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Lest I Forget (5a)
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“What a beautiful story,” Gemma said softly as she stood up. I’d stopped talking after describing the wedding, mostly because the memory of it made me cry tears of happiness. Alice’s eyes were fixed on my face, and there were tears in them too, so I knew she was just as effected by the memory of it as I was. It had been years since we’d talked about it, but it was still one of our favorite stories, and I didn’t feel guilty in the least that the kids weren’t there to hear it. They’d heard it hundreds of times while growing up, and Alice and I had answered any questions they had about it. There had been a wedding photo on our mantle for almost 40 years now, taken by Jenny right as our first kiss as a married couple had ended. It captured us leaning our foreheads together, staring into each other’s eyes and grinning, and it’s still one of the happiest pictures I’ve ever seen.
For some reason, remembering the wedding had made me cry this time. Maybe it was the fact that I was sitting by what I knew was Alice’s deathbed, telling it to her for what I was sure would be the last time. This might sound incredibly stupid, and I’m sure it is, but some part of me was still hoping for her to recover, even if only for a while. Remembering the wedding and how she’d looked so damn happy drove some strange sense of terror into my heart. Of course, it wasn’t like I hadn’t known she was dying up to this point, but somehow the vision of her standing there in her dress looking at me with so much love and happiness in her eyes made me want to trade places with her now. I’d have done it in a heartbeat. In that instant, I was screaming somewhere deep in my soul. I had no idea whatsoever of how to go on without her in my life. She’d been such a huge part of it for so long that I really didn’t think I could breathe properly without her. Looking into her eyes, I know she had to have been aware of my anguish even in her weakened state. The compassion and obvious love visible through her tears almost did me in. I reached over and took her hand in both of mine, finally understanding that I was truly saying goodbye to her.
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hey! Sorry for not commenting on the 4th part of this story. I was wondering the whole time if you updated it, I just appearently didn’t see it. But hey, that gave me two parts at one time!Lovely wedding and wonderful wedding night. Just everything about it was beautifully written and described. Them first just sitting down on the couch after they got home was kinda typically danish and it fit somehow. I found it sweet. And don’t worry, you did a very good job with the first person writing. Loved it!
Beautifully Written….and HOT!I love thier relationship!
As I said before, better and better – oh, and hotter and hotter … Wow!! Wonderful, fantastic, bravo, more!!
I guess I was overwhelmed by the 2 paragraphs and the last line “I was truly saying goodbye to her just sent me over the top and I had to take a break. This post is another great piece of work. S’s toast was right on and touching. I am glad that that the rest of the chapter is more about happy Danish, I was a little apprehensive that I might keep crying for the rest of the chapter. Then you showed us the humor. “…couldn’t pee on our own, then other was to buy a gun and start firing,,. and racing each other to the bedroom, classic! I might have mentioned this before, and I will say it again, you have to be the “Yoda of Danish.” I have not read one piece of your work that would negate my opinion. You have A & D down pact, writing as if you were themselves. And please do not second guess yourself. I echo what MaGoose said, “excellent first person NC-17.” Just awesome MT. Thank you.
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
I’m thinking of contucting a petition drive for keeping Alice alive in this story ;p. It’s too haaaard!!! So, hereby I ask, beg, plead for this fanfic to be a little sci-fic… Anyone join me? ;) just kiddin’ (well, half true). Anyway, I loved it as always MT, so once more eskerrik asko!
The first part was very moving. I could totally picture the two of them being all caught up in their own little world on their wedding. And the second part…damn, that was the hottest strap-on scene ever! :D L3 is only 3,5 weeks away. I’m counting the days!
wow…that’s the only word i can form. i almost stopped reading after the 1st page to tell you how fn amazing and touching dana’s breakdown was written. but i forged on and the rest of this is just…wow.
Okay I didn’t think I was going to get through the first page. Dana’s breakdown almost did me in and was very affecting. I think eveyone who’s reading this will agree that your writing from Dana’s perspective is just spot on. Shane’s speech at the reception was just exactly what I would’ve imagined from Shane! Back at the apartment… Dana and Alice’s slow burn was very Danish. However the line, “But I love the way you beg me when I wear it, and the way you moan for me when I use it,” OMG. Anyway, it was a pretty hot little scene in a very good chapter. I reaaallly wish Alice’s condition would improve, or at the least case we get “many” more chapters of happy memories. Great writing!
Well, I think we can say that you mastered writing a sex scene in the first person pretty successfully! That was great, I loved the whole scene in the living room after they got home…so tender. It’s so sad to know that despite all the good times this ain’t going to end well! Draw out the memories for us please!!
im speechless……that was aaaamazing muted how is it that you get better and better every single time you just exceed my expectations again and again your a genius writer is it your profession, can i ask that? neways blew me away so sweet i hate thinking that she’s gunna pass away tho if only she didnt have to, miraculous recovery perhaps? yay! i’d believe it :)
awesome. really, really, really beautiful. :)
wow wow wow muted, it takes a lot for me to cry with the written word, but somehow your words touch my heart. you have an amazing way of describing the love of dana and alice, it is truly a gift and i feel greatful that i have the opportunity to read it. PPS and well done as always.
Loved Shane’s speech at the wedding. It just shows that your dialog talents are not limited to Danish. And, might I say, you did some excellent first person NC-17. The strap-on thing? HOT! I’m with wonderingaloud — please draw out the happy memories. And with sonny_gal wishing for a miraculous recovery — although I know there won’t be one. I do have to keep reminding myself that they have had 37-some-odd years together and that no one lives forever…and that they are fictional people. You and the other great Danish writers make them seem so real (plus the incredible acting in the first three seasons by Erin and Leisha). Thanks so much for the new chapter and the great story!
Nothing cheers me up more than reading some happy Danish! Yay!! Such wonderful memories written so beautifully that it feels as though we’re all reliving these happy moments with them. Dana’s breakdown was so real and understandable. Well Done hun :D
I have just finished reading 2 paragraghs and I am bawling. I need some time out before I continue. This is so unbelievable.