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Lest I Forget (5a)
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“Don’t you do that,” I whispered fiercely. “Don’t you feel bad for me, Alice.” She opened her eyes at this, and I could read the sadness in them. It broke my heart. “I don’t deserve it,” I muttered finally, completely exhausted. I rested my head back on her shoulder and just held her for quite awhile, trying to get myself under control. After listening to Alice’s measured breathing and feeling the rise and fall of her chest, I was lulled back into some form of sanity.
“Sorry,” I whispered when I finally lifted my head and looked back up at her. She just watched my face in concern, and the obvious caring in her eyes made me sigh. “Really, baby, I didn’t mean to break down like that. I’m all right, I promise,” I murmured into her ear as I hugged her. When I pulled back, there was frustration in her eyes, and I realized that it was killing her not to be able to answer me. I suppose I could have tried to assure her that it wasn’t necessary, but that would have been a little like telling her that it didn’t matter that I’d never won a huge tournament other than the Mercedes Challenge so many years go. She had made her living with words, and to not have them at her disposal anymore was making her insane. I could read that in her eyes as clearly as I could read her concern for me.
“It’ll be okay, Al,” I tried to comfort her, but I could tell as the words left my mouth that they’d be completely ineffectual. I was scared for a second that I’d offend her by saying it, but she just sighed and closed her eyes. I was holding her hand, and she somehow managed to increase the pressure on my fingers by the tiniest bit. When her eyes opened, they stared at me intensely for a second, then closed again. I was somehow sure that this was her way of telling me that she understood, and that it was all right. I still don’t know how I knew that, but for some reason, that’s what I knew.
We sat in silence for a few minutes until there was a soft, cautious knock on the door. I moved my chair back slightly from Alice’s bed and called out to whoever it was to enter. Gemma’s face appeared sheepishly from behind the door, and she spoke softly and apologetically. “I’m sorry for interrupting,” she said. “I got a call from your son a few minutes ago…I guess your cell phone lost battery power.” I shook my head when I realized she was probably right; I hadn’t been home since the day before. “He asked to be put through to the room, but I told him that Alice was asleep. He said he’ll be here in a couple of hours since things got a little crazy at work, and that he talked to Kallie and she should be here around the same time.” I nodded at the news. It was nothing big…while I knew the kids wanted to be there for Al, they did have their careers to think of, and I knew they’d be there as soon as they could. “Anyway, I was just wondering if you wanted something for dinner, Dana. I can grab a sandwich from the cart or get you something from the cafeteria if you want,” Gemma continued.
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hey! Sorry for not commenting on the 4th part of this story. I was wondering the whole time if you updated it, I just appearently didn’t see it. But hey, that gave me two parts at one time!Lovely wedding and wonderful wedding night. Just everything about it was beautifully written and described. Them first just sitting down on the couch after they got home was kinda typically danish and it fit somehow. I found it sweet. And don’t worry, you did a very good job with the first person writing. Loved it!
Beautifully Written….and HOT!I love thier relationship!
As I said before, better and better – oh, and hotter and hotter … Wow!! Wonderful, fantastic, bravo, more!!
I guess I was overwhelmed by the 2 paragraphs and the last line “I was truly saying goodbye to her just sent me over the top and I had to take a break. This post is another great piece of work. S’s toast was right on and touching. I am glad that that the rest of the chapter is more about happy Danish, I was a little apprehensive that I might keep crying for the rest of the chapter. Then you showed us the humor. “…couldn’t pee on our own, then other was to buy a gun and start firing,,. and racing each other to the bedroom, classic! I might have mentioned this before, and I will say it again, you have to be the “Yoda of Danish.” I have not read one piece of your work that would negate my opinion. You have A & D down pact, writing as if you were themselves. And please do not second guess yourself. I echo what MaGoose said, “excellent first person NC-17.” Just awesome MT. Thank you.
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
I’m thinking of contucting a petition drive for keeping Alice alive in this story ;p. It’s too haaaard!!! So, hereby I ask, beg, plead for this fanfic to be a little sci-fic… Anyone join me? ;) just kiddin’ (well, half true). Anyway, I loved it as always MT, so once more eskerrik asko!
The first part was very moving. I could totally picture the two of them being all caught up in their own little world on their wedding. And the second part…damn, that was the hottest strap-on scene ever! :D L3 is only 3,5 weeks away. I’m counting the days!
wow…that’s the only word i can form. i almost stopped reading after the 1st page to tell you how fn amazing and touching dana’s breakdown was written. but i forged on and the rest of this is just…wow.
Okay I didn’t think I was going to get through the first page. Dana’s breakdown almost did me in and was very affecting. I think eveyone who’s reading this will agree that your writing from Dana’s perspective is just spot on. Shane’s speech at the reception was just exactly what I would’ve imagined from Shane! Back at the apartment… Dana and Alice’s slow burn was very Danish. However the line, “But I love the way you beg me when I wear it, and the way you moan for me when I use it,” OMG. Anyway, it was a pretty hot little scene in a very good chapter. I reaaallly wish Alice’s condition would improve, or at the least case we get “many” more chapters of happy memories. Great writing!
Well, I think we can say that you mastered writing a sex scene in the first person pretty successfully! That was great, I loved the whole scene in the living room after they got home…so tender. It’s so sad to know that despite all the good times this ain’t going to end well! Draw out the memories for us please!!
im speechless……that was aaaamazing muted how is it that you get better and better every single time you just exceed my expectations again and again your a genius writer is it your profession, can i ask that? neways blew me away so sweet i hate thinking that she’s gunna pass away tho if only she didnt have to, miraculous recovery perhaps? yay! i’d believe it :)
awesome. really, really, really beautiful. :)
wow wow wow muted, it takes a lot for me to cry with the written word, but somehow your words touch my heart. you have an amazing way of describing the love of dana and alice, it is truly a gift and i feel greatful that i have the opportunity to read it. PPS and well done as always.
Loved Shane’s speech at the wedding. It just shows that your dialog talents are not limited to Danish. And, might I say, you did some excellent first person NC-17. The strap-on thing? HOT! I’m with wonderingaloud — please draw out the happy memories. And with sonny_gal wishing for a miraculous recovery — although I know there won’t be one. I do have to keep reminding myself that they have had 37-some-odd years together and that no one lives forever…and that they are fictional people. You and the other great Danish writers make them seem so real (plus the incredible acting in the first three seasons by Erin and Leisha). Thanks so much for the new chapter and the great story!
Nothing cheers me up more than reading some happy Danish! Yay!! Such wonderful memories written so beautifully that it feels as though we’re all reliving these happy moments with them. Dana’s breakdown was so real and understandable. Well Done hun :D
I have just finished reading 2 paragraghs and I am bawling. I need some time out before I continue. This is so unbelievable.