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Apogée 14
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The writer looked to Dana who stared confused as the agent tried hard to convince the room, that there was no motive for Carmen to shoot Jenny, no criminal records nothing that would suggest Carmen’s aversion to the law. Alice smiled at this, the agent had unknowingly helped her but putting this thought in everyone’s mind.
The second agent’s presentation was extremely similar to the first, the only difference in his theory was, this particular agent believed Shane’s partner kidnapped Carmen by pulling her out of the vehicle and was now holding her for a potential ransom.
By the time the second agent had finished his presentation Dana’s face was a mixture of emotions. The first was confusion, was this really the cream of the crop? The best of the best? They sounded like idiots, the agent thought. The next emotion was a fear that Alice’s presentation would be worse than the one she’d just heard, she couldn’t imagine how that was possible. The writer was one of the most brilliant minds she’d encountered and Dana couldn’t imagine anything worse than what she’d just heard but it was still a fear. The last was worry, if Alice didn’t pull something amazing out what would happen? Would Dunne question her? Try to pull her off the case? Dana sat there and worried even as Alice stood up front and grabbed the dry erase pen ready to begin.
“Alright, you’ve all gotten wind of my theory that Carmen shot Agent Shecter, now let me try to convince you.” Alice said as she pulled the cap off of the marker and stood up next to the board writing “Shane” in big letters in the center. The writer turned to the room smiling,
“Can someone give me the name of one of the clients this woman has worked for?” A short list of people were named most of which Alice already knew, she wrote the names all around Shane’s name then pulled out a stack of papers passing them around.
“What you’re looking at is a state file with two familiar names on it…Peabody and Morales.” Alice drew a line from the name Shane to the name Peabody then wrote Carmen’s name up and drew a line to it. Alice turned around and leaned on the white board, taking a look at the shocked expressions and looking over to Dana. A similar look on the agent’s face, the writer continued.
“You will also discover that the hotel that Marcus was shot in was owned by no other than Helena Peabody…It turns out that Marcus was good friends with her, they didn’t even have to pay for their room.” Alice said drawing Marcus and Tina’s name on the board connecting them to Helena.
“Carmen is connect to this whole mess and you can see how, she lost this case to Helena and it’s no coincidence that she applied for a job in her hotel….Helena was known for visiting this hotel frequently so it would put Carmen in perfect position to…” Dunne interrupted Alice standing up slowly.
“To do what Agent Bell? Kill her?…From what I see here you’ve simply played connect the dots with no real evidence…I really don’t have time for this, Agent Fairbanks, when your team gets it together and gets something we can actually go to press with you give me a call.” Dana’s jaw tightened as Dunne left the room, she was sure by the way Alice looked at the inspector that the writer was almost expecting an outburst from him. Dana stood quickly and dismissed the meeting, touching Alice on the arm and whispering,
“We need to talk…right now.”
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well i love it as ussual. yes im new to the L word part of this website. i was focussing on the South of Nowhere part, but decided to check things out over here, and instantly fell for your stories! please continue!
Did you tell me whether or not Carmen has a hidden agenda? Did you really??Thinking back…I do have some ideas on what’s going on with the s/l of Sharmen,but I can’t remember that particular part. See, like I said before, I tend to forget those small details which end up to be important for the story. :SShane is going to learn Carmen how to fight?! That’s somehting I would like to see. :) Helena’s hands aren’t all clean, are they? What happened between Kit and Bette? I hope Alice can prove Inspector Dunne wrong. That will show him. He needs to back off for a hile…he can be a threat for her relationship with Dana. And yes, you really need to draw a chart for us, I’m all confused now! ;)
Wow!!! This is just the greatest fic I`ve ever read, really awesome! I love it!! This is so completely different from all the other fics and your fantasy is just amazing! Please continue, I`m kinda addicted to it! ;) By the way, I`m from a small town in Bavaria, Germany ;)
Alice has a whole lot of self-control – that Dunne dude is a real chump. I love how goo goo Bette is for Tina – it’s very sweet. Things are going to go Kaboom when Tina finds out about Bette’s involvement in the murder. Oh and born and still living in Miami.
Damn right I am angry. IC really screwed up a very good show to give us her very pathetic life story. Whoa, Alice is good. Maybe it was Helena and not Bette that ordered Marcus’s death. It looks like Carmen was out to get Helena but got mixed up with Shane instead. I am sure hoping that Bette gets to be involved with Tina and not have it blow up in her face. Florida
I’ve got a question….what does the story’s title mean? unless you answered that already…
I like this story, and from France
This story gets better and better with every post, Baby-girl!!! I love it!! Oh! I’m from Arkansas, down in O-town (Osceola), lame, yeah, I know, but hey it’s home for now. LMFAO!! Anyways, post soon, and I gotta’ have my Sharmen fix 8-) LYLAS ;-p
so what you’re saying is that carmen might also be an assassin? that would be suuhweeeet. and i can’t believe dunne just walked out. what a toolbox.p.s. upstate ny.
