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Lest I Forget (5a)
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I don’t really know why it hit my so hard right then, but it was almost as if I’d been punched in the gut. I just couldn’t get my mind around the fact that I’d never hear Alice talking to me again, whether it was rambling on about the latest celebrity gossip or speculating on who was sleeping with whom. Yes, even after all these years, that was Alice’s main focus…or at least, it had been until this fucking stroke had happened.
I was wracked again by an incredible sense of guilt at how badly I’d handled the immediate aftermath of her stroke. Asking her to wake up, pleading with her to just sit up and talk to me…I’d wasted all those seconds, moments that could have spared part of her brain that had been lost due to my fear and my inaction. Suddenly, even after sharing the memory of our wedding with her, I felt an insurmountable agony course its way through my system. Before I could stop myself, I’d pulled my chair as close to her bed as I possibly could and laid my head on her shoulder, sobbing my heart out and apologizing to her over and over.
Before she left the room out of respect, I could see the tears on Gemma’s face. She softly assured me that I could take all the time I needed, and that if I or Alice needed anything she was only the push of a button away. I know I should have thanked her or at least acknowledged the fact that she existed, but at that moment I could think of nothing but my Al. I heard Gemma leave the room quietly, and as she shut the door behind her I finally let my sobs go, as loud as they wanted to.
Even as I cried, I hated what I was doing to Alice. I knew she was in there…hell, I’d known it from the second I looked into her eyes after she woke up. Still, knowing that she’d never come back to me whole was too much for me to bear. I felt her shift her shoulder ever so slightly under my head, and looked up at her. At first I thought I was hurting her, and that she was moving away, in as limited a motion as she was able to muster up, from the pressure on her arm and shoulder. But as I looked at her closed eyes, the tears leaking out through her eyelids, I realized she was trying to touch me in whatever way she could, to comfort me.
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hey! Sorry for not commenting on the 4th part of this story. I was wondering the whole time if you updated it, I just appearently didn’t see it. But hey, that gave me two parts at one time!Lovely wedding and wonderful wedding night. Just everything about it was beautifully written and described. Them first just sitting down on the couch after they got home was kinda typically danish and it fit somehow. I found it sweet. And don’t worry, you did a very good job with the first person writing. Loved it!
Beautifully Written….and HOT!I love thier relationship!
As I said before, better and better – oh, and hotter and hotter … Wow!! Wonderful, fantastic, bravo, more!!
I guess I was overwhelmed by the 2 paragraphs and the last line “I was truly saying goodbye to her just sent me over the top and I had to take a break. This post is another great piece of work. S’s toast was right on and touching. I am glad that that the rest of the chapter is more about happy Danish, I was a little apprehensive that I might keep crying for the rest of the chapter. Then you showed us the humor. “…couldn’t pee on our own, then other was to buy a gun and start firing,,. and racing each other to the bedroom, classic! I might have mentioned this before, and I will say it again, you have to be the “Yoda of Danish.” I have not read one piece of your work that would negate my opinion. You have A & D down pact, writing as if you were themselves. And please do not second guess yourself. I echo what MaGoose said, “excellent first person NC-17.” Just awesome MT. Thank you.
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
MT great story I love it you are an amazing writer keep it up
I’m thinking of contucting a petition drive for keeping Alice alive in this story ;p. It’s too haaaard!!! So, hereby I ask, beg, plead for this fanfic to be a little sci-fic… Anyone join me? ;) just kiddin’ (well, half true). Anyway, I loved it as always MT, so once more eskerrik asko!
The first part was very moving. I could totally picture the two of them being all caught up in their own little world on their wedding. And the second part…damn, that was the hottest strap-on scene ever! :D L3 is only 3,5 weeks away. I’m counting the days!
wow…that’s the only word i can form. i almost stopped reading after the 1st page to tell you how fn amazing and touching dana’s breakdown was written. but i forged on and the rest of this is just…wow.
Okay I didn’t think I was going to get through the first page. Dana’s breakdown almost did me in and was very affecting. I think eveyone who’s reading this will agree that your writing from Dana’s perspective is just spot on. Shane’s speech at the reception was just exactly what I would’ve imagined from Shane! Back at the apartment… Dana and Alice’s slow burn was very Danish. However the line, “But I love the way you beg me when I wear it, and the way you moan for me when I use it,” OMG. Anyway, it was a pretty hot little scene in a very good chapter. I reaaallly wish Alice’s condition would improve, or at the least case we get “many” more chapters of happy memories. Great writing!
Well, I think we can say that you mastered writing a sex scene in the first person pretty successfully! That was great, I loved the whole scene in the living room after they got home…so tender. It’s so sad to know that despite all the good times this ain’t going to end well! Draw out the memories for us please!!
im speechless……that was aaaamazing muted how is it that you get better and better every single time you just exceed my expectations again and again your a genius writer is it your profession, can i ask that? neways blew me away so sweet i hate thinking that she’s gunna pass away tho if only she didnt have to, miraculous recovery perhaps? yay! i’d believe it :)
awesome. really, really, really beautiful. :)
wow wow wow muted, it takes a lot for me to cry with the written word, but somehow your words touch my heart. you have an amazing way of describing the love of dana and alice, it is truly a gift and i feel greatful that i have the opportunity to read it. PPS and well done as always.
Loved Shane’s speech at the wedding. It just shows that your dialog talents are not limited to Danish. And, might I say, you did some excellent first person NC-17. The strap-on thing? HOT! I’m with wonderingaloud — please draw out the happy memories. And with sonny_gal wishing for a miraculous recovery — although I know there won’t be one. I do have to keep reminding myself that they have had 37-some-odd years together and that no one lives forever…and that they are fictional people. You and the other great Danish writers make them seem so real (plus the incredible acting in the first three seasons by Erin and Leisha). Thanks so much for the new chapter and the great story!
Nothing cheers me up more than reading some happy Danish! Yay!! Such wonderful memories written so beautifully that it feels as though we’re all reliving these happy moments with them. Dana’s breakdown was so real and understandable. Well Done hun :D
I have just finished reading 2 paragraghs and I am bawling. I need some time out before I continue. This is so unbelievable.