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Closure – Chapter 27
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Dana came in with a flying tackle that knocked the two women down in a tangle of arms and legs.
Jackie didn’t know what hit her. The athlete was able to use the element of surprise and quickly got the upper hand. She flipped them over and hit Jackie a couple times hard in the face. Jackie had her arms free and was trying to retaliate. Dana landed several more punches to Jackie’s ribs.
Jackie was frantically trying to find something to use in this fight. She was still pissed that Dana got the better of her in their last encounter. Her hands scrabbled around and she found a medium-sized rock. She took aim at Dana’s head but missed, hitting the athlete on the arm instead.
The blow was enough to knock Dana off balance and let Jackie get back to her feet. Dana hit the ground hard and landed face down. “You’re dead, bitch!” Jackie growled and got ready to stomp down on Dana’s back.
The blow never landed. Bette had come running up and gave a well-timed leg sweep that knocked Jackie back to the ground.
The call Dana made put a plan into action that the gang hoped would never be needed. It called Bette, Tina and Shane’s cell phones with a special ‘emergency’ code. Thankfully the gang knew where Dana went and was able to follow quickly. Otherwise they would have called Dana for clarification.
Bette and Shane were to assist Dana in making sure Alice was safe. Tina was in charge of calling the police and disabling Jackie’s car — just in case she tried to leave with Alice. Tina took a tremendous amount of joy in slashing all four of Jackie’s tires with a knife she got just for that purpose.
Jackie was on the ground and Dana was still disoriented. Jackie started to crawl towards Alice — correctly figuring that if she had Alice, her friends would back off.
Bette grabbed Jackie by the ankle and stopped her short. She twisted Jackie’s foot and was pleased to feel ligaments grinding. Shane finally arrived (in the back of her mind thinking she really did need to quit smoking) and gave Jackie a swift kick in the side that stopped her forward motion. And then she gave her a several more for being such a cunt and hurting her friends.
Sirens could be heard in the distance. Dana saw that the fight had been taken out of Jackie and quickly went over to Alice. She was covering her nose, which was still bleeding, and trying to get to a seated position.
“Al. Just relax, OK? No quick moves. I’m not sure how badly you are hurt.”
“That bitch hit me, Dana. I’m going to go kick her ass!” Alice had the pepper spray in her hand and Dana was a little worried about her accidentally triggering it.
Dana held out a restraining arm to Alice and couldn’t help but grin. Her relief was immense. “Hold it there, slugger, she isn’t going anywhere.”
The police had arrived at this point and were getting statements from Bette and Shane. Tina had also gotten there and had retrieved the copy of the Order for Protection against Jackie from Alice’s purse.
Dana helped Alice to her feet and held her close. They watched as the police handcuffed Jackie and put her in the back of a police car.
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Whoa mama! You really made Jackie the controlling bitch in this one. And the whole fight was just the spur of adrenaline Alice needed to get back her power. Thank you so much.
Haha, sweet. I love the part about Tina taking tremendous joy in slashing the bitch’s tires – squee! And after all this, I was really glad Alice was ready to fight instead of bending to Jackie’s will, even after the fight was over. I think I need some friends like she’s got.
First of all, you’re a great writer… you made me hate Jackie even more hahaha. And I don’t easily hate people. Alice made some great progress in standing up to her. I’m glad the whole gang got a piece of her…. even if it was a piece of tire ;) Great work again MaGoose!!
Hello MaGoose, that was freaking awesome… I have been waiting for this show down for a little while and you certainly did not disappoint, that was so awesome. You handled the emotions and the physical actions superbly. You have got to get some more action in this story, Alice should go wailing on that B***C… Awesome… Awesome… Awesome. Sincerely, JC
“she gave her a several more for being such a cunt” Okay. I couldn’t get over that. That sounds like something I would say and do. I LOVE YOU MAGOOSE> I so love you. Dana with a flying Tackle. Kick ass. litterally. Poor all. Still with the short end of the stick. But hey what are you going to do. It looks like no more weapons are needed. I like the rock idea though. That was funny. GO TEAM DANA. Bette sweept kick. I could see that.
this was great! lol, i love how all of a sudden bette’s doing legsweeps in the middle of the park. that was really good though, and unlike myself, i hope you post soon!!
poor Jackie…. not! I’m not usually in to violence… heehee but that bitch got what she deserves. She should rot in hell :)
YIPPEE KI YAY, effin awesome!!……there’s a great Portugese white called Gazela and unlike a lot of their wines this one is not sugary,it’s very crisp perfect with murder weapons uuh I mean salmon..and she must have been implaled by the asparagus spears when she fell after being shocked…hhmm asparagus goes well with salmom, what are you feeling like for your side dish? (hehe 4 down 1 to go)
that was a KICK ASS chapter! (excuse the pun :)heehee) love this story, thanks for posting.
what a fuckin incredible chapter!! been waiting for jackie’s time since the first chapter!! okay i get impatience,lol… it was like the super heros saving the day!i can really see this happening, tina beaming with pride and joy over slashing tires,lol. shane getting last cuz she smokes, love dana’s leaping in from behind. and of course you can’t forget swift martial arts kick, doing the happy dance and cheering!!!!!LOL okay you get the idea lol.
OMFG!!! I’m so happy i let out a little scream at WORK!!! I loved the description of each of them, Shane being winded, Tina being a pillow queen who had to take knife opening lessons, and Bette…well she’s Bette, she probably read about karate on the internet just for that purpose. I still really think Dana should get into a full contact sport, i mean she just like, AHHH!’I’ll Rip YOUR FACE oFF!!! LoL!!!!I’m so happy i can’t even think of what to comment on. LOVED IT!! Fantastic job, and i have yet to even think of your posts as just ‘ok’ They are excellent, keep it up!
Your so right this is a good weekend for us Danish readers!!! Boy was i pleased to see an update from you as well i absolutley love ur story as u know lol. This chapter was no exception and i loved this as well. Finally The Gang get to take out some of that anger out on that fool we know as Jackie. Brilliant chapter MaGoose and cant wait for your next one lol i never can. :) PPS :) x x x
The day has arrival. These are some tough ladies. Our Heros Should say Alices heros. They could have done a lot of damage to Jackie being ladies they stopped short of killing. That Tina didnt get a blow in but 4 Flat tires. I understand that thats hard to do. HURRAY for the gang. thanks. Jackieneeds a lot of help.Maybe injail she will meet a bigger meaner Mama than she is
WOOOOOHOOOOOO FINALLY!!!! Thanks,been waiting for this and it was well worth the wait!!! Ur a excellent writer!!! PPS
yes that was great and the fact that Tina slashed Jackie’s tires was funny as hell great update please post soon