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Closure – Chapter 27
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“I’ll take you to the best doctors. You’ll be good as new.”
“Sure. Until the next time.”
“It won’t happen again. I swear it to you. Just give me a chance.”
Alice looked hard at Jackie. “Are you really in therapy?” She asked.
“If you came back to me, I would do it in a minute. I’ll do anything to get you back.”
Jackie saw her mistake immediately. Alice gave a little snort and shook her head. “See, Jackie, Dana doesn’t lie to me. She has made mistakes in the past, but, unlike you, she is doing everything she can to make it up to me. And she is doing it on her own — without any conditions.”
Dana saw from the far side of the park that Alice was with Jackie. She hit the speed dial on her phone and ran faster than she ever had in her life to get to her love.
“So. She is a saint, eh?”
Alice looked at her thoughtfully. “No. She is human and caring and wonderful and has amazing strength that she would never, ever think of using on me.”
That was it for Jackie. “I’m not giving you up. Not so you can be with that fucking tennis player.” She snarled. “You are going to come with me and we *will* work this out.”
Alice saw the look in Jackie’s eyes and stood up as quickly as she could. She reached in her bag to look for the pepper spray — cursing herself inwardly for not having had it in her hand the whole time. Jackie also shot to her feet.
Jackie grabbed Alice’s arm violently to keep her from moving away. Alice ground her two-inch heel into Jackie’s foot and got a satisfying grunt of pain from her.
Dana lungs were burning. She was closing the distance but it wasn’t fast enough.
Jackie was still bigger and stronger than Alice. She was also more furious than she had ever been in her life. She backhanded Alice in the face. It was a glancing blow, but, enough to cause the writer to fall backwards with blood coming out of her nose. Jackie took a step closer to do further damage and was knocked off her feet.
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Whoa mama! You really made Jackie the controlling bitch in this one. And the whole fight was just the spur of adrenaline Alice needed to get back her power. Thank you so much.
Haha, sweet. I love the part about Tina taking tremendous joy in slashing the bitch’s tires – squee! And after all this, I was really glad Alice was ready to fight instead of bending to Jackie’s will, even after the fight was over. I think I need some friends like she’s got.
First of all, you’re a great writer… you made me hate Jackie even more hahaha. And I don’t easily hate people. Alice made some great progress in standing up to her. I’m glad the whole gang got a piece of her…. even if it was a piece of tire ;) Great work again MaGoose!!
Hello MaGoose, that was freaking awesome… I have been waiting for this show down for a little while and you certainly did not disappoint, that was so awesome. You handled the emotions and the physical actions superbly. You have got to get some more action in this story, Alice should go wailing on that B***C… Awesome… Awesome… Awesome. Sincerely, JC
“she gave her a several more for being such a cunt” Okay. I couldn’t get over that. That sounds like something I would say and do. I LOVE YOU MAGOOSE> I so love you. Dana with a flying Tackle. Kick ass. litterally. Poor all. Still with the short end of the stick. But hey what are you going to do. It looks like no more weapons are needed. I like the rock idea though. That was funny. GO TEAM DANA. Bette sweept kick. I could see that.
this was great! lol, i love how all of a sudden bette’s doing legsweeps in the middle of the park. that was really good though, and unlike myself, i hope you post soon!!
poor Jackie…. not! I’m not usually in to violence… heehee but that bitch got what she deserves. She should rot in hell :)
YIPPEE KI YAY, effin awesome!!……there’s a great Portugese white called Gazela and unlike a lot of their wines this one is not sugary,it’s very crisp perfect with murder weapons uuh I mean salmon..and she must have been implaled by the asparagus spears when she fell after being shocked…hhmm asparagus goes well with salmom, what are you feeling like for your side dish? (hehe 4 down 1 to go)
that was a KICK ASS chapter! (excuse the pun :)heehee) love this story, thanks for posting.
what a fuckin incredible chapter!! been waiting for jackie’s time since the first chapter!! okay i get impatience,lol… it was like the super heros saving the day!i can really see this happening, tina beaming with pride and joy over slashing tires,lol. shane getting last cuz she smokes, love dana’s leaping in from behind. and of course you can’t forget swift martial arts kick, doing the happy dance and cheering!!!!!LOL okay you get the idea lol.
OMFG!!! I’m so happy i let out a little scream at WORK!!! I loved the description of each of them, Shane being winded, Tina being a pillow queen who had to take knife opening lessons, and Bette…well she’s Bette, she probably read about karate on the internet just for that purpose. I still really think Dana should get into a full contact sport, i mean she just like, AHHH!’I’ll Rip YOUR FACE oFF!!! LoL!!!!I’m so happy i can’t even think of what to comment on. LOVED IT!! Fantastic job, and i have yet to even think of your posts as just ‘ok’ They are excellent, keep it up!
Your so right this is a good weekend for us Danish readers!!! Boy was i pleased to see an update from you as well i absolutley love ur story as u know lol. This chapter was no exception and i loved this as well. Finally The Gang get to take out some of that anger out on that fool we know as Jackie. Brilliant chapter MaGoose and cant wait for your next one lol i never can. :) PPS :) x x x
The day has arrival. These are some tough ladies. Our Heros Should say Alices heros. They could have done a lot of damage to Jackie being ladies they stopped short of killing. That Tina didnt get a blow in but 4 Flat tires. I understand that thats hard to do. HURRAY for the gang. thanks. Jackieneeds a lot of help.Maybe injail she will meet a bigger meaner Mama than she is
WOOOOOHOOOOOO FINALLY!!!! Thanks,been waiting for this and it was well worth the wait!!! Ur a excellent writer!!! PPS
yes that was great and the fact that Tina slashed Jackie’s tires was funny as hell great update please post soon