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Bitter Endings, Sweet Beginnings: Part Six
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“It’s okay,” Shane murmured, her voice low and honeyed, instantly
calming Carmen when she felt the warmth of Shane’s breath against her
skin. Holding Gabby’s gaze in an unwavering and powerful stare, she
said, “Ignore her. She’s just Gabby ***** Deveaux and she’ll never be
worth the effort. Trust me when I say that.”
Turning to put their faces centimeters apart, Carmen’s eyes were dark
and glowed with affection. Cupping Shane’s cheek, she smiled and said,
“You know I always trust you.”
“Why do you think I said it?” rumbled Shane, forming a playful grin.
“You really have been ***** neutered, haven’t you McCutcheon?” said
Gabby, looking and sounding totally disgusted with their interaction.
“Girls get spayed, boys get neutered,” said Shane, matter of factly,
staring Gabby down and wearing a blithe look on her features. A smile
quirked on her lips when Carmen snickered at her words and pressed
further into her embrace. “And you do know I’m a girl, don’t you? The
clothing and short hair hasn’t fooled you, has it?”
“Is someone here about the room for rent ad?” Moments after they heard
Jenny’s voice, she appeared to stand beside Shane and Carmen. She wore
a puzzled expression that was both curious and pleased when she saw
Gabby. Smiling sweetly, Jenny said, “Hey. What’s up?”
“I got into the after hours Augusten Burroughs reading for Magical
Thinking: True Stories at Book Soup,” said Gabby, averting her eyes
from Jenny’s openly friendly and kind expression that made her nervous
for some unfathomable reason. She turned her attention to a bowl
sitting on the kitchen table that had a lone miniature blue marshmallow
inside it. Staring at the bowl, she wondered why there was only one
left when the bags came with hundreds of marshmallows. Gabby found it
incredibly strange that they would eat one hundred and ninety nine
marshmallows out a bag of two hundred and choose to save one special
marshmallow from being sacrificed to their appetite. Moving her gaze
back to Jenny, she somehow managed to look arrogant and hesitant at the
same time. “My friends can barely read traffic signs and there’s no way
they’d like the question and answers portion. Do you want to come with?”
“You’ve got friends?” Shane remarked skeptically, unable to help
herself from poking back at Gabby because of the treatment she had
received earlier.
“How did you manage that? They’ve been telling everyone that it’s a
invite only event meant to thank their longtime customers,” Carmen
said, speaking in unison with her girlfriend.
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Great job on the portrayal of Veronica..I could soo see and hear her…it was kinda eerie..lol, but none the less great. You and sulkygeek have some kind of helacious conspiracy…you write them soo well and it just makes me like them a little more every time. Like how you put Dana into play, checking up on Alice and it’s obvious she still loves her. Ohh…i’m soo torn…the danish or helacious in this story is soo hard to choose
This was my favourite chapter of this story so far – perhaps because we got close to Helacious. But it might also have been that I can’t think of much better than going to an Augusten Burroughs reading at Book Soup with Gabby!
Wow i love this chapter, and the story overall so far, hope you post soon!!!
Dreiser – choppin broccoli!! I’m telling you I sat in history class my junior yr of high school the monday morning after that episode of sat night live singing it with my friends!!! God im old.
Veronica was so dead on, i could actually actually cameron manheims voice.
alice and helena? unbelievable cuteness. “Thank you for being what everyone else is not.” I actaully swooned!!!
great update – loved it. it was so good, i couldnt come up with a philosophical reference good enough!
OMG..’Im Luvin it’ I JUS..I LUV YOU 4 WRITING THIS STRY..the way u write – 2 cute..I like that you wrote Dana out 2 b a stocker as Alice had once been an obsessive stocker of Dana&Lara fiasco..GREAT chapter..Alice&Helena’z relationship seemz 2 be progressing niceli – closer&closer 2gether..’Young Luv’..I always look forward 2 reading your wrk..thnx 4 writing, dun stop..PLEASE mst Post so0N..
*melts* Full credit to your writing abilities!!!! I love the cuteness and dorkiness of Alice and Helena. It’s beautiful
Dana is by no means a stalker in this story. She’s simply still in love with Alice and wants to make sure she’s happy.
I have to say that the danish fan in me it’s hurt when I read the Dana’s part but you made unbelievable loving the helacious part too, so I can’t stop reading your work. Thanks. oh and I love Veronica too :P
I like Helene in this, Alice bring out the true person. she and Helene are very dorlie and very loveablem also. Wish she could show this side to others. thanks for a remarlablr chspter.
Oh dreiser, thank you for this latest chapter. The choppin’ broccoli song in the supermarket had me laughing my ass off. I love how close they continue to get and just hate knowing that it will be at least another two weeks before you pick up where you left off with your evilly planned ‘to be continued’. Your such a tease!
Though i am not a big shane or carmen fan, they were both very cute as you said they would be (i think i can handle things like that in small doses). But the best bit about that whole scene was Gabby fucking Deveaux! I can’t express how much i love Gabby. She’s a complete bitch, she’s got a wicked/sarcastic sense of humor, she’s fiercly intelligent, she uses words to cut people down in just nano-seconds… and she does it all with her ‘whatev’ blase attitude. Call me sick, but there’s just something about all that that makes her so damn hot. And its just so adorable that little ol’jenny gets her all embarrassed with her smiling pixie ways. I do hope that you intend to have more Gabby/Jenny flirting going on.
I like dana more in your story than in sulky’s… which is not to say that i think one of you is a better writer than the other, i enjoy you equally ;). But as i was saying, i do like dana better in this because she isn’t all stalkerish and super clingy… and she acknowleges helena being good for alice, and even sees that she is not what one would automatically assume she is.
Those are my comments for now, love your work.
woot that was really good… Hope you’ll come around and write some more of that…;)