Phenomenal update! I loved it. It was Alice and Dana palooza. I love Danish. I was a little skeptical when I saw Alice does number two in the summary. I ended up laughing really hard when Alice actually said that she was doing number two. Everyone always tries to downplay Alice’s chart, but it’s a vital part of who she is. She knows that there is always some kind of connection, and I think that she is intelligent and unique in the way she presents this. Now, Helena is involved. I love how you tie everything together. Everything’s connected.A strong, intelligent, comforting and more confident FBI-Dana totally rocks!Haha! Bette and the infamous drive-by.Keep up the great writting. I can’t wait for more.
I forgot to tell you…and I was telling myself the whole time not to forget to say where I’m from…I tend to be a bit absent minded at times..I’m from Western New York.
Well darling, it appears that you have no trouble writing… how do you do it? I need some lessons.. please teach me, lol. Love Mark and Gomey as usual.. I could almost hear Gomey go splat on the sidewalk,lol. I’m curious as to what Helena has to do with all this.. what is she hiding? Inspector Dunne… what a bastard he is. Alice should’ve given him a piece of her mind. I hope she gets the chance to prove her theory and rub it in his face. I love your one liners.. I don’t know which one was funnier the one where Alice says she’s doing number two or where Dana calls her on it by saying why are your pants up.. LMAO. Alice seems to kick all those other agents asses when it comes to smarts. I do love the way you write this and I hate that you left me hanging. Just like mine.. I see more mystery then clues, lol. I hope you have more soon… till then I’ll be wrapped in this blanket, sweltering in this heat. I’ll be looking for you… where are you ClosetDana? lol
Excellent! My brain is tired to even figure anything out so I’m just going to kick up my feet and relax! NY is in the hause!
I have to say this story rocks. I have not commented in awhile (actually I typically don’t comment…the whole shy thing) because I was actually on vacation in Indiana and I love it there. I have family there. Great state and I am putting some serious thought into moving there. I’m currently in NY. Anyway I love this bette and tina. Any strong bette is a major turn on. Thanks for writing.
Wow Drama and action keep coming!!!!!!!!!!!
This is the best story ever! And I mean it! This is great, the whole mystery and the whole chart-linking! It is such a joy to read every chap and there would be something new and unexpected to turn up at every turn! I love this story and I am going to definitely print it out once it is finish to read thru it completely again! Loving the mystery, loving every point in this FIC!
What can I say? I loved it, just like all your other updates! :-) I wanted to check the site one last time before I went to bed, and I’m really glad that I did! I do have to say how dare you leave us hanging like that though! Ok, I’ve said it! And to answer your question of where everyone is from, I’m from Dallas. Not to exciting. Thanks for the awesome update!
I loved your this chapter as well as the one before it… Well done ClosetDana.
fantastic! is it me or was there a whole lot of danish! yay
lol the mark and gomey stuff was priceless i SO pictured bette taking out her gun.. and doing an actual drive by! Ty for an evil person! that Dunne :growls: for some reason im thinking he had something to do with Lara dying.. dun dun dun!!
waiting as always for the next chap! lol :) oh and i’m from New York but living in Puerto Rico at the moment. ps: had to spread my comment since it didn’t fit all in one :)
of the many! one of the greatest things in ur fic is the suspense! poor alice with her lil connect the dots i..SHE HAD SOMETHING there what was it?.. lol i hope Dana isnt too hard on her, she’s usally really good at connecting things if only they let her finish.
No, a boomwhacker is one pipe-like thing that plays one note when you hit it against something. Like, you hit one on the floor and hear a C. The next one up plays a C#, etc. I suck at explaining things. =/ And no, the writing isn’t what makes me not like Sharmen. I’m just not a big fan of either character. Dunne is still a dick. >:O Can’t really comment on B&T as we only got a taste of them as opposed to a whole dish. Oh, and I’m from West Virginia. Uh, yay?
Didn’t get a chance to comment last time, but I’m a definite TiBetter through and through. The other couples are okayand well written, but the B/T action is what I look forward to. More next time? And from NY, thanks for writing!
Good as always! post soon!
Yeah!!! I am so pumped you updated! You already know I love your stuff. and I love Danish so this chapter rocked :) Keep it up. I’m from Illinois…mostly corn fields.haha
as always another great chapter, bloody marvelous, i could have punched that lil fucker dunnes lights outs as well lol. oh im from hampshire in the UK.
WOW!! I’m in love with this story!! Everything’s starting to come to play!! What’s going to happen between Dana and Alice? Is Shane going to help Carmen shot a ‘rifle’? Tina and Bette are amazing in this story, and is Kit going to be there for her baby sister? So much question, so many that will be answered!! Thanks again, keep up with the good writing!!!
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful, but please more B&T–TiBette forever! Thanks for posting, you are amazing. I live in Arizona by way of Califonia, Oregon, and Utah.
WOW! My theory is complete shit. Your chap.threw me in a different direction w/ this story. Why the hell didn’t Dana let Alice finish after Dunne walks out? Can’t wait to see if everyone’s a gun for hire. Great update. I’m from N.Y.C
Hé I just got back from my holiday and trying to catch up asap on my reading. So just a quick comment and still loving this story. PS I’m from Holland.