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Hamilton Inn
Tina lay in the hotel bed, sprawled out and exhausted. Sam had just left and told her she had the hotel until tomorrow and she was glad. After last night and most of the morning she had been fucked hard and put to bed sore. She felt exhausted but lighter somehow. Looking at the breakfast cart she sighed and rolled over to go back to sleep, quickly reminded of the marks on her back and bum. Smiling she closed her eyes and fell back to sleep.
Helena’s Beach House
They had both showered and dressed in casual clothing, Helena in a pair of Aeropostale sweatpants and a Provincetown sweatshirt, Bette in a pair of Cape Cod sweatpants and a Key West sweatshirt. They were siting on the back deck sipping coffee and reading the paper. Bette’s cell phone rang and she picked it up.
Bette (smiling): Hi Kit. Yeah I’m fine. No I’m just taking a few days to myself. How’s Angie?
The Planet
Kit (cutting up some fruit and cashing out a customer): She’s good she’s in her playpen right now and having a ball. You okay baby girl. After everything I’m just…
Helena’s Beach House
Bette (watching Helena walk across the deck): I’m dealing with it Kit. I just need time and space and I’ll be fine. I promise (admiring Helena’s form as she moved about the deck) so let me call you later. Give Angie a kiss for me.
Helena (noticing Bette’s eyes on her body): Like what you see (teasing?)
Bette (turning her head; blushing): Sorry…
Helena (walking over): Nothing to be sorry for (sitting down) pool’s set and warm and if you want I can get the jacuzzi going to we can just relax (licking her lips.)
Bette (feeling warm all of a sudden): Thanks (reaching out and squeezing her hand) you have no idea…
Helena (pressing a finger to her lips): I do and I understand. I’m going to make a plate of nibbles and then we’ll hang by the pool or whatever.
Bette (standing up): Let me help you with something.
Helena (teasing): I thought I heard from several different people that you were not allowed in the kitchen or something…
Bette (swatting her on the rear): I’m learning to cook slowly…
Helena (laughing): Watch the assets and for your information (laughing) cooking is not ordering out and making a salad (taking off at a run through the house.)
Bette (shaking her head): You just had to go there didn’t you Peabody just wait to I get my hands on you (chasing after her.)
Helena running towards the large living room and ducking behind a couch. Bette was hot on her heels and she hoped she wouldn’t catch her so soon.
Bette knew Helena was hiding and she had an idea of where. Slowly coming around from the other side sure enough crouched behind the large couch there she was. Slowly she knelt down behind her.
Bette (softly): Who are you hiding from?
Helena (startled and tried to get away): Bette be nice (standing up and backing away as Bette pursued her.) You wouldn’t want to hurt little ole me now would you?
Bette (laughing): I thought you like a little torment every now and then.
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You know anytime a writer puts up their work in a public isn’t an automatic waste of time. People need to see that what we do whether the subject is something they are passionate about or not, takes a lot of effort and time. So if you feel you have wasted your time then that’s that. I don’t feel as I have as my partner who is 100% loyal to Tina and Bette loved what I did. And she is my biggest critic as my well as my fan.
And Duckster thank you. For the encouragement. I have to realize that there are some very immature individuals out there and then there are some who just won’t comment because they don’t know how.
First of all, I’m sorry that you feel ofended. I didn’t know that the comment section is only to say: “Oh, what a beautiful story! That was marvelous! Great job!” My bad. I promise it won’t happen again! A little advise though: since you put your story out there for everyone to read, be prepared fon negative comments. Comments are just what the word says. An opinion about if we liked the story or not. I happened not to like it. Big deal! If a friend of mine had asked me how did I spend the last hour or so, my answer would be “I have wasted my time with a bad story”. That comment has nothing to do with your ability to write or your skills. It’s about the storyline. Don’t tell me that you have never read something that you didn’t like and you said to yourself “Oh, what a waste of time”. I’m sure that you did but I guess if you had the chance to speak to the said author you would say something like: “That was great”! Secondly, I didn’t know that because I didn’t like a story, I am immature. That characterization coming from a writer to a reader is very mature I suppose. Moreover, a Belena story under a “Tibette417” for pseudonym is a bit much for my taste and frankly, under that pseudonym I would expect a Tibette ending. It’s like when you go to a bookstore and buy a book about cooking. You don’t expect the author to analize voodoo tactics but how to put food together to be edible.And last but not least, I didn’t say that it didn’t took efford and time from you to put this story together. I know what it takes from someone to write something, anything really. But I have a question. Just because someone decided to write something that it took an x amount of time and y amount of effort does that mean that I have to like it? And to put an end to what I’ve started, and wasn’t my intention with my first comment, just because I didn’t like the story doesn’t mean that I don’t recognize your effort or that you don’t write well enough for my taste. My comment, I repeat, was only for the storyline. It had nothing to do with you as a person.
Myrto I am not saying that I wasn expecting anything along the lines of great job. I expect negative comments and you never stated why it was a waste of your time and I never took it as personal. So no it’s not personal and I appeciate your opinion. Have you read the story titled Dance With Us.
FINALLY!! I’m a tibetter but BeLena’s my dream couple…been begging someone to write some new, have re-red all written:) Ha, looks today’s my lucky day!!!:))Think you rushed it a little, meant to be a single chapter? Although it’s quite long! So, just know there’s an audience wanting more, take your time and write some more!!! Please!!! Please please please!:)
dont have much time to comment,but i must say loved this. thanks
what a waste of my time!
Wellll… there were a few short cuts to the resolution and it was somewhat implausible, particularly how quickly Helena and Bette declared that they were “in love”… but I wouldn’t call it a waste of time. Thanks for making the effort :)
Please understand that tibetters are quite a rabid I mean loyal lot and we do appreciate a little heads up always. No need for it though if your name had been “belena417”. Anyway thanks for the story. There’s always an audience for a belena here, just not that many are coming out to comment. :)
I enjoyed reading the story, but after the end shock, I can say it is nice to have unexpected end, but I thought the declaration of love is very quick to my taste. and Tina’s reaction should have more depth, both of her ex’s got together in a relationship she was shocked but she got over it quick also. maybe because this is a one chapter story that’s why u rush things but in general the writing is good. As a Tibetter to the bones, please don’t make it a habit to separate our beloved couples;D