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Coming Back – Chapter 17
In the kitchen, Carmen takes her stuff to leave. Marina is doing the breakfast.
Marina : Why don’t you stay for breakfast and see what happened with Shane.
Carmen : She I don’t thanks.
Marina : You okay ?
Carmen starts crying. Marina gets close to her.
Carmen : She prefers her drug to me.
Marina : I’m sure she doesn’t. Let her some time, stay close to her.
Carmen : I love her so much, and leaving her like that kills me, but she doesn’t want my help.
Marina : I know. She loves you too. And I know she needs right now.
Carmen : mmmm
Marina : Let her some time, she’ll come back to you, don’t worry.
Carmen walks towards the door and waves at Marina.
Marina : Call me, okay?
Carmen : Yeah.
Carmen walks outside and sits in her car. She takes a deep breath, but doesn’t start the car. In the meantime, Marina walks to Shane’s door. She knocks but hears no answer. She knocks again, and still no answer.
Marina : Shane ?
Still no answer.
Marina : breakfast is ready.
Still no answer. Marina puts her ear on the door and tries to listen to what is happening in the room, and she barely hears the bed springs moving. She opens the door and find Shane on the bed, having spasms. The syringe is still in Shane’s arm. Blood comes out of her nose and a lot of saliva from her mouth. Shane finally stops moving. She’s unconscious. Her head slowly turns towards Marina. Her eyes are wide open. Seeing this atrocity, Marina runs out of the house to get Carmen who is still in her car, crying. Seeing Marina running, Carmen gets out of the car.
Carmen : What is happening ?
Marina : Shane !!.. she .. she..
Marina doesn’t have to explain. Carmen runs in the house then in Shane’s room. Shane is still unconscious on the bed. Carmen takes Shane in her arms. She sits on the bed and takes Shane on her. She puts her hand on Shane’s head. With her other hand she take of the syringe from Shane’s arm.
Carmen : Baby! Baby! Do you hear me?
Marina gets in the room with the phone.
Marina : Ambulance is coming!
Carmen is crying.
Carmen : It’s okay baby, ambulance is coming. Please stay with me stay with me I love you baby . Please stay with me..
It’s already 5 minutes since the ambulance have been called and they have not arrived yet. Carmen still hold Shane in her arms.
Carmen : You okay baby ?
No answer. Carmen feel Shane’s body becoming heavier and heavier. Shane doesn’t breath anymore.
Carmen : (panicking) SHANE !! SHANE !! PLEASE BABY!! HOLD ON!!
Carmen is crying so hard, she shakes Shane really hard she wants to wake Shane up.
Carmen : SHANE !! PLEEEEEEEAAAASSSE!!!! NNOOOOoooOOOOO!!
Marina looks at the scene, crying. She knows that there is nothing they can do to bring her back. After a while, ambulance arrive. They notice that Shane is O.D.ing , so they get out of their bag an adrenaline shot, they stab the poor woman chest with it, but it’s already too late The adrenaline shot is the only thing that can bring back the dead. There is nothing more they can do. One of the health professional writes down on a piece of paper the exact time, hour, minutes and seconds. They wrap Shane’s body in the body bag. And one of them takes it to the ambulance. The other one is comforting Carmen and Marina. The health professional politely invites the two women to the hospital to figure out what’s next. He leaves the house.
Carmen sits in the middle of Shane’s room crying. Marina sits besides her and take her in her arms. Marina starts crying too. There is nothing on this planet that can make Carmen stop crying. She stays there for hours crying, crying for the only person in her life she had love by a pure love, a true love. She knew Shane was the one. She’ll never know if Shane knew that. The only thing Carmen knows now is that she gave her heart to Shane, and now Shane left with Carmen’s heart, and Shane will have it with her, forever.
The End.
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Thanks for leavinf comments on your general appreciation of the whole story (17 chapters). I want to know how you feel about the story. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Thanks for posting. Some people has a death wish and I guess Shane was one of them.
Yes, it’s true “all good things must come to an end”. This was Sad and Beautiful. Thank you so very much for the wonderful story, I thoroyughly enjoyed it. I’ll pop over to Life.com and see what you plant there. GOOD LUCK IN YOUR FUTURE WRITINGS,as I know they too will be wonderful…Until we meet again..
I think the end is a good one, even if Shane died.
Wish you good luck with your next story.
This was an excellent story. Thanks for posting. 2 thumbs up!