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Closure – Chapter 27
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That last statement got Alice’s guard fully up. “We aren’t and we won’t be.” She said firmly.
“How can you say that?” Jackie asked disbelievingly. “We were good together. I gave you anything you wanted. I helped you get out of that depression you were in after you broke up with the tennis player.”
“Her name is Dana.” Alice said forcefully. “And any “good” you did for me was completely negated by the times you beat me.”
Jackie quickly changed tactics. “That Dana is a piece of work, isn’t she? She practically destroys you and then swoops in like some avenging angel. You know she won’t stay. Once you don’t need her and she is no longer the hero she will find someone else. You’ll fall apart and lose your other friends again. I wouldn’t do that. I won’t leave you.”
“You’re so wrong.” Alice responded.
Meanwhile, the object of their discussion was sitting with Bette, Tina and Shane at The Planet. Dana was trying not to show her nervousness. She knew she had to let Alice do things on her own, but, she always had the fear in her. And Alice should have been there by now.
Dana decided to call. The girls all felt the stress from the athlete and it was starting to concern them all.
Alice didn’t notice her phone ringing. She had shut the ringer off during the interview and missed the vibration coming from it as she was absorbed in the conversation with Jackie.
“I’m wrong? Look deep in your heart, Alice. Do you really trust ‘Dana’?” Jackie asked slyly. She was stunned to have Alice look back at her and firmly say “I trust her with my life.”
Dana needed to find Alice now. Something was wrong. She left her friends with instructions to wait for Alice and headed towards the building where Alice had her interview.
Jackie needed to get back the control. Alice didn’t seem to realize that she was in charge: not Alice and certainly not the tennis player. “She really has you snowed. The chef will come back from Europe and she’ll drop you. I would always be there for you. You know that.”
“Do you realize that I may have a permanent scar on my back?” Jackie had enough humanity left in her to actually blush a little at that comment.
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Whoa mama! You really made Jackie the controlling bitch in this one. And the whole fight was just the spur of adrenaline Alice needed to get back her power. Thank you so much.
Haha, sweet. I love the part about Tina taking tremendous joy in slashing the bitch’s tires – squee! And after all this, I was really glad Alice was ready to fight instead of bending to Jackie’s will, even after the fight was over. I think I need some friends like she’s got.
First of all, you’re a great writer… you made me hate Jackie even more hahaha. And I don’t easily hate people. Alice made some great progress in standing up to her. I’m glad the whole gang got a piece of her…. even if it was a piece of tire ;) Great work again MaGoose!!
Hello MaGoose, that was freaking awesome… I have been waiting for this show down for a little while and you certainly did not disappoint, that was so awesome. You handled the emotions and the physical actions superbly. You have got to get some more action in this story, Alice should go wailing on that B***C… Awesome… Awesome… Awesome. Sincerely, JC
“she gave her a several more for being such a cunt” Okay. I couldn’t get over that. That sounds like something I would say and do. I LOVE YOU MAGOOSE> I so love you. Dana with a flying Tackle. Kick ass. litterally. Poor all. Still with the short end of the stick. But hey what are you going to do. It looks like no more weapons are needed. I like the rock idea though. That was funny. GO TEAM DANA. Bette sweept kick. I could see that.
this was great! lol, i love how all of a sudden bette’s doing legsweeps in the middle of the park. that was really good though, and unlike myself, i hope you post soon!!
poor Jackie…. not! I’m not usually in to violence… heehee but that bitch got what she deserves. She should rot in hell :)
YIPPEE KI YAY, effin awesome!!……there’s a great Portugese white called Gazela and unlike a lot of their wines this one is not sugary,it’s very crisp perfect with murder weapons uuh I mean salmon..and she must have been implaled by the asparagus spears when she fell after being shocked…hhmm asparagus goes well with salmom, what are you feeling like for your side dish? (hehe 4 down 1 to go)
that was a KICK ASS chapter! (excuse the pun :)heehee) love this story, thanks for posting.
what a fuckin incredible chapter!! been waiting for jackie’s time since the first chapter!! okay i get impatience,lol… it was like the super heros saving the day!i can really see this happening, tina beaming with pride and joy over slashing tires,lol. shane getting last cuz she smokes, love dana’s leaping in from behind. and of course you can’t forget swift martial arts kick, doing the happy dance and cheering!!!!!LOL okay you get the idea lol.
OMFG!!! I’m so happy i let out a little scream at WORK!!! I loved the description of each of them, Shane being winded, Tina being a pillow queen who had to take knife opening lessons, and Bette…well she’s Bette, she probably read about karate on the internet just for that purpose. I still really think Dana should get into a full contact sport, i mean she just like, AHHH!’I’ll Rip YOUR FACE oFF!!! LoL!!!!I’m so happy i can’t even think of what to comment on. LOVED IT!! Fantastic job, and i have yet to even think of your posts as just ‘ok’ They are excellent, keep it up!
Your so right this is a good weekend for us Danish readers!!! Boy was i pleased to see an update from you as well i absolutley love ur story as u know lol. This chapter was no exception and i loved this as well. Finally The Gang get to take out some of that anger out on that fool we know as Jackie. Brilliant chapter MaGoose and cant wait for your next one lol i never can. :) PPS :) x x x
The day has arrival. These are some tough ladies. Our Heros Should say Alices heros. They could have done a lot of damage to Jackie being ladies they stopped short of killing. That Tina didnt get a blow in but 4 Flat tires. I understand that thats hard to do. HURRAY for the gang. thanks. Jackieneeds a lot of help.Maybe injail she will meet a bigger meaner Mama than she is
WOOOOOHOOOOOO FINALLY!!!! Thanks,been waiting for this and it was well worth the wait!!! Ur a excellent writer!!! PPS
yes that was great and the fact that Tina slashed Jackie’s tires was funny as hell great update please post soon