forward to read it this weekend!
They’ve been through so much that even when they are doing well, a part of me worries for them. Bette taking a trip to L.A. on her own? I’ve never been happier that Tina could join her in the end. But the last part of the chapter killed me… I wish they can have the family that they want.
The good news is that this was a long chapter and the sad news is that this story is almost over and the end of this chapter was so sad. I feel for both of them. I really wish and hope that one day they will have their family!
The description of Paris, beautiful written! I visited Paris a few times and it’s such a beautiful place!
Glad that Tina came to LA at the end, came home, the home she left to go to Paris. This is a very important step in their relationship.
Diana, i love her!
Love the longer chapter. This is such a great story. It can’t be ending, though, that is not ok. Just when they are coming back together. It needs a second verse, please consider continuing it. :)
One things I love about your writing is that you show the connection in the dialogue you write – no easy task – but artfully done here. It’s in the shorthand way that they talk to each other and in the way they read each other so well. You don’t tell the reader – Tina missed Bette – you add them talking about Tina being in a grumpy mood because she is accustomed to hitting snooze since Bette has been with her and this morning she had a hard time getting to work on time because of it. It’s delightful and adds such depth. Thank you !
Hi BetteisBetter, I am enjoying this story so much, you have a unique writing style that really captivates me. I hope to read more to this story, it’s beautifully woven…
I’m one of the silent readers. I absolutely loved this story and your writing is beautiful. I almost want to go to France now! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Oh my fucking God! What an brilliant chapter! The way Tina was like struck with lightning when Bette told her that she loves her. The way you used content of the purse to show Tina collecting herself and then hanging up! And then the voice text and the way Tina subtly used LDR to tell Bette that she loves her too, just bc it wouldn’t do it justice to say it over the phone for the first time after such a long time. And then their acknowledgment with ‘I got your text’/‘I got your flowers’! And what an amazing way to show through Helena and Winny what divorce does to the surrounding, it’s such a heavy ballast that impacts everyone.
The way you showed how Bette misses working but how she grew and learned what really matters! I love Bette in the gallery! And the way you used Tina starting to write again as a reference to her growing feelings for Bette (as Tina said bf ‘It had nothing to do with Paris’). Not only that you said you are about to finish the story, but you write it in so many small details, that you make it beautiful but painful obvious! (Sorry for all exclamation marks – this story makes me that excited!) And then… at the end, the twist I’ve never seen coming… I could feel how lonely Tina was without you putting too much effort in it. It broke my heart. Seeing this story and it’s tone it wouldn’t surprise me anymore if it would happen they end up with just the two of them. It would be so sad and yet it would fit this story.
BK is right though-sequel maybe?
I’ve read this stories since 2 or 3 days ago.. And finnished all 22 chapters in short time (English not my language so that rate of speed.. Is really super fast on my account lol). I even read at office in working hours… (Bad employee i am.. Hahaha)
But your stories are just soooo good… Makes me so addicted.. Turned every emotions upside down… The chaos, turmoil because of the loving, cheating, regretting, feeling lost, it’s so mixed up..
Can wait for the next chapter..
Finally, thank you for sharing your wonderful story…
Wow… i just realise how much i Missed this story…
It woke so many emotions in me… Like silent reader my first language isn´t english – but i could not stop enjoy this story!
I hope so much you will finish it one day!!
I keep coming to check for updates and keep getting disappointed. Pretty please BetteisBetter, don’t leave us hanging :(