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Closure – Chapter 15
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Alice was called back to an exam room minutes later. The nurse took basic vitals and then left them for Alice to get changed into the dressing gown before the doctor came in.
Dana awkwardly shuffled her feet. “Al? I really want to stay with you through this. You need someone. I know I let you down in the past, but, we were best friends and I would like to be that for you again. But I’ll leave if you are more comfortable…”
Alice thought for just a minute. “If you really don’t mind, then, I want you to stay.” She gave Dana a weak smile.
“Not at all. Let me help you get changed.”
Alice still had on sweats which should have been easy to take off, if her muscles hadn’t all stiffed up again. Dana undressed her as gently and discreetly as possible. She did not want Alice to feel uncomfortable at all.
Dana couldn’t help but notice the condition of Alice’s body.
Alice’s back looked worse than the night before. There were now bruises showing from the main welt. Dana also noticed something that she did not notice last night. There were several other bruises on Alice’s sides, arms and legs. Some looked very old and others looked as recent as the mark on her back. Dana could feel the bile rise in her throat. It took every bit of the training and control she was known for on the tennis court to not show anything outward for Alice to see except love and support.
Once Alice was changed she sat back down with Dana right by her side, holding her hand as Alice rested her head once again on her shoulder.
The doctor knocked a couple minutes later and came into the room. She was wearing regular clothes — no white doctor’s coat. She sat down, rolled her stool over to Alice and looked her in the eye.
“Hi, Alice, my name is Abby. I’m going to be your doctor.” She held out her hand and Alice shook it weakly. “And you are?” Abby queried. “Dana. I’m Alice’s friend.”
“It is very nice to meet you both. Alice? I want you to know that I am here for you and your health. I can tell Dana is very supportive, but, if you ever want her to step out of the room, you just let me know, OK?”
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Lol, I seem to hav a knack for plot lines for porn, if porn can have a plot line I don’t know that’s a bit contradictory but hey not my idea totally the L word’s, have you saw all the “It’s On” tasters? Scary. Lol. This chapter was so moving I really feel Alice’s vunerabilty and Dana’s being a rock right now. GO TEAM DANISH! Please keep Alice ok, I’m so angry!!! Oooooooo, keep the posts coming I wanna see some butt kicking!
okay. We have todays weapon. SCREW DRIVER. Dana needs to stick it in her eye balls and hears then cut off her heads. So she can’t see touch or hear Alice anymore. JACKE NEEDS TO DIE. Poor poor al. GO TEAM BETIANANE bette tina shane dana woot. Anyway. Magoose I love your story. You made my day. I have a special new years story in the works. WOOT
Thanks girls for taking care of Alice. This is what we are calling friendship.Dana shows Jackie noboy plays with the love of your life:a tennis raquet on her face
I like how your doing this.
This is a wonderful story, sad as it is. As I read I think maybe someone in Alice’s situation sees that help is available. Good friend will help Alice make it.
I’m with MutedTempest on this one this chapter was really moving. It’s really difficult to read about such a broken Alice, that spirit that we all love about her has been well and truly quashed by Jackie but I have faith in your ability to restore it for us! Thanks for posting!
I think ya fried something in my head, been staring at the screen for last few minutes with millions of thoughts shoting around..beautifully written! The legal steps are now worked on, but with Alice on autopilot she will really need the girls when she hits emotional overload.
Im sooooooo glad the girls talked Al into going to the doctor(yay). Im mad as hell and sad all in one. U are doing one hell of a job telling this story,thanks!!! PPVS PS Im the first to comment woohoooo :)~
love dana more and more. i know jackie is gonna get hers, i know i have to wait… i’ll wait… excellent job of unfolding this story…:)
Our aminals sre treated like kings,how can anyone treat a human any less. Thanks for getting her to see a Dr. Now let get the police into the picture. Hate to see Helena,Dana,Kit,Bette Tina and Shane in jail in orange suits. I would like to see someone kick butt,but do it legally,or she will become someome whipping post in jail. thanks
I just just caught up with your story from finding it just last nite and well … Brilliant!! I knew from the minute you first introduced Jackie she was bad news and i got so angry myself when she hurt Alice so anyone can understand Dana’s need to protect her. I think you have done an amazing job with all the characters there real feeling to this story. Alice and Dana are written just fantastically, Dana is so soft and gentle but at the same time strong please continue with this story its fab :) x x x
I don’t know what it was about this chapter, but it really affected me emotionally, to the point where I almost couldn’t finish reading it through the tears. I made it though, and I have to say that I just adore your version of Dana and I want to give Alice a hug. Well, I always wanna do that, but you know what I mean. I’m a bit leery since you put in that bit about the order of protection making things dangerous for Al, and the fact that you said she’s in good hands “for now.” Please don’t hurt her. I don’t wanna have to hunt you down, ya know? Lol. Seriously, this is such a moving piece of work and I absolutely love it.
You should’ve started writing sooner. ;) This is very well written, I can understand Dana’s want to protect and hold Alice. Very well, I absolutely love this magoose. :)