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Closure – Chapter 27
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Alice was walking through a park after her interview with the Senate candidate. She was very excited with the information she gathered and had several ideas on how to slant the article. She couldn’t wait to talk to Dana. She was within walking distance of The Planet and called Dana to meet her there. It was her first time back there in weeks — since she was there with Jackie. She felt really good today and she knew her friends would be there for her if she needed them. Alice was so wrapped up in her thoughts that it took her a moment to hear someone calling.
“Allie?”
Alice felt as if time had stopped and her feet were encased in cement. She slowly turned and saw Jackie coming towards her. She wanted to run, she wanted to move, but, she couldn’t.
“Alice? Please, just give me a minute. Please?” Jackie was showing all her charm that had initially drawn Alice to her. “I know it’s over for us. I’m not stupid. Well, I am stupid for driving you away. I see that now. The therapy really is helping.”
Alice was wavering and Jackie went in for the kill. “Please Alice? Just sit with me for a few minutes. We are in a public place and I promise not to even touch you. I just… I did see a future with you at one point and just would really like some closure on that.”
Alice thought that maybe closure would be good for both of them. If she could stand up to Jackie and make it through this conversation it would show that she has moved on.
“I only have a few minutes.”
Jackie gave the writer a bright, engaging smile that Alice had problems not returning. “That’s fine. Want to sit on the bench over there?” She indicated the bench and followed Alice over there.
“You look amazing, Alice. I like the short hair. Although I do prefer it darker.” Alice self-consciously touched a few wayward pieces of hair and tried to calm her sense of uneasiness.
“How did you know I would be here?” Alice asked as they sat.
“A friend of mine works for the woman you interviewed. She mentioned that you would be here today. She thought we were still together. And, Alice, I really wish we were.”
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Whoa mama! You really made Jackie the controlling bitch in this one. And the whole fight was just the spur of adrenaline Alice needed to get back her power. Thank you so much.
Haha, sweet. I love the part about Tina taking tremendous joy in slashing the bitch’s tires – squee! And after all this, I was really glad Alice was ready to fight instead of bending to Jackie’s will, even after the fight was over. I think I need some friends like she’s got.
First of all, you’re a great writer… you made me hate Jackie even more hahaha. And I don’t easily hate people. Alice made some great progress in standing up to her. I’m glad the whole gang got a piece of her…. even if it was a piece of tire ;) Great work again MaGoose!!
Hello MaGoose, that was freaking awesome… I have been waiting for this show down for a little while and you certainly did not disappoint, that was so awesome. You handled the emotions and the physical actions superbly. You have got to get some more action in this story, Alice should go wailing on that B***C… Awesome… Awesome… Awesome. Sincerely, JC
“she gave her a several more for being such a cunt” Okay. I couldn’t get over that. That sounds like something I would say and do. I LOVE YOU MAGOOSE> I so love you. Dana with a flying Tackle. Kick ass. litterally. Poor all. Still with the short end of the stick. But hey what are you going to do. It looks like no more weapons are needed. I like the rock idea though. That was funny. GO TEAM DANA. Bette sweept kick. I could see that.
this was great! lol, i love how all of a sudden bette’s doing legsweeps in the middle of the park. that was really good though, and unlike myself, i hope you post soon!!
poor Jackie…. not! I’m not usually in to violence… heehee but that bitch got what she deserves. She should rot in hell :)
YIPPEE KI YAY, effin awesome!!……there’s a great Portugese white called Gazela and unlike a lot of their wines this one is not sugary,it’s very crisp perfect with murder weapons uuh I mean salmon..and she must have been implaled by the asparagus spears when she fell after being shocked…hhmm asparagus goes well with salmom, what are you feeling like for your side dish? (hehe 4 down 1 to go)
that was a KICK ASS chapter! (excuse the pun :)heehee) love this story, thanks for posting.
what a fuckin incredible chapter!! been waiting for jackie’s time since the first chapter!! okay i get impatience,lol… it was like the super heros saving the day!i can really see this happening, tina beaming with pride and joy over slashing tires,lol. shane getting last cuz she smokes, love dana’s leaping in from behind. and of course you can’t forget swift martial arts kick, doing the happy dance and cheering!!!!!LOL okay you get the idea lol.
OMFG!!! I’m so happy i let out a little scream at WORK!!! I loved the description of each of them, Shane being winded, Tina being a pillow queen who had to take knife opening lessons, and Bette…well she’s Bette, she probably read about karate on the internet just for that purpose. I still really think Dana should get into a full contact sport, i mean she just like, AHHH!’I’ll Rip YOUR FACE oFF!!! LoL!!!!I’m so happy i can’t even think of what to comment on. LOVED IT!! Fantastic job, and i have yet to even think of your posts as just ‘ok’ They are excellent, keep it up!
Your so right this is a good weekend for us Danish readers!!! Boy was i pleased to see an update from you as well i absolutley love ur story as u know lol. This chapter was no exception and i loved this as well. Finally The Gang get to take out some of that anger out on that fool we know as Jackie. Brilliant chapter MaGoose and cant wait for your next one lol i never can. :) PPS :) x x x
The day has arrival. These are some tough ladies. Our Heros Should say Alices heros. They could have done a lot of damage to Jackie being ladies they stopped short of killing. That Tina didnt get a blow in but 4 Flat tires. I understand that thats hard to do. HURRAY for the gang. thanks. Jackieneeds a lot of help.Maybe injail she will meet a bigger meaner Mama than she is
WOOOOOHOOOOOO FINALLY!!!! Thanks,been waiting for this and it was well worth the wait!!! Ur a excellent writer!!! PPS
yes that was great and the fact that Tina slashed Jackie’s tires was funny as hell great update please post soon