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Breathe- Chapter 7
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Bette stood her ground, placing her hands on her hips and looking to the security guard for his next set of instructions. Detective, he began again, this time making no attempt to conceal his contempt for whatever he had decided Bette represented.
No, Bette interrupted, her patience leaving her voice quickly. I have no more clothing to remove. I am not taking off my shoes, or, she didnt finish her sentence as Tina was suddenly beside her. Their eyes met and a quiet understanding passed between them as Tina turned to the security guard. Officer, Tina began, hoping the use of the title would help scratch the obvious itch this man had when it came to self-esteem and ego.
I am so appreciative of the jobs officers like you and Detective Porter do every day, she began, offering Bette a warm, supportive smile. With terrorism and mindless crime, her voice faltered and her knees weakened as pictures of this mornings mindless crime filled her vision.
She closed her eyes and realized it would be so very easy to block this memory and erase these pictures by giving in to the comforting darkness waiting for her. She felt Bettes arms around her and heard a distant. T, Ive got you, as she slowly crumpled to the hospitals vinyl floor.
Tina jerked her head away from the offending smell, and opened her eyes to a bright beam of light. She roughly pushed the light away, not registering that a hand was holding it and tried to bring her surroundings into focus. She panicked when she realized she was looking into the dark eyes of a stranger. Im right here, T, Bette said from behind her and Tina felt a comforting hand on her shoulder. Im right here, she repeated.
Tina relaxed into Bettes hand and realized she was now lying on a bed. She could only guess by the stiffness of the sheets and the whiteness of the walls that they had finally made it beyond the metal detectors.
Where are we? she finally asked, knowing the answer but not really sure where else to start.
Clipping her pinlight back into the front pocket of her surgical scrubs, Dr. Stacey Harris responded, Tina, youre in the emergency room of Harborview Medical Center. Detective Porter,
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Sox,
Absolutely awe inspiring!
The little details that you capture so well have made this a breath taking story. The elements of attraction have been selectively and seductively sneaked in. I am wearing a big cheesy and goofy grin at Tina’s declaration “But, I’m not gay.†I think she has denial, big time.
The way this story has developed with Bette potentially charging over the line just proves how much the heart can rule the head. And how when a chance at happiness comes your way you just have to grab it with both hands, hang on for dear life and be damned of the consequences. Usually there are many but if you are with your soul mate then any storm can be weathered.
I am sitting in purgatory, waiting for Bette’s response and the test results. Will Bette tell Tina that she was the intended victim? What is the murderer’s motive?
Given your talent and hard work, I am sure that these will be answered real soon.
Thank you for this tour de force.
Your Loyal Fan.
My mind has been working overti8me.was someone after Tina or her room mate? Why Tinas picture,was it a warning or what. I will wait for the next chapter. Thanks
“But, I’m not gay.” Oh my.
I guess I was the only one who knew she was str8, ok so I only thought that because she asked to be kissed, she sounded unsure of her self. so she has no family, but I think the foster care is the perfect set up for shane to come into your story. can’t wait to see what bette does not. and to find out what she was drugged with and what form was used.
A very great and interesting chapter. Thank you
soxey – I’m lovin’ the story.. well done! I’m a sucker for the “you’re the first woman I’ve kissed” Can’t wait to see where you’re taking them. -clammy
Great chapter as always, I wonder how Bette is going to tack the news about Tina not being gay and her being the first women she has ever kissed.
OK,,AS USUAL WONDERFUL JOB IN WRITING THIS CHAPTER, YOU ARE AMAZING..NOT GAY…(YEAH RIGHT)..PLEASE POST SOON, AND THANKS
I believe you are officially the protege of Katherine V Forrest……..great stuff.
“I’m not gay” My ass your not gay Tina, Bette would turn the straightest girl gay. I hope things start to work out and that Bette will find the basterd!!!!!!!!!!! Please post soon.
Sox1,
you are now officially in my favorite authors list…please keep it coming! i love your story so much…10 bright stars for you my friend!
I think this is my first time commenting on your story. I just wanted to let you know that your story has really captured my attention. The idea is great and you do an excellent job of writing .. I am looking forward to see where you take us with this one.
OK, I have to hurry and get to work, but I had to comment. This is sooooo great. I constantly look for your updates. Great job.
oh my god, soxy, that little I’m not gay revelation was such a surprize within your story here. You are amazing me and this story is so fine, Write on but do sleep and don’t let the bedbugs bite.
Great story, I can’t get enough! Keep writing!
Traci
Excellent Sox. Bette as a flawed character is much more interesting to me. Her emotional weakness makes her more real.
Well, I had a whole theory in my mind, but with Tina’s revelation… it kinda falls apart, lol.
Anyway, great chapter, but please, please, don’t turn it into a love story, keep the mystery coming too :)
But I know you’ll find a way to juggle with the two just fine ;)
xxx
officially on my favorite authors list–that’s a good way to put it. ditto!
i’m on my way to work also. but had to comment. i waited all day yesterday hoping against hope that you’d post. this morning my wish fulfilled. love the dialogue. i’m a detail kinda girl and you give it in spades. love the background, finally, on tina. my ass shes not straight. loved their bonding moments. please post soon. wow mr. sox better appreciate your considerable talents.
I love the way this story is such a different Bette and Tina!
Very nice.
Great update I like that bette is a flawed person in the beinging it makes her more human. Can we get 2 post in one day PlEASE!!!!!!!!!!
wow.. this is my favorite story. i wait every day to read a new one so please pst soon
Tell Mr. Sox that he can’t kick you off the computer…your fans await your next installment. Better yet let me send over one of my extra laptops. That way you can write anywhere. I simply love this story.
Great story. I like how your moving it along just enough without rushing it. I know Bette will get the guy, cos she’s gotta save Tina. Tina well, girl its too late now your on your way over to the other side. Looking forward to the next update.
OK I can’t wait to fine who is the SERIAL KILLER? Please continue Thanks.
I agree with cnick It’s Kate Delafield – but better. Tina will just have to remember that “resistance is futile”:0)
To me it seems perfectly reasonable that Tina has never kissed a woman before. The trauma that she has gone through and the fact that Bette has been her life line has to affect her feelings for the brunette. I am not saying that they wouldn’t have gotten together in other circumstance, but I think Tina’s willingness to be so open with Bette is because she has been so shockingly reminded how fragile life is. That’s my take, and Sox I am like a broken record, your skill is amazing.
That was great!